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Good morning! Lots to accomplish today – let’s keep it focused! Please get out your ADSE rough draft, as many highlighters as you have, and a colored pen. I will come around and check your drafts for completion in a moment! Today’s peer edit will require CAREFUL attention – please be ready! REMEMBER: Unit 2 Vocab Quiz is tomorrow! American Dream Song Essay Peer Editing September 18, 2013

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Page 1: American Dream Song Essay Peer Editing September 18, 2013

Good morning! Lots to accomplish today – let’s keep it focused!

Please get out your ADSE rough draft, as many highlighters as you have, and a colored pen. I will come around and check your drafts for completion in a moment!

Today’s peer edit will require CAREFUL attention – please be ready!

REMEMBER: Unit 2 Vocab Quiz is tomorrow!

American Dream Song Essay Peer Editing

September 18, 2013

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If you go to the American Dream Song Essay link on my website, you will find the following VERY USEFUL handouts:Essay assignmentPresentation on essay organization How to Introduce Quoted MaterialElectronic version of this presentation – I would recommend you using it tonight to get another set of eyes on your essay before you turn it in!

Rubric

Just So You Know…

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1. Essay Fundamentals: Strong thesis statements that establish personal

definition of the American dream and how the selected song conveys it

Clear topic sentences that set the direction for each body paragraph

Organization of essay – a sense of logic/order

2. Development of ideas How specific are you in connecting your song

lyrics to your dream’s definition? Use of specific examples (if you see lots of

repeated words and/or of “everyone, anybody, sometimes, never, always,” etc., you’re likely being too general)

WHAT I’M LOOKING FOR ON FINAL COPIES…

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ROUND ONE: You will do a few things to YOUR PAPER.

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Highlight your thesis statement in one color

Highlight your text evidence (song lyrics) throughout the whole essay in a different color.

Underline each body paragraph’s topic sentence

Step Two: Mark Key Text

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ROUND TWO: Select a reader you trust, and trade essays with them.

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We looked at the three-step introduction earlier this week. Does this essay have at least a three sentence introduction?

Does the introduction mention the song title and artist? “Song Title” in quotation marks

Look at the thesis statement: does it…Clearly establish what the American dream is to the author?

State how the selected song connects to that definition?

Step 1: Thesis Statement/Introduction

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Remember, the assignment requires multiple body paragraphs – that is, more than one. So, be sure you have at least two body paragraphs!

Also, recalling the outline on the ADSE website – body paragraphs should be at least 8 sentences long. Be sure your paragraphs are developed. I’d rather see fewer well developed body paragraphs than many puny ones!

Step 2: Body Paragraphs – Structure

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Look at each paragraph’s topic sentence Does the topic sentence establish what each body paragraph is about?

Read each body paragraph. Is there ANYTHING in the body paragraph that is not germane given the topic sentence? Comment on your post-it note.

Step 2: Body Paragraphs – Topic Sentences

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Eyeball each body paragraphAre there two sentences with EMBEDDED text evidence per paragraph?

Is each paragraph constituted of 1/3 text evidence (color) and 2/3 commentary (white)? If you see more than 1/3 yellow in the paragraph, comment about it to your partner – this indicates they are summarizing too much and not analyzing enough.

Step 2: Body Paragraphs –Concrete Detail: Commentary Ratio

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It’s the last week of the 1st Six Weeks! Let’s finish strong!

Today’s agenda:American Dream Song Essay is due tomorrow! Our tasks: Review rubric Complete peer edit

Springboard 1.14 (sample survey) Review data that we have compiled so far Select your groups of 2-3 for the project (must have

these by the time you enter tomorrow) If time: select statements for group surveys

Monday, September 23, 2013

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Your final copy with a copy of your lyrics is due TOMORROW! BE ON TIME. If you’re one day late, you lose 10, 2 days late, 20, etc.

Deadline Information – SUPER IMPORTANT!

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Your final copy with a copy of your lyrics is due TOMORROW! You have two options for submission:Turn in a printed copy AT THE START of class

Turn in an electronic copy before 8:30 a.m. tomorrow to BOTH of these email addresses [email protected]@gmail.com

Deadline Information – SUPER IMPORTANT!

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Go to ADSE page on my website

RUBRIC REVIEW

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Remember, final copy must be…Font: Times New Roman, 12 pt Spacing: Double (please select “Remove spacing after paragraph”)

Page LayoutMarginsNormal (1” margins)

Required Components - Format

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Copy of lyrics should be includedFor Pete’s sake, YES, black out any bad words that are in the song. (Why do you even have to ask?)

Required Components - Lyrics

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SWITCH PAPERS WITH A CLASSMATE.

TIP: THIS SHOULD BE SOMEONE WHO HAS NOT READ IT BEFORE!

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Read the essay, beginning to end, noting for the following:Do the introduction and thesis set a clear direction for the essay?

Does each body paragraph’s topic sentence clearly establish what the paragraph is about, and does all information in that paragraph relevant to that t.s.?

Does each body paragraph have at least two concrete details (quoted song lyrics) that have been embedded within the sentece?

Does the writer’s commentary deepen meaning, or does it get redundant?

Overall QualityWrite feedback on the fo l lowing on post- i t notes prov ided at

your table. Remember to off er CONSTRUCTIVE cr i t ic ism.

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Are there at least TWO body paragraphs?

Does each body paragraph have 8 sentences?

Required Length

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Capitalization

American dreamFirst word of each sentenceIProper Names Song Titles (Example: “Party in the USA”

Sentence Structure

You are in eleventh grade, so I should NOT see run-ons and sentence fragments. Fix them…!

Spelling Circle what you think may be spelled incorrectly, even if you aren’t sure.

Usage To/two/too Their/there/they’re it’s/its Whether/weather than/then

ConventionsMark issues on your partner ’s essay. It is not your

job as the editor to fi x the mistakes; it is the writer ’s job!