ANCILLIARY DRAFT ANALYSISCHARLOTTE MARTIN

ADVERTISEMENT & DOUBLE PAGE SPREAD DRAFTS

PEER ANALYSIS / FEEDBACK

Grade (A)I used different fonts and sizes which I aimed to achieve. I should make the ‘the real story’ bigger and more effective to add to the different font sizes and variations.

I also need to finish the article and fill in the gaps at the bottom and on the right hand side.

Grade (B)I used different fonts and sizes, I should add the blue colour from my DPS into my article which I agree with. I used the blue to match Penelope’s eyes, this will be taken into consideration.

Grade (B/A)I need to use different fonts to make the advert effective, instead of sticking with just one.

PEER ANALYSIS / FEEDBACK

Grade (A)The image reflects the article and it looks professional!I need to fill the gap above the first image of the girl (Jess) on the right hand side. I will add a different section to the right hand side of the DPS.

I need to pull the quote out a little more to be more effective and to stand out.

Grade (B)My peer doesn’t like the font on the title and I agree. It’s taking me a long time to decide on a font that I think looks professional and effective, so I will take this on board and try to find a font that fits in with the theme and looks extremely effective.

PEER ANALYSIS / FEEDBACK

Grade (A)Both these comments have no improvements, but they like the colour scheme, image and layout. I like my layout but I feel I need to make the colour scheme more evident and improve this slightly.

Grade (A)Again, these comments say the advert looks professional, which of course I am aiming for. I feel as if to improve I need to add different fonts and add in the colour scheme more.

MY PERSONAL FEEDBACK

I feel as if my DPS and Advert need to be improved due to the colour scheme not being consistent throughout. Firstly, my DPS layout needs to be more structured and have the main parts standing out more (the image, enlarged quote and headline).

I want my advert to use a wider range of fonts and my colour scheme of blue to be adapted into this too. I am very happy with the image of the attacker on the right, but I want the image of Penelope to stand out a little more to balance out the tension in the advert itself.

Another peer stated:“Double page spread is good I like the picture, good layout and good information, it’s all good. You could add some lines in, to separate the page maybe.” This will also be taken on board as I agree I need some more structure perhaps.

This is my final draft and I will be making some more changes after the feedback I have received from my peers.