Revising and Editing by STAAR-light

Kaye Price-Hawkins, Consultant

Priceless LiteracyPriceless Literacy

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Why do we need to teach Revision and CUPSS?*

A building that has dirty windows, crooked shades, peeling pain, etc., needs a make-over rather than total demolition!

*CUPSS image-page on Priceless Literacy website

Capitalization Usage Punctuation Sentence structure Spelling

How do we teach grammar and conventions?

Workshop Mini-lessons (many sources)Writing (Process)Conference (questions)Revision (various processes)Re-writing (multiple drafts)

Improvement vs Correction

Analysis Process:

What do younotice the writer

did well?______________

What suggestionswould you give

for improvement?

Create opportunities to analyze and compose Anchor (Mentor)

texts Student texts Personal texts

Diagnosis by Sharon Olds

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Student Sample (English I):

Humanity has a funny way of contradicting itself sometimes. All children are taught to share and put others’ needs before our own. Somewhere down the line we realize that the very people who preach these things to us don’t follow their own rules. It is very important in society today to remember the bigger picture, which often includes doing things to help others with no benefit to yourself.

People use each other for personal gain all the time. A glorified outlook on this way of life is all around us. In media people are more concerned with which Hollywood star is going out with which millionaire rather than the thousands of people dying of hunger in third world countries. As consumers we see this life and wish to be like that.

Doing something for monitary gain is just like money itself: easily expendable and transient. But doing something to help others leads to emotional or moral gain. The memmories and feelings you get from helping others won’t ever go away. It’s worth something to you. Worth more than money ever could be.

Mini-Lessons for Revising and Editing *

*Cards for Revising/Editing on Writing page on my website*Small Sensory Strip page on my Reading page.

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---, 2011. Grammar Girl’s 101 Misused Words You’ll Never Confuse Again. St. Martin’s.

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---. 2011. Image Grammar: Second Edition: Teaching Grammar as Part of the Writing Process. Heinemann.

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