8/9/2019 Peer Editing Worksheet 2
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Peer-Editing Worksheet 2
Chapter 2: Unity and Coherence
Peer Editor: Lisa Tragut Date: 4th
of May
1. Is the paragraph interesting? Yes No
Write a comment about a part that is especially interesting to
you.
How the firm Swatch Group coped with the worldwide recession in
2008. Although the company had
huge losses in 2008, they still managed to safe jobs, and even
small profits on the end of 2009.
2. Do you understand everything? Yes No
Circle or underline any part that you do not understand, and
write a comment about it.
I had some difficulties with understanding the paragraph of
2009. The paragraph stated that the firm
faced some difficulties due to the worldwide recession, but that
the demand in watches showed small
improvements. I would have liked to read a possible explanation
for this increase in demand.
3. Copy the topic sentence here, and circle the topic and
double-underline the controlling idea.
2009 became a challenging year.
4. How many supporting sentences are there in the paragraph?
Number: 5
a. What kind of supporting details does the writer use (facts,
examples, quotations, statistics, etc.)?
The writer has used many supporting sentences. She has used
quotations, but also a lot of statistics and
examples.
b. Would you like more information about anything? Yes No
If your answer is yes, write down what you would like to know
more about.
Like mentioned in question 2, I would have liked to see more
information about the increasing demand
during the worldwide recession.
5.Unity: Is there anything unnecessary or that seems off the
topic? Yes No
6. Does the paragraph have coherence; that is, does it flow
smoothly from beginning to end?
a. What key noun is repeated?
Recession
b. Are the pronouns consistent? Yes No
c. What transition signals can you find?
However, although, result, on the other hand, furthermore
d. Are the ideas arranged in some kind of logical order? What
kind?
Yes, she begins with the topic sentence followed by supporting
sentences. The concluding sentence is
sometimes missing.
7. If the paragraph has a concluding sentence, copy if here and
circle the end-of-paragraph signal (if
there is one).
Like mentioned in the previous question, I miss the concluding
sentence on the end of the paragraph.
