Welcome to Seminar 5Welcome to Seminar 5We’ll begin on time. We’ll begin on time.

Meanwhile, have fun chatting.Meanwhile, have fun chatting.The difference between The difference between what we do and what we what we do and what we

are capable of doing are capable of doing would suffice to solve would suffice to solve most of the world's most of the world's

problems.problems.Mahatma GandhiMahatma Gandhi

It’s SHOWTIME !!!!!!!!

• Welcome to Seminar #5 • How is everyone today? • How was your week?

Unit 5 Work• Discussion:

– Thesis, – Topic Sentence for first key point– Paragraph that supports that topic

sentence.– Information from one of the articles.– In text citations

Unit 5 Project: Outline• Your outline must include

– 1) A three point thesis statement– 2) Three topic sentences that match the

thesis in content and order– 3) Two supporting details (evidence) per

topic sentence– 4) APA in text citation– 5) A references page + a title page– 6) Page numbers and headers

Unit 5 Project (slide 2)• The outline is to be a formal Roman numeral

outline. We will go over the format today during seminar and the format is also in this unit.

• If you have trouble with outlines, go to doc sharing, download the Outline Map, and fill in the blanks.

• If you do not yet have ideas for your introduction and conclusion, that is fine because we will discuss introductions next week in seminar and conclusions in the Unit 7 seminar, so those should give you ideas.

Unit 5 Project (slide 3)

• The project should be in APA format

•Be double spaced only•Written in12 point font size only• Include page numbers and headers

– Go to doc sharing & download “Using Microsoft Word” or “Using Word 2007.”

•Should not use bold type•A sample title page can be found on p.

225 of the KU Handbook for Writers.

Sample Three Point Thesis

• Example: Geico has different marketing strategies for teenagers, adults, and senior citizens.

• If I used this thesis, my essay would discuss Geico’s marketing strategy for each group.

• Each group would be a separate topic within my outline and my essay.

From Thesis to Outline• You can clearly see the three main ideas

in this thesis: Geico has different marketing strategies for teenagers, adults, and senior citizens.

• Key Point 1 = teenagers• Key Point 2 = adults• Key Point 3 = senior citizens

Outline Format to Be UsedI. Introduction A. Jazzy Introduction B. Background information C. Thesis statement II. Key point 1 [my first reason why] A. Supporting details (Cite!) B. Supporting details (Cite!). [These details would prove that my reason was right.]III. Key Point 2 A. Supporting details (Cite!) B. Supporting details (Cite!)IV. Key Point 3 A. Supporting details (Cite!) B. Supporting details (Cite!)V. Conclusion A. Restatement of thesis B. Concluding statement.

Look at the outline piece by piece.

I. Introduction A. Jazzy Introduction

B. Background information C. Thesis statement

We will be talking more about “jazzy” introductions in another seminar.

Background Information

• Background information is defining the problem or the history of the problem.

• For example, you can not expect that your reader knows anything about marketing or Geico, so you would need to provide them with that information.

Key Points• Key points come directly from the thesis:

– Geico has different marketing strategies for teenagers, adults, and senior citizens.

• Key Points:– II. How Geico markets to teenagers– III. How Geico markets to adults– IV. How Geico markets to senior

citizens

The EndV. Conclusion A. Restatement of thesis B. Concluding statement. A good conclusion is NOT simply a

restatement or summary of what you have already said. We will talk more about conclusions in another seminar.

Sample Informative Outline

I. Introduction [A] Jazzy introduction: story [B] Background of Geico and its

products [C] Thesis: Geico has different

marketing strategies for teens, adults, and senior citizens.

• My goal for this essay is to educate the reader about how Geico markets its products.

II. Geico markets its products to teens. [A] Geico uses the gecko and cavemen to attract the attention of teens. (Cite!) [B] Geico uses the Internet to attract tech savvy teens. (Cite!)III. Geico markets its products to adults. [A] Geico offers low cost insurance, marketed through the Internet and TV ads. (Cite!) [B] Geico offers life insurance, something adults need to protect their families. (Cite!)

[C] Because so many adults are busy with work and families, Geico makes getting a quote, buying insurance, and filing and tracking claims easy and convenient, all without their leaving their homes. (Cite!)

IV. Geico markets its products to senior citizens. [A] Geico offers umbrella insurance and RV insurance, both often needed by retirees. Geico markets these products through TV ads and the Internet. (Cite!) [B] Geico uses older actors in its TV commercials, people that seniors would know. (Cite!)VI. Conclusion [A] Geico uses many different marketing strategies to garner attention from varying ages groups. (Cite!) [B] Geico even has “Story Time” on their web site, so children will know the Geico name and become future customers. (Cite!)

• Notice that no where does it say what a person SHOULD do, nor does it try to change the thinking of the reader. It simply provides information about Geico’s marketing.

• Your outline, due Tuesday night, should be a formal, Roman-numbered outline. Your points are to be in full sentences, but NOT paragraphs.

• Word has a built-in outlining feature: go to Format, then Bullets and Numbering, then Outline Numbered.

• Remember to include complete APA-style citations for all outside sources you used, both in the text and at the end of your paper.

• Also, if you have not already done so, go to doc sharing and download the APA Cheat Sheet.

Second Person

For academic writing, do not use the words “you” or “your” unless they are part of a direct quotation.

This rule will apply to all of the essays, including the informative essay.

Do Not “Speak” Directly to Your Readers

Writers who use "you" are speaking directly to their readers. For example, let's say you are writing about education and children. If you say, "You should have more say in your children's education," you are speaking to the reader.

This might work if you were writing an article intended to be read by parents of younger children. They may relate to your talking to them.

However, if your readers are more general, they will not relate to "you." If they do not have younger children, "you" does not apply to them.

Instead, talk about your topic and say, "Parents should have more say in their children's education."

The reader will understand that you are talking about PARENTS, not about the reader.

Who Are Your Readers?

When I was teaching at a local community college, some of the students were writing about steroids. In their essays, many said, "If YOU take steroids..." I wanted to say to them, "I do not take steroids, never did, and never intend to!" [LOL]

In general, do not use first person pronouns (I, me, my, mine, we, our, us).

Use first person pronouns ONLY when relating a personal experience or as part of a direct quotation.

The essay is about the topic, not about you, so take yourself out of the essay.

Do not say "I think" OR "I believe" OR "In my opinion" OR "In my research I found" OR any other statement that talks about you.

On the other hand… You can, however, use PERSONAL

EXPERIENCES as a form of proof to support your thesis.

If you wanted to emphasize a point about airport security, you might say, For example, the last time I was going

on a trip, I accidentally packed a pair of nail scissors. When my bag went though the X-ray, the security agent spotted them, opened my bag, and removed the scissors.

That would be an appropriate use of first person ("I").

If my thesis was "Parents should have more say in their children's education," I might illustrate a point in the essay with a personal example about when my children were young. That would be an appropriate use of first person.

What is Plagiarism?What is Plagiarism?

Plagiarism is taking someone else's work, words, or ideas and presenting them as if they were your own.

Work includes original ideas, strategies, and research, art, graphics, computer programs, music, and other creative expression.

Is Plagiarism Wrong?Is Plagiarism Wrong?

Why or why not?Why or why not?

Consequences of Plagiarism1. Job loss* Reporters for the New York Times

have lost their jobs because they plagiarized articles.

* A professor at the University of Colorado was investigated for plagiarism and lost his job.

* A Florida judge plagiarized on a military exam and may have lost his military rank.

2) Legal Problems• Actor Michael Douglas sued a Florida company

for using his image to make money. He asked that all profits from the use of his picture be given to him.

• Dan Brown, the author of the DaVinci Code, was sued by the authors of Holy Blood, Holy Grail, who claim Brown took ideas from their book. Brown, however, was cleared of the plagiarism charge.

• Former President Jimmy Carter has been accused of plagiarizing his new book. A number of his advisors quit because of this allegation.

3) Failing a class or being expelled

Being accused of plagiarism can have severe consequences. You may receive a zero for your work; you may get an F for the class, or you may even be expelled from the school.

Most students do not intended to plagiarize, but the rules of documentation can be very confusing. It is important to learn how to use borrowed material correctly so you can avoid the consequences listed above.

How Can You How Can You Avoid Avoid

Plagiarism?Plagiarism?

There are two ways to avoid plagiarism

1) Put quotation marks around any quoted material and cite. ( )

2) Use mostly your words and ideas.When you are writing an essay,

most of the words in the essay should be your own words, and most of the ideas in the essay should also be your own.

You do research to support or "prove" your ideas. You borrow an author's words sparingly, using only enough to prove your point.

You may be thinking, "But this is a research paper, so how can I use my own words and ideas?" The best way to do that is by

discussing the information that you find.

Give the reader your ideas about the information; don't just "parrot" back what someone else has written.

Has anyone heard of Turnitin.com?

Problems with Paraphrasing

• Turnitin.com is an online site that checks student essays for plagiarism.

• I submit all of your essays to Turnitin.com, not because I am trying to "catch" you doing something wrong, but because I want to help you learn to quote and paraphrase correctly.

Using Borrowed Material• By the time you have completed this

class, I want you to feel comfortable using borrowed material. I want you to feel sure that you know how to use borrowed material correctly.

• By turning your work into Turnitin.com, I can see if you are making errors, and then I can point those errors out.

• You, in turn, can learn how to correct any errors and avoid them in the future.

Poor Paraphrasing• Since most errors found by Turnitin.com

concern poor paraphrasing, I want to go over in more detail what you can not do in a paraphrase.

• When you paraphrase, you must change all of the important words and the sentence structure (order in which the words appear).

• You can not take a few words from one sentence and a few more from another sentence and glue them together as your own.

The words in capital letters are the same in both paragraphs.• Original Quotation: "IN THE CONCENTRATION

CAMPS, for example, in this living laboratory and on this testing ground, WE watched and witnessed SOME OF OUR comrades behave LIKE swine WHILE OTHERS behaved LIKE saints. MAN HAS BOTH potentialities within HIMSELF; WHICH ONE is actualized DEPENDS ON DECISIONS but NOT on CONDITIONS" (Frankl, 1984, p. 135).

• Bad Paraphrase: IN THE CONCENTRATION CAMPS, WE saw SOME OF OUR friends act LIKE pigs WHILE OTHERS acted LIKE angels. It is a fact that MAN HAS BOTH possibilities WITHIN HIMSELF. Therefore, WHICH ONE he becomes DEPENDS ON DECISIONS NOT ON CONDITIONS. (Frankl, 1984, p. 135)

The paraphrase from the last screen would be

considered to be plagiarism.

Even though the writer changed some of the words, many of the words come directly

from the original as does the sentence structure and word order. Therefore, it would be considered plagiarism even

though the material was cited.

Review of the Rules for Using Borrowed Material

1) Use quotes sparingly, but any time you use someone else's words, you must put them in quotation marks.

2) Paraphrase and summarize as an alternative to quoting. However, if you paraphrase, you must still document.

3) When you paraphrase or summarize, change ALL the words, not just one or two of them.

4) Give credit in two places: in the text and on the Reference Page.

5) When in doubt, cite.

Reminders If you post after midnight Tuesday, email

me your postings. I do not go back and check previous weeks for late postings, so you will not get credit if you do not email them to me. Label late postings as to lesson and

question and which class you are in. To get a higher grade in seminar, prepare

answers to questions that I post on the Announcement Board (Course Home Page).

Writing Tip: Titles of Articles

• Within the text, capitalize the first letter of the words of the title of an article: – Doctors Are Over-prescribing Psychiatric

Medication to Children.• On the reference page, capitalize only the first

letter of the first word in the title of an article: – Doctors are over-prescribing psychiatric

medication to children. – Notice how only the first letter of the word DOCTORS

is capitalized. The rest of the words in the title are all lower case.

• Within the text, place the title of articles within quotation marks: – "Doctors Are Over-prescribing Psychiatric

Medication to Children"• On the reference page, do not use

quotation marks: Diller, L. (2004). Doctors are over- prescribing psychiatric medication to children.