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Page 1: writing test paragraph editing

B. The paragraph below is the first draft that Helena wrote; The paragraph

contains mistakes. Read the paragraph to answer questions 1-3.

Going Door to Door(1) I was nervous. (2) I was collecting donations for the school library.(3) MV father and I had woken up at sunrise to get an early start. (4) lt was

the first house of the day. (5) | lightly rapped my knuckles on the door. (6) I

listened for a sign of life behind the door, but I heard nothing. (7) I turnedto look at my father, who was watching from the sidewalk. (8) | shrugged

as if to ask, "How will I collect anything if no one is home?" (9) He made a

knocking motion with his hand. (10) I knocked harder this time and turnedagain to show that no one was home. (11) Suddenly a loud creak startled

me. (12)An elderly man was standing at the door. (13) Words tumbled outof my mouth. (1a)The next thing I knew, I was holding the first donation ofthe day!

1. Which sentence below should be added after sentence (1)to provide

the reader with more descriptive words?

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2.

I get nervous sometimes when I speak with strangers.

There was a frog in my throat and my hand was trembling.

I don't get nervous very often.

I knew I shouldn't have been nervous.

Which sentence below should be added to the beginning of theparagraph to make a stronger lead?

Who wouldn't think twice about walking up to a stranger's house?

I started with the house on the corner of my street.

The library needed to raise extra money for a new computer.

I walked up the sidewalk toward the house.

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3. The writer wants to add the following sentence to the story:

I nearly jumped off the porch!

Where should this be added to provide more vivid details?

after sentence (5)

after sentence (B)

after sentence (9)

after sentence (11)

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