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Xuqiang from Xianju High School

根据以下提示，结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。 来自别人的鼓励（ encouragement ）在我们的生活和学习中非常重要，请结合自己的亲身经历，举例说明。注意：（ 1 ）诗歌除外，文体不限；（ 2 ）文中不得透露个人姓名和班级；（ 3 ）次数为 120 左右。

We can write such an article like this:

How will you organize your passage?

As is widely acknowledged, encouragement is to a desperate man what sunshine is to the darkness. I learned this from one of my experiences that I went through during Senior One school life. One day, when my teacher took us to the pool to teach us how to swim in my PE class, I was too scared to go into the water even though they tried to persuade me several times. I was so frustrated that I almost accepted the fact that I would never learn to swim well. It was my classmates’ comfort and encouragement as well as my teacher’s advice and instruction that helped me gather my courage to overcome the fear and finally I joined them and enjoyed myself swimming in the pool. It wasn’t long before I swimmer in our class.

Introduction ： the importance of encouragement

Introduction ： the importance of encouragement

Problem: fail to swim Problem: fail to swim

With other’s encouragement, solve the problem: succeed

With other’s encouragement, solve the problem: succeed

From this story, I am definitely convinced that encouragement is just like the sun that drives the darkness and coldness away, and that with encourage- ment from who love you and accompany you, you will certainly gather the energy to go as far as life leads you to. Reflection: don’t hesitate to

encourage others when necessary Reflection: don’t hesitate to

encourage others when necessary

As is widely acknowledged, A is to B what C is to D. I learned this from one of my experiences that I went through during … . One day, when…. I was so frustrated that I almost accepted the fact that … .It was… as well as … that helped me … and finally …. It wasn’t long before … From this story, I am definitely convinced that… and that … .

We can write such an article like this:

________________________, courage ______us _____the key ____a door. __________________________________________________________Senior One school life. One day, when my teacher took us to the pool to teach us how to swim in my PE class, I was too scared to go into the water even though they tried to persuade me several times. _____________________________________________________I would never learn to swim well. ________my classmates’ comfort and encouragement as well as my teacher’s advice and instruction ______helped me gather my courage to overcome the fear and finally joined them and enjoyed myself swimming in the pool. ___________________I became the best swimmer in our class.

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that I went through during

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It wasn’t long before

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Topic 1– courage (finish the article using the structure pattern)

_________________________________________courage is the key to success, _______only by facing the difficulty bravely can we solve it smoothly and calmly.

From this story, I am definitely convinced thatand that

As is widely acknowledged, practice makes perfect. I learned this from one of my experiences that I went through during Senior One school life. One day, when I was playing volleyball with my class-mates in my PE class, I missed several chances that I should have grasped to meet the ball. I was so frustrated that I almost accepted the fact that I would never play well. It was my classmates’ comfort and encouragement as well as the teacher’s advice and instruction that helped me devote my spare time to practicing playing every day. It wasn’t long before I became one of the most important players on our school team.

Topic 2– practice makes perfect (pay attention to the changes)

Introduction ： the importance of practiceIntroduction ： the importance of practice

Problem: fail to play volleyball Problem: fail to play volleyball

By practicing, solve the problem: succeed

By practicing, solve the problem: succeed

From this story, I am definitely convinced that each one of us is able to do something well, and that the more you practise, the more skillful you will become.

As is widely acknowledged, _____________________. I learned this from one of my experiences that I went through during Senior One school life. One day, __________________________________. I was so frustrated that I almost accepted the fact that _____________________________________. It was my classmates’ comfort and encouragement as well as my teacher’s advice and instruction that helped me gain and finally build up my confidence. _________________. It wasn’t long before _____________________________. From this story, I am definitely convinced that _____________________, and that _________________. 

Topic 3 – confidence (Add your own example to make a good article.)

As is widely acknowledged, confidence is to us what ambition is to success. I learned this from one of my experiences that I went through during Senior One school life. One day, what surprised me most was that I failed my first math exam for math is always my favorite and advantage. I was so frustrated that I almost accepted the fact that I would never learn it well. It was my classmates’ comfort and encouragement as well as my teacher’s advice and instruction that helped me gain and finally build up my confidence. I was determined to devoted myself to listening to the teacher attentively in class and to doing the homework seriously and

Topic 3 – confidence (Add your own example to make a good article.)

patiently after class. It wasn’t long before math again

became my favorite and advantage. From this story, I am definitely convinced that confidence is the key to success, and that we must believe in ourselves and we must believe that each one of us is able to do something well. 

开头：• As we all know/As is known to all,

words……• It is known to all that words……• What is known to all is that……• It is widely/universally

accepted/acknowledged that……. • It is a proven fact that……. • There is no doubt/denying that……

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中间：• I can well remember there was a time

when…….• There is one thing still sticking in my

mind. • Sth. still rings in my ears today.

结尾：• Powerful as words are, they can also……• Words have magic power, however, they

can……• You can never be too careful about what

you say.• You cannot but pay too much attention

to……

Learn more sentences!

请以“ One Thing I’m Proud of”为题，用英语写一篇100-120 个词的短文，记述一件你自己认为得意的事

情。要求如下：1.记述事情经过；2.简要说明你感到得意的原因或从中得到的启示。注意：文章标题已给出（不计词数）。

Now, it’s time for practice!

Let’s polish the following composition!

I’m Mary, a high school student with an optimistic attitudes towards life. Besides, I’m willing to help others who is in need. I can well remember a story in my mind. It is also one thing I’m proud of myself. One day, I was wandering on the street. Suddenly, a boy who was crying caught my eyes. I stopped, went ahead, asking him what had happened. I knew he was losing his way to find his mother, I helped him to call the police. Then his mother came and thanked me a lot. I find it is not too hard to help others. I’m proud of myself. And I enjoy helping others. I’m certainly believed that the helping others can make me more happy.

First, find out grammatical mistakes.

1.Well organized—with topic sentence, details and conclusion.

2.A few grammatical mistakes.

3.Too many short and simple sentences.

4.Have details but not specific enough.

First revised draft -- accuracy

I’m Mary, a high school student with an optimistic attitude towards life. Besides, I’m willing to help others who are in need. I can well remember a story in my mind. It is also one thing I’m proud of. One day, I was wandering on thestreet. Suddenly, a boy who was crying caught my eyes. I stopped to ask him what had happened. Then, I knew he had lost his way and hoped to find his mother.I helped him to call the police. Then his mother came and thanked me a lot. I found it was not too hard to help others. I’m proud of myself. And I enjoy helping others. Icertainly believe that helping others can make me happier.

Improve the sentences.

1. I can well remember a story in my mind. It is also one thing I’m proud of. __________________________________________________________________________________________________2. One day, I was wandering on the street. Suddenly, a boy who was crying caught my eyes. __________________________________________________________________________________________________3. I stopped to ask him what had happened. Then, I knew he had lost his way and hoped to find his mother.__________________________________________________________________________________________________

Second revised draft.

I’m Mary, a high school student with an optimistic attitude towards life. Besides, I’m willing to help others who are in need. I can well remember a story in my mind, which is also one of the things I’m proud of. One day, I was wandering on the street when suddenly a crying boy caught my eyes. After asking him what had happened, I knew he had lost his way and hoped to find his mother.Without hesitate, I called the police. Luckily, his mother came in the end, who had been so worried and thanked me a lot. I found it was not too hard to help others. I’m proud of myself. I certainly believe that helping others can make me happier.

I’m an optimistic girl who is always willing to help thoseI’m an optimistic girl who is always willing to help those in need. I can well remember an incident I went throughin need. I can well remember an incident I went through during my Senior One school life. during my Senior One school life. On my way home I happened to see a child crying by On my way home I happened to see a child crying by the side of the street. It seemed to me that he had lost the side of the street. It seemed to me that he had lost his way. How worried his mother would feel about him, his way. How worried his mother would feel about him, I thought. After finding out his address through a couple I thought. After finding out his address through a couple of questions and answers, I took him home. Seeing us, of questions and answers, I took him home. Seeing us, his mother was moved to tears, saying many thanks to his mother was moved to tears, saying many thanks to me. me. As an old saying goes, “roses given, fragrance in hand.”As an old saying goes, “roses given, fragrance in hand.”From what I experienced, I ‘m firmly convinced that From what I experienced, I ‘m firmly convinced that helping others will benefit yourself as well.helping others will benefit yourself as well.

Third revised draft-- brevity and sincerity

One Thing I’m Proud of

I still remember how I became a good table tennis player. The first day I went to high school, I saw some of my classmates playing table tennis. Amazed at how skillful they were, I was determined to be just as good. Later on, I often watched them carefully to learn their techniques. Then I kept practicing until I became confident enough to challenge the good players. At the end of the term I became one of the best players in my class. I am really proud of this experience, because it helps me realize that we all can fulfill our potential and achieve our goals through hard work. It also helps me better understand the proverb "Practice makes perfect.”

One thing I’m proud of happened when I was in junior school. Our school would organize a music contest. As I was fond of music, I asked my teacher if I could organize the activity and to my joy, she joyfully accepted. Feeling much responsibility and pressure, though, I buried myself in the contest. I picked our favourite song and arranged every classmate’s role to call on everyone to participate in. Moved by my passion, everyone in our class devoted himself to the activity. During that time, tired as I felt, I was almost the latest one to leave school. At last, we won the first prize! Everyone appreciated my contribution, however, the smiles on my classmates and teacher’s faces were the best reward to me, which I’m really proud of! Through this thing, I learned how to be a good organizer and the real meaning of commitment. 28

One thing I’m Proud of Poor in English as I was three years ago, I made up my mind to improve it. For one thing, I chose excellent articlesto recite, which can help me express myself more smoothly.For another, I made use of my spare time to enrich my vocabulary, which I thought could lay a solid foundation for my further English study. As time went by, I achievedrapid progress in English. I learned from this experience that nothing is impossiblefor a willing heart. If we set a goal, don’t wait for the success to come by itself, but spare no effort to achieve it. I am proud of myself that I kept carrying on however tough the difficulty was and overcame it with my determination and hard work.

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One thing I’m proud of I’m proud that I have finished the 1500-metre race. It was a hot summer when we held the sport meeting.To improve myself, I took part in the 1500-metre race.It might be the hardest thing for me because I wasn’tgood at running at all. After-finishing 1000 meters, I felt extremely thirsty and breathless. When I set outto give up the race, I heard my classmates were encouraging me , so I struggled to finish the race. Although I didn’t get any prize, I think it’s a victoryI feel proud that I have finished what seems impossiblefor me, which indicates that “where there is a will, thereIs a way.” Don’t give up and we will succeed.

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One thing I’m proud of Everyone has one thing that he or she takes pride in. Forme, I think my characteristic optimism is my strength.Once I met failure in the exam of math but I didn’t losemy confidence. I believe in myself that I can make it.Besides, one failure can’t prove I’m not good in math. Therefore, I encourage myself and manage to cheer mymath cells up. It is the optimism that help me meet thesuccess. Because of the optimism, I can face bravely to the difficulty and in the future, it will guide me toward a better life. I think success is around the corner if you have optimism.

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A is to B what C is to D A 对于 B 而言正如 C 对于 D 一样

Air is to us what water is to fish.

What C is to D, that A is to B.

What exercise is to the body, that reading is to the mind.______________________________________What blood vessel is to a man’s body, that railway is to a country.______________________________________

Exercise is to the body what reading is to the mind.

Blood vessel is to a man’s body what railway is to a country.

请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。We all know that “sticks and stones may break our bones”, but we should also be aware that words can hurt people, too.

注意：① 无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；② 除诗歌外，文体不限；③ 文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；④ 词数为 120 左右。

Now, it’s time for practice! (Use the structure pattern and add your own example to make a good article.)

Let’s put our heads together and appreciate the sentences written by our classmates!1. To my surprise, hearing my question, he didn’t have

a look but said that I was too clumsy to solve it, which made me sad till the next day. 2. From this story, I’m definitely convinced that bad words can make people frustrated, and that good words can help us solve problems smoothly and calmly. 高三（ 11 ） 杨晨光 3. Having studied a whole day but received little, I went home, upset and desperate.4. Unexpected, mom stood there with a smile frozen on her face.5. Not until she rushed back to her room did realize what I said had hurt her deeply. 高三（ 11 ）蒋春梅

stupid/ dull

Shocked

6. It was my rude words that hurt my mother so deeply though I apologized to her as soon as I realized what a wrong thing I had done. 高三（ 11 ）杨梦露7. Facing the embarrassing situation, Mary was crying. 高三（ 11 ）王佳敏8. Having experienced such a terrible thing, I did understand the hurt that bad words brought. I sincerely hope that everyone will think twice before saying in case what you say hurt others deeply. 高三（ 11 ）吴佳盈

Let’s put our heads together and appreciate the sentences written by our classmates!

Let’s put our heads together and appreciate the sentences written by our classmates!

1. With his attention fixed on the question, he didn’t know my approaching.2. From then on, that boy, who were hurt deeply by my words, has never said a word to me. 高三（ 12 ）王志伟3. As is widely acknowledged, words can be a bunch of charming flowers but can also be a killing gun sometimes. 高三（ 12 ）泮梦颖4. Toy gun in hand, I acted as if I were a soldier in real war.5. I was just about to reach the “enemy’s fort” when I was caught by a huge hand, with my gun thrown into the air. 高三（ 12 ）张容卿

Let’s put our heads together and appreciate the sentences written by our classmates!

6. To make things worse, without his permission, I told others my success and his failure, which made him angry. 高三（ 12 ）王涛7. However, his efforts didn’t pay off. 高三（ 12 ）蒋冰颖8. Word is like a flower that has to be taken care of. 高三（ 12 ） 林智伟9. Only by putting yourself into others’ shoes can you preserve others’ dignity. 高三（ 12 ）王英瑜10. Don’t do to others what you don’t want done to yourself. 高三（ 12 ）王嘉鹏11. Only those who are confident enough can achieve their dreams. 高三（ 12 ）应巧颖

Sometimes, bad words are to us what sticks and stones to our bodies. I learned this from one of my experiences that I went through during Senior One school life. One day, when I was playing volleyball with my classmates in my PE class, I missed several chances that I should have grasped to meet the ball. What surprised me most was that my best friend Peter called me “fool”. I was so hurt that I almost accepted the fact that our friendship came to an end. It was my classmates’ comfort and persuasion as well as Peter’s apology and explanation that helped me realize he did have a strong sense of cooperation and teamwork. It wasn’t long before I forgave him and we were again close friends as ever.

Let’s put our heads together and appreciate the sentences written by our classmates!

From this story, I am definitely convinced that bad words really have bad influence on us, and that only with a good understanding of them can we get through and get along well.

Let’s put our heads together and appreciate the sentences written by our classmates!

My deskmate admires my fluent English vey much and I usually feel encouraged by his compliments. One day, when we learned the new word “eccentric” in class, we were asked to make a sentence with it. I volunteered to do it by saying “My deskmate is an eccentric boy whose clothes never fit him.” Hearing this, the whole class burst into laughter and my deskmate’s face turned red. After class, I learned from the teacher that my deskmate would have dropped out of school if he hadn’t been helped by others. My mindless words must have hurt him deeply. Not until then did I realize words could be powerful in both positive and negative ways. We should avoid hurting others if we can’t always be encouraging when we speak.

1. 恶言对于我们正如大棒和石头对于我们的骨头一样。

2. 我错过了几次接球的机会。

3. 最令我吃惊的是我最好的朋友 Peter 叫我“傻瓜”。

4. 不久后我原谅了他，我们又和好如初了。

Bad words are to us what sticks and stones to our bodies.

I missed several chances that I should have grasped to meet the ball.

What surprised me most was that my best friend Peter called me “fool”.

It wasn’t long before I forgave him and we were again close friends as ever.

5. 听了这句话，全班哄堂大笑，我同桌的脸红了。

6. 我听老师说，如果没人资助的话，我同桌本来已经辍学了。

7. 直到那时我才意识到话语有积极和消极两方面的影响力。

Hearing this, the whole class burst into laughter and my deskmate’s face turned red.

I learned from the teacher that my deskmate would have dropped out of school if he hadn’t been helped by others.

Not until then did I realize words could be powerful in both positive and negative ways.

思路：

英文提示（选材）：one thing; I’m proud of

中文提纲（记述）：1. 得意的事情；2. 事情的经过；3. 得意的原因 或 从中的启示；

叙述文：

1. 事实记述（ factual narration ） （何时、何地、何事、何人、为何）

2. 取材典型（ selection of details ）

3. 观点鲜明（ point of view ）

4. 结构连贯（ sequence of time ） ( 开头、情节、观点、结尾 )

高考作文采用总体评分方式，集中在以下四个方面： 

  • 覆盖了题目提出的所有内容要点和要求；  • 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，内容比较丰富；  • 在使用复杂结构或高级词汇时允许有些许错误；  • 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，全文结构紧凑流畅。  

高考英语作文完美行文四步骤 STEP1 ：确定文章框架，包括：时态、语态、格式、展开方式、开头结尾等。 STEP2 ：确定内容要点，包括：主要人物、时间地点、重要细节、合理发挥等。 STEP3 ：正式开始写作，整理思路成篇，行文连贯。 STEP4 ：检查粗心犯下的错误。. 

高考英语写作技巧汇总 （一）掌握技巧：

（ 1 ）注意篇章结构，合理布局

• 开始部分（ opening paragraph ） 说出文中的要点、核心问题。 • 正文部分（ body paragraphs ） 围绕主题开展叙述、讨论。 • 结尾部分（ concluding paragraphs ） 对全文的总结和概括。

要做到全文中心突出、段落之间必须是有机地联系，内容完整、连贯。前后呼应，祛除与主题无关的内容。