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No Better Way to Experience Blue Grass Music and Food TrucksMount Airy, NC Than in Your Toyota 4Runner

Spring is here in Mount Airy, North Carolina and it is time to celebrate with some good ole’ blue grass music festivals and food truck events. These talk-of-the-town events are well known and enjoyed in Mount Airy, North Carolina. Mount Airy Toyota is geared up for the season of loud music and good food with car specials left and right! From saving on classic and well loved vehicles like the Toyota Camry and Toyota Corolla to the Toyota 4Runner!

With large storage space, a roomie interior, and off-roading abilities, this vehicle is sure to bring the party wherever you go!

Mount Airy Loves Bluegrass

Spring is here! And you know what that means—it’s , it’s officially time for bluegrass music time! Mount Airy loves its bluegrass music and is widely known for its outdoor festivals. Mount Airy host , hosting conventions and music events all season long to help get neighbors excited. The Pie Factory hosts regular celebrations of jam sessions and the Mount Airy convention center is hosting a two-day music festival.

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You’ve already used this sentence—can we come up with another intro sentence—perhaps something that relates to the Mount Airy location—for example:“If there’s one activity you know will get everyone in Mount Airy excited and outdoors, it’s bluegrass music and the accompanying festivals!

Free Bluegrass and Old-Time Music Jam Session

If you are looking for weekly excitement with friends, family, and food, the FREE Bluegrass and Old-Time Music Jam Session is a weeklyn event, you don’t want to miss! Thise live jam session is a routine event that is celebrated every Tuesday from 6pm to 8pm at The Pie Factory, supplemented with great food! This event has live music and great food!


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Mount Airy Bluegrass and Old-Time Fiddlers’ Convention

The famous Mount Airy Blue Ggrass and Old-Time Fiddlers’ Convention is where folks can hear the music of tradition fortraditional music of the North Carolina Mountains. The event will be hThis weekend outing is held on Friday, June 2nd and Saturday, June 3rd. The event will have:, and will have:

Live Bands Competitions Jam Sessions Dancing Singing Education Family Entertainment

This family-friendly event is held in the Veterans Memorial Park in Mount Airy, North Carolina. Pray for sunny skies, as this music festival will be held rain or shine. Since you’ll be drivingDrive your 4Rrunner, go ahead andr and throw some lawn chairs in the back for providing your own seating., We’re certain this event will be the talk of the town with good vibes and music that’ll roll through the Blue Ridge Mountains. This event is free for children under six, 10 dollars a day for adults, and 20 dollars for contestants. For more information on the Mount Airy Bluegrass and Old-Time Fiddlers’ Convention call (336)345-7388.


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The Convention line up:

June 2nd

-7pm- 11:59pm – All Bands Performance

June 3rd

- 9:30 am- 12pm – Folk Song in Grandstand - 9:30 a.m. - 2:00 p.m. - Bluegrass & Old-Time Banjos, Bluegrass & Old-Time Fiddles- 2:00 p.m. - 5:00 p.m. - Guitar, Mandolin, Dobro, Bass Fiddle, Dulcimer, Autoharp- 5:45 p.m. - Youth Dance and Awards- 6:00 p.m. - All bands perform

Why the 4Runner?

The 2017 Toyota 4Runner is the all-things-outdoor vehicle that is fully equipped for spring and summer excitement. From tailgating to camping trips, food trucks and blue grass music festivals, thisis is versatile vehicle is ready for an adventure!, whether you are looking to take advantage of the spring food truck and bluegrass music events or planning a camping trip in the Blue Ridge Mountains the 4Runner is ready.

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The exterior of the Toyota 4Runner is the Toyota vehicle that combines the looks of a classic SUV style with a the fun and outdoor vibe of the Jeep. The 4Runner has the exterior features of:

Chrome door handles and Chrome-Accented Front Grille LED Taillights Alloy Wheels Projector-Beam Headlights

The chrome accent and designer projector-- beam headlights define the vehicle’s appearance and make it demand attention! These hard-to-miss features are bold and grasp the attention of all those who see the vehicle. This vehicle comes equipped with 17- inch alloy wheels and projector-beam headlights. The strong headlights work well for both the style and the usability of the vehicle. The smoked trim adds boldness to the exterior design while the headlights have a higher focused beam and have Daytime Running Lights for better visibility.

Interior


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In a vehicle that is made for road trips full ofand other adventures, it is essential that the interior is made for comfort. The 4Runner is just that with:

Leather Seats Heated and Ventilated Front Seats Power Moonroof Active Front Headrests Fold-Flat Second-Row Seat Third-Row Seating Power Rear Glass Sliding Rear Cargo Deck

The most important interior feature for long trips to the mountains and afternoons of tailgating is keeping your passengers comfortable and happy, and that means having a little extra room in the vehicle. are comfortable seats and room for storage. The 4Runner has seats that are a soft leather, with the option of heated and ventilated seats, reclining back row seats, and an active headrest. Theise ensure s the most maximum comfort for longable rides. The 4Runner is also designed with storage stuffmeeting your storage needs. The second-row seats fold-flat, making room to accommodate all of your sleeping bags, coolers, tents, and more. Then, if the seats in the back are folded down, you can allow for the back allows for 88 cubic feet of cargo! The cargo trunk space has a sliding rear cargo deck that makes for quick access to your belongings. The sliding rear cargo deck can supports up to 440lbs. This is great for a quick setup before heading on a trip.


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Technology

For long trips, it is a must to have access to your favorite music, reliable navigation, and speakers for your road trip jam sessions. With the technology in the Toyota 4Runner, whether it’s a road trip or a short ride, it is sure to be stress-free with:

Entune App Suite Integrated Navigation Bluetooth 15-Speaker JBL System Backup Cameras Smart Key System with Push Button Start 120V AC Power Outlet

These core technology features are designed for safety, entertainment, and enjoyable rides. With the Entune App Suite, you have access to mobile apps and data on the 6.1-in high-resolution touch-screen display in the 4Runner. Use Pandora to listen to your favorite bands or use Oopen Ttable to make dinner reservations. The 120v AC power outlet in the rear of the vehicle is perfect for tailgating, keeping your phone charged, or connecting a speaker to liven up the party.


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Capability

The 4Runner is ready and fully capable to conquer the off-roading experience with:

4WD with Active Traction Control Kinetic Dynamic Suspension System and Crawl Control Multi- Terrain Select Lever/Dial-Type Transfer Case Locking Rear Differential 270-hp V6 Engine Standard Hill Start Assist Control/ Downhill Assist Control Skid Plates Standard Full-Size Spare Ventilated Disc Brake

Safety

Safety Going on crazy adventures and off-roading experiences, safety is essential; . tThe engineers that developed built the Toyota 4Runner know it’s important to their customers, and because they know the importance of safetyvalue your safety, developed these important key features and had yours in mind by developing these key safety features:

8 standard airbags Side-Impact Door Beams Tire Pressure Monitor System (TPMS) Toyota Care Star Safety System Safety Connect

The side-impact door beams provide extra protection if the vehicle is hit on the sides. The impact beams surround the inside of all doors and absorb energy to reduce the chance of intrusion inside the vehicle. The 4Runner is also designed with the Star Safety System that includes:

Vehicle Stability Control Traction Control Anti-Lock Brake System Brake Assist Electronic Brake-Force Distribution Smart Stop Technology


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Overall, the 4Runner is the perfect vehicle for family fun, off-roading outings, and all things outdoors in the beautiful Mount, Airy, North Carolina. We’ll be seeing the 4Runner on the Blue Ridge Parkway as often as at the Blue Grass Music Festivals and numerous food truck weekends this coming season. As great off the road as it is on, the Toyota 4Runner is your vehicle for all things outdoors!

adventures! In Mount Airy, North Carolina this vehicle is great for the Bluegrass music festival, food truck events, and trips to the Blue Ridge Parkway! With great off-roading ability, it is your vehicle for all things outdoors!


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I feel like this might have been stated too many times. Is there another way we can praise the vehicle?

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