December 6 th – 10th

December 6th – 10th

Please find your seat, take out your outline, and read over today’s objectives.Objective: SWBAT…

1. Reflect on the first drafts and comments of their first draft essays.2. describe and illustrate the terms diction, denotation, and connotation3. Analyze an exemplar sample Q & A essay in terms of introduction, body paragraphs, conclusion, and word choice.4. Revise the first drafts of their essays.

DoorRuth Derrell Aaron Klara Paul

Gabby Adley Chynere Yasmine Poppy

Hannah Adel Helen Christina Sara

Weston Nehemie Kim Karen Andrew

Ashley Kellyann

Tuesday, 7th December 2010Objective: SWBAT1. Reflect on the first drafts and comments of their first draft essays.2. describe and illustrate the terms diction, denotation, and connotation3. Analyze an exemplar sample Q & A essay in terms of introduction, body paragraphs, conclusion, and word choice.4. Revise the first drafts of their essays.

Long Do Now: (answer on the next clean sheet of your interactive notebook)

• Pre-comment questions: (in 2-3 sentences each)– How do you feel about your first draft?– What are you proud of? How do you think you need to improve?

• Post-comment questions:– What comments of Ms. Breindel’s made the most sense?– Which comments confuse you?– What elements of writing an essay do you need to work on most?

(choose from below)– From your own reflection and Ms. Breindel’s comments, where do you

need to refocus your attention as you revise your essay?

In writing, HOW you say something can make your ideas more convincing!


Unit Two Vocabulary: DICTIONMy Understanding

1 2 3 4

Describe:

Objective: SWBAT

Describe and illustrate the word diction.

Draw: Further Understanding: How does this word connect to writing?


Vocabulary - Denotation

Describe what you think this word means in your own words:the literal, “dictionary definition” of a word.

Really Important Vocabulary Term! Denotation

My Understanding: 1 2 3 4

Draw/Illustrate this word:

Further Understanding: Why is this an important term in writing?


Vocabulary - Connotation

Describe what you think this word means in your own words:

Really Important Vocabulary Term! Connotation

My Understanding: 1 2 3 4

Draw/Illustrate this word:

Further Understanding: Why is this an important term in writing?


Connotation…is a subjective cultural and/or emotional

coloration, i.e. the emotional association with a word. A connotation is frequently described as negative or positive.

Within contemporary society, connotation branches into a mixture of different meanings. These could include the contrast of a word or phrase with its primary, literal meaning (known as a denotation), with what that word or phrase specifically denotes. The connotation essentially relates to how anything may be associated with a word or phrase, for example, an implied value judgment or feelings.


Connotation Continued!• A stubborn person may be described as being either strong-willed or pig-headed. Although these have the same literal meaning (i.e. stubborn), strong-willed connotes admiration for the level of someone's will (positive connotation), while pig-headed connotes frustration in dealing with someone (negative connotation).

• It is often useful to avoid words with strong connotations (especially disparaging ones) when striving to achieve a neutral point of view. A desire for more positive connotations, or fewer negative ones, is one of the main reasons for using euphemisms.

• In order to understand the connotation of a word, you must understand how it is used in context of a sentence/thought/idea!

Words to avoid to use in writing:

• Basically• A lot• Many• Some• Important• ‘I’• ‘You’• This supports my thesis…• Starting a sentence with ‘because’ or ‘but’

Please find your seat, take out your outline, and read over today’s objectives.Objective: SWBAT…

1. Reflect on the first drafts and comments of their first draft essays.2. describe and illustrate the terms diction, denotation, and connotation3. Analyze an exemplar sample Q & A essay in terms of introduction, body paragraphs, conclusion, and word choice.4. Revise the first drafts of their essays.

DoorRuth Derrell Aaron Klara Paul

Gabby Adley Chynere Yasmine Poppy

Hannah Adel Helen Christina Sara

Weston Nehemie Kim Karen Andrew

Ashley Kellyann

Wednesday, 8th December 2010Objective: SWBAT1. use active and passive voice.2. Revise the first drafts of their essays.

Long Do Now: (answer on the sheet of your interactive notebook)

• What is diction?• What is denotation?• What is connotation?• What is an example of connotation?• Why are the ideas of diction, denotation, and connotation important

to writing, especially academically?

HOMEWORK!

• Revise your essay. Email to Ms. Breindel AND bring in TWO clean, updated copies to Friday’s class for our Writer’s Workshop.

Active and Passive Verb Forms

• Active = in action• Voice = the way (HOW) a writer expresses

his/her ideas• In writing (in America), it is important to use

active voice in order to seem confident in our expression of ideas. Helps to express ideas clearly…

• Passive voice is weak! You lose credibility as a writer if you write solely this way.

ExamplesACTIVE PASSIVE

Once a week, Tom cleans the house. Once a week, the house is cleaned by Tom.

Sam repaired the car. The car was repaired by Sam.

Sally is going to make a beautiful dinner tonight.

A beautiful dinner is going to be made by Sally tonight.

The author demonstrates the main character’s resilience in this passage.

This passage is demonstrating the main character’s resilience.

**Notice that the person doing the action comes first in active voice, while in passive the object/person receiving the action

comes first.**

What I saw in your essays…ACTIVE PASSIVE

Conflicting with what is expected of a poor Indian boy and a prostitute, Nita is what makes Ram happy.

Ram’s conscious decision to take his life and put it in to the hands of a force outside of his being demonstrates his belief that luck is derived from more than just his lucky coin.

In this part of the story, Ram is working at a bar called Jimmy’s Bar and Restaurant.

This quote is showing the struggle that Ram faces during his stay in Agra.By doing this, Ram is defining himself by demonstrating agency in the quest for more family-like-bonds.

WHAT, WHO??

• All in order to go against the limitations put down on him due to his status.

• The context of their relationship is tricky and very tangled due to the fact that Nita is a prostitute . Conflicting with what is expected of a poor Indian boy and a prostitute , Nita is what makes Ram happy.

• However, Ram, representing the lower and oppressed class, clearly cared about Shankar and wanted to help him so he wouldn’t die.

Revised.• All in order to go against the limitations put down on him due to his

status. – Ram goes against the limitations society imposes in order to gain

status.• The context of their relationship is tricky and very tangled due to the fact

that Nita is a prostitute . Conflicting with what is expected of a poor Indian boy and a prostitute , Nita is what makes Ram happy.– Ram and Nita’s relationship is tricky and tangled since Nita is a

prostitute. Despite the expectations imposed on a lowly Indian boy and the dishonor of her profession conflict with what is acceptable in society, Nita makes Ram happy.

• However, Ram, representing the lower and oppressed class, clearly cared about Shankar and wanted to help him so he wouldn’t die.– However, Ram, who represents the lower and oppressed class,

clearly cared for Shankar and did everything in his power to help him so he would not die.

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December 6 th – 10th