Digital Graphic Narrative

Development

Karim Abdalla

Shape Task

EvaluationWhat did you like about your image?I really like how you can instantly identify which animal it is, even though the animal I have chosen, which is a red panda, is a little obscure. This is due to the simplicity in some places of the picture, such as the main torso and legs, but complicated enough in parts like the tail giving it stripes to make it stand out and really tell you what animal it is. I also like the effects that I’ve used on the shapes to improve how the picture looks and add more detail, even though I didn’t use effects like the gradient tool which I didn’t really feel would have fit in my picture, I did use the Gaussian blur. I used this tool on the stripes on the tail, the inner face, belly and ears. I did this to simulate a fur effect and would have done it all over the panda however when I tried this I felt that it made it look like it was moving and I didn’t like this, because of this I reserved the Gaussian blur tool to parts of the panda that wasn’t on edges, and I feel the effect it made worked really well when applied this way. The next thing I like about this image is the colour scheme of the panda itself, I chose to keep it simple, only really using three colours, which are orange, a peach like colour and gray, and then black and white. Because of this it kept the picture simple but definable and looks very good as I am going for a cartoon type design, as well as this you can tell what the animal is, which is needed for an animal like a red panda which is slightly obscure.

What would you improve if you did it again?One of the biggest things in the picture that I would improve if I did it again would be the back legs, or leg in my case. I really feel like it should have had two back legs, but I couldn’t make it work due to how the panda is standing the original picture I copied the picture off not being able to see the back leg fully if at all, however I feel for my picture I should have put it in, but a mix of the panda just not looking correct and the claws not looking right on the leg meant I couldn’t make it work. Another thing I would improve if I made the picture again is the face, I feel like the face looks very emotionless and in a cartoon character this is a very bad trait due to the face being the only real part of the cartoon which shows any emotion, because of this I would change the face and make it more expressive and add more detail.

Shape Task

EvaluationWhat did you like about your image?I really like how the animal I chose for my work actually looks in cartoon form, I really feel like a corgi works really well in cartoon form, better than most of the other dogs that I looked at to create in a cartoon form. I feel this is because a corgi is a small fat dog, and this means that it has very round edges, making the transition to cartoon form very simple, but look good because cartoons prefer curves to sharp edges. Another thing I like about my image is how the shading of the fur, I created this by going to the select drop down menu in Photoshop and then selecting colour range and choosing the fur on the back, front and tail of the dog and then pressing okay and then by fading and rubbing out areas I don’t want to make it fit. The last thing I like about my work is the colour scheme, I used a very basic colour scheme on this piece of work, and by doing this I have made the dog look how it is suppose to look, but look cartoony enough through the block shapes to keep the interesting cartoon look. The last thing I like about the image especially is the way the front legs overall look. I really feel like it actually looks like the legs blend correctly into the body, which is a hard thing to do on shape imagery due to most of the shapes either being too sharp or too round, and because of this it makes the image hard too blend together, however on the front legs I really feel I have done a good job doing this and really like the outcome.

What would you improve if you did it again?The main thing I would improve on my work is the way the nose and the eyes look. I feel I could have put a lot more detail into this part of the photograph, just generally taking more time to do it and I feel it could have turned out a lot better than it did. One of the things about it that I don’t like especially is that it is so plain when compared to the busyness of the dogs face around it in the mouth and the eyes, when you compare these things to the nose, in which it is a black spot with two gray ovals in it, it looks very simple and boring. The next thing I don’t really like about the dog is it’s tail and back foot. I don’t feel like they have enough detail in the tail, feeling it should be a lot more fluffier looking. If I was going to go back and try to fix this I would probably would have gone and used a Gaussian blur on the tail, and this would have caused it to look fluffier and I feel would have given a better effect. For the back foot of the dog I would probably make the leg join colours half way down the leg, instead of down the centre of the leg, I feel this would fix the problem with how it transitions from the brown to the white on the back leg.

Rotoscope

EvaluationWhat did you like about your image?The first thing I like about this image is how the I used the colour range tool to make the hair and the beard on him. I really feel this added some good depth to the picture and helped it out a lot to pop out and actually look like the person that it is actually based on, which is a common thing that doesn’t happen with rotoscoped images of people due to the images looking flat and very squared at the corners, which obviously isn’t how people really look in person. Another thing I really liked about my image is how the eyes both seem to be looking the same way and actually look to have some sort of emotion in them, they don’t just look flat. I think I achieved this by not actually putting an inner pupil into the eyes, but putting the white spots in the corner of his eyes to make it look like light are going into them and actually made the eyes be looking in the same direction, which I feel instills emotion into the rotoscoped image which is otherwise quite an emotionless art style when compared to other things you can do, such as actual photography which generally has a lot more emotion in it.

What would you improve if you did it again?The main thing I really didn't like on this image is the way the nose looks, because of the angle that the picture is taken at, the nose on the original picture was very hard to actually turn into a rotoscoped image using the techniques I generally use to actually create noses, which I do by drawing the outline of the nose and then letting the viewer of the pictures brain tell them it's a nose, like an optical illusion. However for this picture I should have maybe taken more time actually experimenting with actually drawing the nose as a separate entity, or just taken more time perfecting the optical illusion and making it work well, however I didn't get around to it and feel because of this my work suffered quite a lot on this piece of work because of this. Another thing I would do to improve this piece of work would be to add more detail to the shirt, I left the shirts on both of my rotoscopes very plain, however I feel now I am looking back on it that this was a bad idea, and I should have added more detail to this picture as I like the base image of the shirt, and the design of it, a lot more.

Rotoscope

EvaluationWhat did you like about your image?The main thing I really like about this image especially, is the hair and beard, I really like the way I have used the colour range tool to create a texture to the hair, which in generally makes the image pop out from its background and grab your attention, which is very important for rotoscoped images, as they are generally very flat looking in concept, however by sparingly using this technique I feel It has added to my picture as a whole. Another thing I really like about this image is the nose, due to the last picture going so poorly in this part, I really feel like I stepped it up for this one, my effect working really well of tracing the nose instead of actually drawing it, because of implementing this effect I feel that the picture overall gets improved, and I’m generally really proud of how this part of the picture in particular look, especially when compared to my last rotoscoped image. The last thing I really like about this image, that sticks out to me, is the effect that I used to make the neck become lighter as it gets to the bottom, even though this is really hard to see, the neck actually becomes lighter as it gets to the bottom. I did this by applying a very faint gradient onto the neck, by using the eyedropper tool, I got the colour of the skin, and then set it to gradient to a colour, very similar, but different enough to add a fade. I really feel this adds to the work a lot because generally for rotoscoped imagery the big shapes are quite simple, and only one colour, while this small effect makes this not the case.

What would you improve if you did it again?If I was to redo this piece of work the first thing I would change would be the moustache, it really looks too blocky when compared to the rest of the facial hair in the beard, I would go about this by not making the moustache one block colour with colour range highlights in it, instead of this I would just make it a colour range effect, I feel this would make the image better as for one I wouldn’t have the big blocky moustache, which can work, just not here, and would instead have an effect that more suites the actual person in the pictures likeness, which again adds to the work. The other thing I would do to this picture which I feel would improve it would be to add a drop shadow to the main part of the face and onto the neck (this probably should be done around the eyes as well, to add depth, and make them not look flat). I would do this because I feel overall even though I added the gradient, it wasn’t a strong enough effect to make head and the neck truly look like different entities like on the other image I created where I used this effect.

Text Based

EvaluationWhat did you like about your image?The main thing I like about my images of text is the way the lightning bolt connects the first four letters of my name and then is connected to the "M" with the copyright symbol which is in the same colour. This also looks really good because of the bright yellow having the same gradient over it as the red on the text as well, however the gradient, like on the red, is very faint, and isn't the main attention grabber of the text. And also because the gradient in inverted, so for the red to black gradient on the text itself, the black is at the bottom of the gradient and the red is at the top, however on the yellow lightning bolt, the gradient is reversed, having the yellow on the bottom and the black at the top. This connects the text and the lightning bolt better and makes it stick out more, if it was black at the bottom for both of them, then the bottom of the lightning bolt and the text would blend into one, and overall not look as good. Another thing I like about my text in general is the effect I have done on the text at the bottom right with the counterstrike logo across it. This effect has been achieved by making the size of the gap in-between the text smaller and choosing a bold font which lets you get a lot of information in the text, without the bold font and the gap being made shorter, the effect wouldn't work as well, if at all. I pulled up the image I wanted behind my text, and created a clipping mask which results in the effect you can see.

What would you improve if you did it again?The main thing I feel I could improve in my text is the background image for the text at the bottom right, I should have probably picked an image with no writing on it, the reason I think this would have been a good idea because text is a lot harder to read when there is gaps in the middle of the word where it passes over to the next letter, while a picture doesn't have the same problem to as much of a degree, with your brain filling in the blanks and you can even position the picture to make it so the blanks have not a lot of the picture that's important in them, which is not really possible with text as you need every letter to help you read the word more clearly. The other big thing I would do is add a picture of the flash and use a clipping mask, make it small, put a colour overlay on it of a red and yellow gradient and put it in the bottom right of my finished text. As I have tried to give it a theme of the super hero "the flash" however, apart from the lightning bolt, you can't really tell this, I feel by adding this to the image, it would fill in the blank space in the "M" and would overall add to the theme of the text.

Comic Book 1

EvaluationWhat did you like about your image?For image one there are a few things I like about it. The main one being that you can still see both his arms and the light coming from the sky behind him. I found this quite difficult to do, this because it didn’t allow me to use the threshold tool which I used in my other pictures to great success due to it either making the picture too dark and you not being able to see his arms or axe, or too light into which the sky would just flood through the picture making it all white behind him, or at least too white for my liking for the type of idea I was going for with this picture. The second thing I like a lot about this picture is the way you can still faintly make most of the things that were in the original image, such as the buildings behind him, and you get a decent idea of the armour he’s wearing, this was tricky too do, however after messing with the lighting details and using the luminosity option, it gave you the glow you can see in the final picture in which the colours of his body are almost coming away from him.

What would you improve if you did it again?The main thing I would do if I was too remake the image again would be too try and actually make the axe more visible, I would go about this by trying out different styles of print mixed with this one, maybe using rotoscope and using the polygonal lasso to put the axe on a different layer and define it a lot more, making it pop out more and adding some more depth to the picture, this would also make the angles of the axe more defined and would make the head of the axe a lot easier to see, as now, unless you know what it is, it just looks like a stick, and the head of the axe is almost invisible due to the colours of the buildings behind him and the colour of his axe being a very similar colour, and this is all made worse by the sky being so white and overpowering parts of the image. The next thing I would try to improve if I did this again would be too add an eye to his head, I feel this is necessary as at the moment the body of the character in the centre is very defined however the head has nothing on it that you really want to focus on. Because of this I would go about adding an eye, I feel it would sort out this issue. I would add it by rotoscoping the base images eye and then just making it a black dot and put it on the layer above the image.

Comic Book 2

EvaluationWhat did you like about your image?Image two is honestly my favourite picture overall, probably because it’s the only comic book character I actually did to a comic book Photoshop style, and because of this I really feel it turned out great. I achieved the overall image by using a low threshold and a low filter gallery effect. This is probably the closest out of all of my work to the original picture, but this is because the original picture didn’t need a lot of editing to become a picture that looks really great. I also made this picture to show how you don’t actually have to adjust the levels of an image too much to make a big difference in the picture, when comparing it to the original image. The main place you can see this is the eyes of this picture, the eyes in the original picture where a bright orange, and while the lighting option I picked dulled down a lot of the colour on the page, the orange was strong enough to stay, but only slightly and has picked up a lot of shadow, making it look like he is looking at something incredibly intimidating and stronger than him, which is a common theme in the super hero genre. The other big thing I like about the image is how the light that was there to begin with is still there, such as on his forehead and on his shoulder, there was reflections of light, and while they are still there, they appear slightly differently when you’ve applied cut out filter gallery to it, making the reflections look harsher and stand out a lot more as a more prominent part of the image, while before it would just blend in and add subtly to the picture.

What would you improve if you did it again?The main thing I would do to this image to improve it is maybe see what the eyes would look like if the orange tint on the goggles over the eyes would look like if it was brighter, and even though I like it how it is when it comes to that aspect of the image, I can’t help but feel, because the image is not very bright while the actually super hero is bright red and silver, that adding brighter eyes by rotoscoping and selecting the outline of the eye holes and then brightening them up couldn’t hurt and would add brightness to a photo that’s otherwise very dark, adding a nice contrast where there really isn’t any in this picture. The other big thing I would do to this image would be to add some kind of light from the bottom right of the picture, this is because when you look at the picture, there is a lot of evidence of light entering this picture from that angle, such as the reflections on the top of his helmet and the shadow cast by the front of his mask, however In my picture there isn’t actually any light entering the image, and this makes it look slightly strange I would fix this by using the light effects tool under the filter menu to create a light coming in from the bottom right that is more prominent, and fixing the problem.

Comic Book 3

EvaluationWhat did you like about your image?Out of all three of the images this is by far the most striking, and different to the source material that I used and there is a good reason for this, this picture has the most editing out of the three pictures and I had to apply some interesting effects to get it where I wanted it. The big thing I did to this image was to put the threshold up incredibly high compared to my other two pictures and it created an effect where I couldn’t see a lot of the original image, however I wanted the main features of the picture to stay, these being the bow, a decent amount of his body, his quiver and arrows and his arms. I got all of these things in the picture while still using the incredibly high threshold, and because of this I feel the image has turned out really well and exactly how I wanted it. Another thing I like about this image is the way the shadows and the light in-between them actually build up the picture and work off of each other to create an image, instead of just being boring and the only real thing you can see in the image being the character itself, but happily I have also managed to keep some of the background, and even though there isn’t much, there is enough to create a scene instead of just having the character.

What would you improve if you did it again?The main thing I feel could be improved with my third picture is the hair, you really can’t see it, however when it comes to the character I have chosen, his hair is one of the most important parts of his look and is very important in his character design. Because of this I should have made it so I can see the hair more and better, with only a very small amount of the actual hair making it into my final edit. I would do this by actually taking the base image and then using the polygonal lasso to rotoscope some more of the hair into the space where his hair would actually be, this would fix the biggest and most striking issue with my image. The next thing I would do, would be again to use the polygonal lasso and actually put a white pupal into the right eye, I feel this would add more definition to the face, and because of the lack of outline on the face, and detail in general, this would help with visualising the shape of it, because of the style I have chosen while editing this image.

Photography

EvaluationWhat did you like about your image?I really like the way there are three different layers of information in the picture. There is a foreground layer, which is the end of the book cases, this draws the eye in and makes the picture more inviting, it also gives a leading line, which gives the eye a line to follow through the image which starts at the end of the book case, follows the book case and then leads your eyes through the image all the way to the photos on the walls at the back. The next thing I like about the image is the way the image has so many colours and information in it, however on first glance it seems very simple and this is nice, the fact that my image actually has depth and is interesting on first glance, and then has depth and a lot of information when you look at it for a little bit longer. I also like the way all the shadows look underneath the book cases and at the end of the books, and the way you can see through the books into more shadow, it adds a depth to the photo without any editing, which I really like.

What would you improve if you did it again?I think I would definitely try and modify the white balance on the camera, either through Photoshop or just by retaking the image, which wouldn’t be very hard and would increase the image quality a lot without doing a lot of work as this would only take about five minutes to do. The next thing I would do to improve the pictures would be to retake the picture and get more of the book case end at the right hand side of the image into the image, I feel this would create a stronger leading line, and would help the image out a lot quality wise. Either this or completely crop the end of the book case out, which would also add to the leading line because this would allow you to get more of the book case in the picture, or just allow you to solely concentrate on the book case and the pictures at the back of the picture on the wall.

Photography

EvaluationWhat did you like about your image?The first thing I like about the image is the way that the cars windscreens don’t have any reflection in them, I did this because I didn’t want anything in the shot I don’t want, and this includes the college, I also did this because in a children’s book there wouldn’t be any reflections in the windscreens because it is drawn, and reflections can look a little bit odd when an image is drawn instead of the picture being taken. The next thing I like about this image is the way that the building site, even though behind the cars, really looks to be towering above them, even though the cars are actually on a two story car park, and aren’t really that much lower down than the building site, however the angle of the picture, and the vantage point I have taken it from has given this effect.

What would you improve if you did it again?If I was to redo the image, I would probably go and either edit the picture set the white balance correctly, as the white balance in the picture isn’t really done correctly, and this has ended with this picture looking blue and depressing, which really wasn’t the effect I was going for when I was taking the picture as I wanted the picture to be interesting, bright and cheerful, however with the blue hue, I really feel that this doesn’t give the desired effect. Another way I could set the white balance up correctly is if I was to just retake the picture, however I don’t think this is very reliable in this picture as it would take a little time to set up the camera and then take the picture without getting reflections off of the windscreens. Another thing I’d like to improve if I did this picture again would be that I would like to have more people actually building on the building site, I wish I could somehow set up the picture, however this isn’t really possible and I’d just have to wait around until I can take the correct image.

Illustration

EvaluationWhat did you like about your image?Even though I think the drawing overall isn't that amazing, due to the nose especially, I think parts of it do look pretty good, and some of the effects I went for worked really well considering my drawing skills aren't really that good compared to a lot of other peoples out there. However I think the shading effects I have gone for, especially around the neck and the top of the hood actually go what I was going for, to simulate darkness and that you can't see a good amount of the left side of his face. Another thing I like about the picture is how I have distinguished the pitch black of the mask around his eyes away from the darkness and shadow from around his neck, I did this by drawing in the shadow with the pencil, and then using my index finger to smudge the pencil, and create a smoky, I didn't do this for the mask, and this caused the difference to occur. I also used the same effect to do the stubble around his mouth, using my finger to fade the pencil, and felt it worked really well.

What would you improve if you did it again? I actually don't mind anything about the picture at all, and I think it looks decently good, however one of the big things I massively dislike about the image is the nose, it looks nothing like the actual person I am trying to draw, and I actually had the nose correct, however rubbed it out by accident when I did the side of the face incorrectly, and then I couldn't get the nose right when trying to do it again. If I was to remake this image, I would probably use multiple sheets of paper, and then when I get the nose right, trace it onto my finished product. This would also solve the problem with accidently rubbing parts of my work out. Another thing I think could be improved on my drawing is that I feel I should have done more of the body, I didn't because I felt it would look wrong without colour, however I feel in hindsight it would actually add a lot to the work, maybe adding some background as well to give some context to the image.

Initial Ideas

Mood board explination

A lot of my pictures of the actual characters, this is the three little pigs and the big bad wolf, is from Disney's rendition of the three little pigs, however I will not just be rotoscoping these images and copying them, I chose these pictures to show the humanization that I want to apply when I create my children's book and how I want to use a similar style, I also like the colour schemes on the characters and may take some ideas from them, such as that tone of pink on the pigs, along with the eyes and the way the wolf has a very bright pair of trousers on to make them stick out against his black fur.

The next thing on the mood board is the house designs, again while I'm not going to straight up rotoscope these images and copy them, I will be using them as a base idea for what I want the housing to look like, I think the idea of the houses being bright against the background which will be a forest is going to be needed to make them stand out, and the idea of all the houses just being one room is a good idea as it makes them easier to create and place into the world in the book.

The last thing I have put on my mood board is the idea I want to go for with the page layout, and the amount of text I want, and text size when compared to the amount of illustrations on the page, and the idea that the writing is not as much of the focus on the page as the picture, and while I wont be using the exact same idea as my page is going to be square as this allows better illustration, I feel that the idea behind it still stands, and this picture will help out a lot when designing my book.

FontsFonts for title of book

(front cover)

Fonts for text in the book (front cover)

Even though the mount font has quite a few things about it that I like, I feel in the end I will end up using the Bambi font for the title of the book and the front cover, the reason for this is it is a little bit more bold as a whole than mount while keeping the serif flicks at the end of the letters, which I feel would be better for ,if this book ever was printed, people seeing it on a shelf and being able to recognise the name as the name " three little pigs" is a very big selling factor in the children's story book industry.

I like the look of the mount font for the title of the front cover of the book because it has a design that's wavy, which I like as I feel for the age range that this book will be catered towards it will make the book look inviting and interesting. another thing I like about these fonts, which applies to all of them is the way that they are all serif fonts, which means the letters have little flicks at the end of them which help the eye glide over them and read them easier, which is good for smaller children that are learning how to read.

For the fonts in the book, I think either of these fonts could be a contender, and I will end up using either depending on what I think looks better with the comic book art style I am going to apply to the book. I feel that, just from looking at the fonts, that I will end up using Sexsmith as I feel the flicks on the end of the letters are a little bit stronger than the Gentium, and this will help when children are actually reading the book, however I am willing to change my mind depending on what they look like with the art style.

ProposalDimensionsDimensions:

The dimensions that I am choosing for my book are 24cm vertically and by 25 cm Horizontally, I have chosen these dimensions because I feel that it will benefit me in the long run because of how I want a lot of illustrations in my work. As well as this, from my research, generally books with more writing in are taller and thinner, and books with more pictures in are shorter and fatter, and as my book has a lot of illustrations, I decided on the latter for my book.

Number of pages:

As for my book length, or number of pages I decided on between eight to twelve pages, probably leaning towards ten to eleven pages. I have done this because kids books are generally shorter, however because my book is for four to nine year olds, which is the middle of the children's book market age range, I decided to take the same angle with the amount of pages in the book.

Export Format

PDFAdvantages: PDF's are easy and quick to create. Because of this I will find it easy to, once I have completed all of the work in Photoshop, place it all into a PDF and send it to the tutor, or upload it to my website of choice.

PDF's are compact and able to compress large files, and as in the past I have struggled with sending large files over email due to size limitations of the file, a PDF will sort this issue out, making the Photoshop files (which are generally very big) a lot smaller and easier to transport, this also applies if I want to upload my work to a website, a PDF will make this easier and faster as the file size is smaller.

PDF's are self contained, meaning that it will get my documents, and work in general across clearly and avoid any problems where possible, which means my work will look exactly as I made it when someone else opens it.

Disadvantages: PDF's are difficult to edit, which may cause some problems if when I send in my work, I get it sent back and am told to edit some of the pictures, however this shouldn't be too much of a problem because I should have backups of the JPEGS of my work, and I should even have the PSD's, so I'll even have the layers, meaning that i will just have to make a new PDF and put all the files back in.

Story Overview

My story is that of the Three little pigs, however mine has a slight change at the end, as I feel that my change will make it a lot more child friendly and make the story overall have more of a meaning. The story starts with the three little pigs all deciding to make a house, however they can't agree on the correct building material. in the background there is a wolf, watching them argue and then watches them all walk a way making their own houses. The first pig makes his house out of straw, which quickly gets broken down by the wolf, and the pig runs to the second house made by the second pig, which is made of sticks, when this house is also broken down by the wolf, they all run to the third house made of bricks. This is when the three little pigs realize there are more of them than the wolf, and as the wolf breaks the front door down, the three pigs chase the wolf away.

Deadline

20th of march

Audience

The audience I am trying to target with my children's book is obviously children. However to be precise, the age I am trying to target is the age range of 4-9, I am doing this by including a lot of illustrations, however keeping the level of illustrations to around 2/3rds of the page, the last 1/3rd would be text and telling the story through it. the gender is very unisex, and while all the characters are boys, the only way you can really tell this is through their names, which are only really mentioned once, and just because a book has no female characters, this doesn't mean it's targeted towards men only and doesn't mean that females can't enjoy the story. I feel my book is also marketed towards all the different classes, as it is only around 10 pages long, maybe less, I feel if the book was sold it would be incredibly cheap, meaning anyone could buy it, and I don't lose any of my audience in that regard. as for location, I feel my book would sell primarily in english speaking countries due to it being in english and is not printed in any other language, meaning other language speaking people couldn't read it. As for other general characteristics, I feel because my book is going to have a little bit more writing in than others of it's age range it will be for kids who can read a little bit better than average for my age range as well as this I think my book will be sold more to belongers, out of the different stereotypes of people as the three little pigs is a fairy tail, and these are generally famous because everyone knows them, and the parents of the children had it read to them when they were little and are now passing it on to their kids through my book.

Production Methods

I am going to make the base images, and pages to the book in photoshop, I am using photoshop as I feel that it is by far the best editing tool for the kind of idea I want to create, having hundreds of tools, options and filters which no other post production tool has. I will then export the files as a JPEG and a PSD, I chose JPEG as it holds file quality without being huge files like the PSD however the JPEG doesn't save layers, and because of this I want to export it as a PSD incase I want to go back and change things in the files, having the layers I originally used helps out with this and makes everything a lot easier. The last thing I will do is put the files into a PDF, doing this will mean I can order the pages into the order I want and then send them/Upload them to whoever needs them, while keeping the file size low, which wouldn't be the case if I sent the files separately, as well as this, they wouldn't be ordered and numbered.

What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?

High level of detail that clearly explains the story and aspects that you want to achieve.

I think you need to talk more about the sort of words that you will be using. Will it be simple words that the child can read as soon as they first read the book? Or is it going to be words that are more complex and is meant for their development and learning?

What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been further developed?

Good description of your pictures on the mood boards. And lots of sub-categories in your mind maps which helps to understand your points of view.

I Think your first mood board needs some more photos so hat you can get a wider range of inspiration than being confined to a couple of base designs.

What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?

You have gone into great detail in your work and explained everything really well.I think the plot idea is good as you have tried to think about the audience of the story an make it much friendlier for them.

An area which you could improve on is the age range, as 4-9 is quite a big ages gap and children develop very quickly in this time and by the ages of 8-9 may be looking for something a little bit more advanced in a book.

What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been further developed?

The mind maps are very well laid out and paint a good picture of exactly how you want your book to look and read.I think you have picked some good texts for children as they are all very easy to read and also look very good.

You could talk about how you could use typography in the text, for instance having it closer together/further apart, or how close you want the lines to be spaced.I feel that the mood board needs a little bit of work as it is very simplistic at the moment. Producing another mood board of ideas may benefit you, cream.

What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?

High level of detail throughout the proposal. I like the adaptation of the story as it is more child friendly.

The age range you have chosen is rather wide for children as there will be a big difference from what a 4 year old can read to a 9 year old.

What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been further developed?

Large amount of detail explaining your mood board choices. This makes your concept clear and easy for you priers to understand your intentions.

You could include a wider range of images however if you are clear on how you want your book to look, this mood board shows your intentions.

Feedback Summary

Sum up your feedback.The main thing that seems to need improving with my idea generation is my mood board. I apparently haven’t put enough information in it and in generally isn’t enough pictures. Another thing that got mentioned a lot is the high level of detail I have put in throughout all of the work (the idea generation and the proposal). Another thing that has been pointed out as well is how wide the reading gap is and how much you advance in reading between the ages of 4-9. The last thing people seemed to pick up on was that my story was good and easy to understand, because of being well described. Some things that a lot of people seemed to agree on is the fact that my mood boards where really good with a large amount of information and very well laid out.

Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?Honestly, I agree with the part about the high amounts of detail throughout my work, it’s one of the big things I strive for and I’m glad other people picked up on this due to how important it is to me. Another part that I agree with is that I think I should have included a larger range of images, I feel I could have done a lot more on my mood board, however I ran out of ideas of what to put on there, I should have put a bigger variety of drawing styles as I feel this would have added a lot to it, and would have given me even more inspiration for designing my book. Also agree about making it more children friendly, and how this is a good thing, I felt that the original three little pigs book was a bit violent for little kids, and even though there are swords in my book, there is no hinting at death and there is no obvious death, which I think is better for kids.

Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?I disagree that I needed to talk more about the different words I would be using and how they would be toned down for simplicity for children. I disagree because this is pretty obvious that they will be simple, because they always are in children’s books. Another reason I disagree with this is because if you scroll down to my script, the words are there, and you can see they’re simple, and as well as this, there is no part in the proposal that asks you to talk about the different styles of writing in the book. Another thing I disagree with is that 4-9 is too big of an age gap, I feel this age gap is fine as some people just naturally learn reading slower than others, and it will be useful for them to have a book that is marketed towards them and is simple enough for them to read.

Storyboards

Storyboards

Original ScriptThe Three Little Pigs By Paul Galdone

Narrator: Once upon a time there was an old sow with three little pigs. She had no money to keep them, so she sent them off to seek their fortune. The first little pig met a man with a bundle of straw, and said to him:

Pig 1: Please, man, give me that straw to build me a house. (Innocently)

Narrator: So the man did, and the little pig built his house with it. Along came a wolf. He knocked at the door, and said:

Wolf: Little pig, little pig, let me come in. (persuasively)

Pig 1: No, no, (with fright) Not by the hair of my chinny chin chin! (loud and proud)

Wolf: Then I’ll huff, and I’ll puff, and I’ll blow your house in (Loud and Blow)

Narrator: so the wolf huffed, and he puffed and he blew the house in. And he ate up the first little pig. (sadly) The second little pig met a man with a bundle of sticks, and said:

Pig 2: Please, man, give me those sticks to build me a house.

Narrator: So the man did, and the little pig built his house with them. Then, along came the wolf, and said:

Wolf: Little pig, little pig, let me come in. (persuasively)

Pig 2: No, no, (with fright) Not by the hair of my chinny chin chin! (loud and proud)

Wolf: Then I’ll huff, and I’ll puff, and I’ll blow your house in (Loud and Blow)

Narrator: So he huffed, and he puffed, and he huffed, and he puffed, and at last he blew the house in. And he ate up the second little pig. (sadly) The third little pig met a man with a load of bricks and said:

Pig 3: Please, man, give me those bricks to build me a house. (Innocently)

Narrator: So the man did, and the little pig built his house with them. Soon the same wolf came along, and said:

Wolf: Little pig, little pig let me come in. (persuasively)

Pig 3: No, no! Not by the hair of my chinny chin chin. (Loud and Proud)

Wolf: Then I’ll huff, and I’ll puff, and I’ll blow your house in. (Loud and Blow)

Narrator: Well, he huffed, and he puffed and he huffed and he puffed and he huffed and he puffed. But…. He could NOT blow the house in! At last the wolf stopped huffing and puffing, and said:

Wolf: (out of breath) little pig, I know where there is a nice field of turnips.

Pig 3: Where? (curiously)

Wolf: On Mr. Smith’s farm. I will come for you tomorrow morning. We will go together and get some turnips for dinner.

Pig 3: Very well. What time will you come?

Wolf: Oh, at six o’clock

Narrator: Well the little pig got up at five and got the turnips before wolf came to his house.

Wolf: Little pig, are you ready?

Pig 3: READY! I have come back again and I got a nice potful of turnips for my dinner.

Narrator: The wolf was very anger. But then he thought of another way to get the little pig, so he said:

Wolf: Little pig, I know where there is a nice apple tree.

Pig 3: Where?

Wolf: Down at Merry Garden. I will come for you at five o’clock tomorrow morning and we will get some apples.

Original Script

Original ScriptNarrator: Well, the little pig got up the next morning at four o’clock, and went off for the apples. He wanted to get back home before the wolf came. But it was a long way to Merry Garden, and then he had to climb the tree. Just as he was climbing back down with his basket full of apples, he saw the wolf coming!

Wolf: Little pig! You got here before me! Are the apples nice?

Pig3: Yes, very! I will throw you one down to you.

Narrator: And he threw the apple as far as he could throw. While the wolf ran to pick it up, the little pig jumped down and ran home. The next day the wolf came again and said to the little pig:

Wolf: Little pig, there is a fair at Shanklin this afternoon. Would you like to go?

Pig3: Oh, yes. When will you come to get me?

Wolf: At three

Narrator: Well, the little pig went off at two o’clock and bought a butter churn at the fair. He was going home with it when he saw the wolf coming! The little pig jumped into the butter churn to hide. The churn fell over and rolled down the hill with the little pig in it! This frightened the wolf so much that he turned around and ran home. Later the wolf went to the little pig’s house and told him what had happened.

Wolf: A great round thing came rolling down the hill right at me!

Pig 3: Hah, I frightened you then! I went to the fair and bought a butter churn. When I saw you, I got into it, and rolled down the hill!!!

Narrator: The wolf was very angry indeed!

Wolf: I’m going to climb down your chimney and eat you up!!!

Narrator: When the little pig heard the wolf on the roof he hung up a pot full of water in the fireplace. Then he built a blazing fire! Just as the wolf was coming down the chimney, the little pig took the cover off the pot, and in fell the wolf. The little pig quickly put on the cover again, boiled up the wolf, and ate him for supper. And the little pig lived happily ever afterward.

Script

Page 1: The mother sends of the three pigs with no money to seek their fortune. The first pig meets a man with some straw and asks him for some of it to build his house

Page 2: the pig built a house out of straw and and after a while a wolf knocked on the door and asked to come in.

Wolf: Little pig, little pig, let me come in. (persuasively)Pig 1: No, no, (with fright) Not by the hair of my chinny chin chin! (loud and proud) Wolf: Then I’ll huff, and I’ll puff, and I’ll blow your house in

Page 3: The wolf blows down the straw house and eats the pig, as he was doing this, the second pig meets a man with some sticks and asks him for some of them to build a house

Page 4: The pig builds the house of sticks, and after a while the wolf comes and knocks at the door.

Wolf: Little pig, little pig, let me come in.Pig 2: No, no, (with fright) Not by the hair of my chinny chin chin! Wolf: Then I’ll huff, and I’ll puff, and I’ll blow your house in

Page 5: The wolf blows down the house of sticks and eats the pig, as he was doing this, the third pig meets a man with some bricks and asks him for some to build a house.

Page 7: The pig builds the house out of bricks and after a while the wolf knocks on the door and asks to come in.

Wolf: Little pig, little pig, let me come in. (persuasively)Pig 1: No, no, (with fright) Not by the hair of my chinny chin chin! (loud and proud) Wolf: Then I’ll huff, and I’ll puff, and I’ll blow your house in

Page 8: But he couldn’t blow the house down!, he then asks the pig to come with him to get some turnips, the pig accepts and says

Wolf: (out of breath) little pig, I know where there is a nice field of turnips. Pig 3: Where? (curiously) Wolf: On Mr. Smith’s farm. I will come for you tomorrow morning. We will go together and get some turnips for dinner. Pig 3: Very well. What time will you come? Wolf: Oh, at six o’clock

Page 9: The pig got up extra early, at 5 o’clock, and picked the turnips before the wolf came to the house, the wolf was very angry when he came at 6 o’clock and heard the news, and said.

Wolf: Little pig, I know where there is a nice apple tree. Pig 3: Where?Wolf: Down at Merry Garden. I will come for you at five o’clock tomorrow morning and we will get some apples.

Page 10: The pig woke up at 4 o’clock and went to get some apples, however the wolf saw this coming and got there for 4 o’clock while the pig was up a tree, but the pig threw one of his apples and then ran away.

Page 11: The next day the wolf turned up at the pigs house again, and said

Wolf: Little pig, there is a fair at Shanklin this afternoon. Would you like to go? Pig3: Oh, yes. When will you come to get me? Wolf: At three

Page 12: The pig set off at 2 o’clock and bought a butter churn to hide in, however it fell over and rolled down the hill, this scared the wolf, and he ran home.

Page 13: The wolf then turned up at the pigs house again to tell him what happened

Wolf: A great round thing came rolling down the hill right at me! Pig 3: Hah, I frightened you then! I went to the fair and bought a butter churn. When I saw you, I got into it, and rolled down the hill!!!

Page 14: The wolf was very angry and said

Wolf: I’m going to climb down your chimney and eat you up!!!

Page 15: The wolf then climbed down the chimney, but he fell into a pot of boiling water and the pig ate him for supper! And lived happily ever after.

Script

Script

Page 1: Once upon a time there was three little pigs, Marvin, Chris and Billy who couldn’t work out the best thing to build their house out of.

All the little pigs have thought bubbles coming away from their heads with a picture of the different materials in each one

Page 2: They agreed to go their separate ways and build their own houses, unknown to them however, a wolf overheard their argument, licked his lips, and smiled happily.

Page 3: The first pig, Billy, decided to build his house out of straw.

Page 4: After building his house, the wolf turned up…

Wolf: Little pig, little pig, let me come in!Billy: No, no! Not by the hair of my chinny chin chin.

Page 5: AND BLEW HIS HOUSE DOWN, leaving Billy to run to his brothers Chris’s house further into the forest.

Wolf: Then I’ll blow your house down!

Page 6: Chris had decided to build his house out of sticks.

Page 7: And as he finished Billy ran up and pulled them both into the house .

Billy: Get down Chris, the wolf is coming!

Page 8: But even the house of sticks was no match for the wolf… HE BLEW THIS HOUSE DOWN TOO… Billy and Chris ran to Marvin’s house.

Page 9: When they arrived Marvin had already heard the news, and was prepared…

Marvin: Don’t worry boys, I’ve got just what we need to deal with this problem we haveBilly & Chris: Cheering

Page 10: And they chased off the wolf in time for dinner.

All the pigs: Get out of here!

Page 11: And they lived happily ever after.

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