1st draft editing and improving

Stage 1- Proof read- Literacy• Green gets us too question the weather we can ever know the

truth in his description of the setting initially, he describes brighton effectively using lots of positive language, making it seem like a perfect holiday town; “Silverpoint sparkled on the pier”. However, later he gives a different impresion that suggest it might not be quite so perfect. It says determined gaiety, implies that they are forcing themselves to enjoy it and are not really having fun this makes us think that perhaps it is just a front and the people isn’t as carefree as they apear. By giving diferent perspective greene makes it is hard to form a clear impression of what Brighton is really like. This challenges the reader to think about weather they can ever be sure on anything..

Read through each other’s essays for literacy errors

Stage 2- Read aloud to someone

• It’s very easy to make sense of your work if you read it in your head. You gloss sentences and skip through things.

• It’s a lot more effective to read your work aloud to someone. If it isn’t clear to them it isn’t clear to the examiner.

Stage 2- Listen to someone

• It’s also very useful to hear someone else’s essay. It might give you good ideas on structure, content or even a useful quote to use!

• As you listen feel free to interupt (politely) to ask questions or to get them to explain themselves clearly.

Stage 3- Teacher feedback

• Those of you who have given your teacher work will have some feedback on it. Use this to edit your first draft further, cutting irrelevant information, improving sentence construction and developing key ideas.

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1. 1 main thing you need to improve in your essay

2. 2 ways you intend to improve your written expression

3. 3 changes you plan to make before you