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Mock Analysis

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What am I being tested

on?

You need to show that you can:

•Read with insight

•Show that you understand what a writer is trying to do

•Use quotations to support your ideas

•Distinguish between facts and opinions

•Follow an argument

•Make cross references and compare

•Understand how writers use language, structure, and

presentational features to achieve effects

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Gadgets for GirlsFor too long men have had all the great gadgets

to play with, while girls have been left out of the fun. Well, we say it’s got to stop. So here’s the low down on one of the most girlie, but gadget-laden cars around: the new Nissan Micra.

A run down of its features reads like a list of essential lifestyle tools. For those of us who tend to over do it with the shopping, the new Micra’s got a rear sliding seat, so you can enlarge the space in your boot. Or, if you’re cruising around with a load of leggie mates in the back, you can slide the seat back and give them more room.

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Then there’s the Intelligent Key, that is also useful after a shopping spree. Say you get back to your car loaded down with bags, if you’re a Micra driver there’s no need to go rummaging around for your keys, the car will sense you’re near and then all you need to do is press a button to unlock the door or boot. As long as you have the Intelligent Key in your pocket or bag you don’t even need to fish it out to start the engine, the ignition can be started with the twist of a switch.

The new Micra will do wonders for your social life too. The rear parking sensor will help you squeeze into the tightest spaces so you won’t find yourself parking half a mile away from wherever you’re meeting your mates, and then having to tramp all that way in your dancing shoes.

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If you need somewhere to leave your work things while you’re out on the town, the front passenger seat lifts up to reveal a large, extra storage area. When you get home at the end of a night, the Micra will still be looking out for you – the “friendly” headlamps will stay on for up to two minutes after you get out and lock the car, so you won’t ever have to walk to your front door in the dark.

The drive computer will tell you bags of useful information, such as how many miles of fuel you have in your tank, but it will also remind you of anniversaries and birthdays, so there’s no excuse for forgetting any crucial dates. You can control the drive computer and the stereo from buttons on the steering wheel, so you can flick between CDs and radio stations without taking your eyes off the road.

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On top of all this, the new Micra’s got electric, speed-sensitive power steering, which makes city driving a breeze.

It’s curvy in all the right places, retro in all the right ways, but cutting-edge and intelligent on the inside. In fact the new Micra’s such an individual it speaks its own language. The perfect balance between simplicity and technology? That’s “simpology”. Inventive but convenient technology – we’re talking “conventive”. The largest luggage space in its class, with the option to slide the seat back to create more legroom – that spells “leggage”. Modern yet retro? “Modtro” of course. Grab a brochure and become fluent today.

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English Exam Paper 1 Section AHigher

How effective are the pictures in helping to support the claims made for the car in the written text?

6 marks

How effective pictures support theclaims

6 MARKS!!We expect a Number of egs.

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English Exam Paper 1 Section AHigher

How effective are the pictures in helping to support the claims made for the car in the written text?

6 marks

How effective pictures support theclaims

6 MARKS!!We expect a

Number of egs.

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English Exam Paper 1 Section AMarks

0Skills

Nothing writtenContent

1Little evidence

•Little content•General or descriptive comments

•Key fob has no actual key•It looks good

2Attempts to engage

•LARGELY DESCRIPTIVE•Some identification of the more obvious presentational devices

•Handle shows nature of the sensor•Might be dangers in the background

3-4Clear attempt

•A clear attempt to engage with MEDIA CONCEPTS•Comments on HOW different pictures / devices are used•MEDIA TERMINOLOGY used

•Links owner with big smart house and attractive woman•Smaller pictures make it look ‘arty’

5-6Detailed

•Clear and DETAILED•A full understanding of task•Sophisticated use of media terms

•Lips are sexy, futuristic and talk Micra to you

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English Exam Paper 1 Section A

Example AnswerMost of the images are very effective in

helping to support the claims made for the car in the text. This is because most of them show exactly what each gadget is or does, but also they are ‘modern’ or ‘arty’ create the same impression as the text.

Two pictures show how the car’s “friendly” headlamps will stay on for two minutes after the owner has got out of and locked the car. This feature dominates in the advert and have their own style – they are a little blurred which makes the reader look harder at them.

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English Exam Paper 1 Section A

The two pictures in the top left hand corner also support the claims made in the text. These are that the car does not need a key. The left hand picture shows the “Intelligent key” while the right picture shows the button which is pressed to open the door.

The only picture that I do not think is effective is the one in the top right corner as I do not see what it is meant to show.

Overall the pictures support the idea that this is an innovative key which attractive, trendy women would be interested in buying.

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English Exam Paper 1 Section A

1Read the questions and the texts very carefully – cover all parts of the questions

2 Learn the meaning of the type of words that will appear: form, presentation, layout, purpose, audience,

You are asked to do different things. Write down – just list, Compare – make sure you cover both texts, Explain – give your ideas using media terms; do not just describe.

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What am I being tested

on?

You need to show that you can:

•Communicate clearly

•Use the features of a format (e.g. speech, letter, advertisement)

•Suit the purpose of the task

•Craft effective sentences using effective language and punctuation

•Use paragraphs to structure the writing

•Use different types of sentence structures

•Use a variety of punctuation

•Spell and punctuate correctly

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Writing to ARGUE

3) Write an article for a magazine aimed at teenagers in which you ARGUE that students should be taught to drive in

school. You might write about:

• Why it would be good for them

• The advantages of learning when you are young

• Why teenagers would be keen to learn

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In your plan craft different types of sentences…

•Some may feel that sixteen is too young, but

that is ridiculous…•If we learn to drive now, there are more

opportunities available to us.

•Why learn at school?•Over 90% of pupils

surveyed…

Counter-argument

Warrants

Rhetorical questions

Statistics

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Writing to PERSUADE

4) Write the text for an advertisement for a car which aims to PERSUADE young men

to buy the car. You might write about:

• The car’s looks

• Its performance

• Its gadgets

• What young men would feel like driving it

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Try alliteration, pattern of three, embedded clause, slogan…

•Speed, sound-system and sex-appeal…

•The new Corsa, winner of What Car Poll 2005,

is the car of choice!•Want a driving deal of a

lifetime?•Playtime is over? It’s

only just begun!

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Writing to ADVISE

5) Write an ADVICE sheet for young people who are newcomers to your area.

• Places to go

• Things to do

• How to meet people

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Try modal verbs, alternative suggestions, the ‘voice’ of the reader, varied sentences

and punctuation

•You could join one of the many sports clubs in

the area…•If drama is your thing

there are amateur dramatic groups; a great

way to meet new friends.

•How do I find out what is available?

•Relax!

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HOW IS THIS SECTION MARKED?

18 MARKS CONTENT

AND ORGANISATION

9 MARKS SENTENCE STRUCTURE

PUNCTUATIONSPELLING

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Extracts from example answer

Even though the initial cost of a car is high compared to public transport, in the

long-term it is cheaper

Schools are meant to be “places of knowledge”, so

they should give us knowledge about driving!

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To those who say that more people driving means more people will be unhealthy, I

say it is up to the individual to take care of their health

Let students learn how to drive at school.

Since all of you readers are so bright and intelligent,

don’t you think that you’re more likely to pass your

driving test while you are young and alert?

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PAPER TWO WRITING TASKS

The assessment criteria is the same as Paper One but the tasks require different

stylistic skills:

INFORMDESCRIBEEXPLAIN

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Writing to INFORM

3) Write a letter for the governors of your school INFORMING them of the changes you would like to be made in your school

and the reasons for these changes. Remember to:

• Write a letter• Use language suitable for governors to

read• Inform the governors

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In your plan craft different types of sentences…

•As a governor of this school you will appreciate the views of the pupils…

•Additionally…•Pupils, teachers and

parents alike would benefit from…

•In my experience, and it is an experience shared by hundreds of peers, the

food…

Present tense

Interesting detail

Formal language

Connectives

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Writing to EXPLAIN

4) EXPLAIN what your dreams and ambitions for the future are. Explain also how you could achieve them. Remember

to:

• Write about your dreams and ambitions

• Explain how you could achieve your dreams and ambitions

• Give a range of explanations

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Give reasons why; how they could be achieved; vivid language; varied sentences

(especially paragraph starters) …

•Achieving this goal will make all of the hard work and sacrifices

worthwhile…•How would I feel? Incredibly proud!

•Imagine the scene:…•I have believed in this dream for so long now; it must be my destiny!

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Writing to DESCRIBE

5) DESCRIBE a nightmare world. Remember to:

• Write about a nightmare world

• Use language which brings out the nightmare

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Present tense; appeal to the senses; use imagery; avoid narrative; adjectives and

adverbs; vary sentence starters…

•Creeping through the darkness is…

•Echoes resonate around the walls.

•The sharp blade of the wind pierce…

•Decayed flowers, once beautiful, now release a

malevolent scent…

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Writing to INFORM and EXPLAIN

6) Many young people have concerns about the world in which they live. Write INFORMATIVELY

about one or more of your concerns and EXPLAIN the reasons for them. Remember to:

• Inform the reader about one or more of your concerns

• Explain the reasons for your concerns• Use language suitable for informing and

explaining

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Create a clear introduction and conclusion; if there is one point, develop carefully; two or more points should be structured carefully

with linking points

•A significant concern shared by many people

my age is…•There are a number of

reasons why this is extremely worrying…

•Additionally…•Furthermore…

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PAPER TWO SECTION A

COMPARE the ways an EVENT is DESCRIBED In BLESSING with the ways an event

Is described in ONE other poem. Compare•What the events are

•The methods used to compare them

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Marks Skills

o Nothing Written

1-3 Some awareness of one or more texts

4-6 Simple comments; reference to some detail about how an event is described

7-9 Simple comments supported by references to the text; some comments about presentation

10-12 Appropriate use of quotations, accurate account of poems

13-15 Beginning to compare more clearly with a range of comments supported by quotes. Focus upon description

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Marks Skills

16-18 Understanding of feelings, attitudes and ideas; awareness of writers’ purpose and techniques

19-21 Appreciation of feelings, attitudes and ideas; understanding of a wide variety of techniques

22-24 Analysis of writers’ techniques; exploration of and empathy with writers’ feelings, attitudes and ideas

25-27 Consistent insight; convincing interpretation, close textual analysis

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What did you do well?

Expressed a good understanding ofwhat the poems were about

Chose a poem which suited the task –many of you chose Night of the

Scorpion

You compared the poems using compare / contrast connectives

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WHAT IS THE GENERAL ADVICE?

What is described? How? Why?

Refer to your background knowledge-setting, culture, poet’s intentions

Say a lot about a little and in your comments upon key words use

Impressive terms e.g. alliteration, similes

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Say a lot about a little? How?

Dharker invites the reader to “Imagine the drip of it / The small splash, echo /In a tin

mug,” The alliteration of ‘s’ and the onomatopoeic effect of ‘splash’ does help the reader to imagine the scene. However,

it is more difficult for a reader outside of the poverty in India to truly appreciate how this burst water pipe can create such joy

and to associate the noises with a ‘blessing’ bestowed by “a kindly god”.

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ENGLISH LITERATURE EXAM

Section A Comparing

Short Stories

Section BComparing4 Poems

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SECTION A

You need to show that you can…

Respond to texts critically andsensitively

Explore how language, structure

and form contribute toa text

Make comparisonswithin and between

texts

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Foundation 1) Compare how parents feel aboutChildren in Growing Up and Your Shoes

Higher 1) Compare your responses to Superman and Your Shoes

Foundation 2) Compare how problems between Characters are shown in Chemistry and

One other storyHigher 2) Compare the openings of Snowdrops

and one other story

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Foundation 3) Compare how children are shown to be unhappy in Flight and another story

Higher 3) Compare your people are shown Growing up in Growing Up and another story

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SECTION B

You need to show that you can…

Analyse 4 poems – 2 of which are pre-

1914

Comment on ideas, Structure, language,

Poet’s intentionsYour response

Make comparisonswithin and betweentexts and refer topoetic techiques

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Compare how attitudes towards children are shownIn any 2 of these poems: Mid-Term Break /

Baby sitting /Catrin

Then compare how attitudes towards childrenAre shown in any 2 of these poems: On

My First Sonne / Song of the Old Mother /Little Boy Lost and Found

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Compare how poets use the first person “I” in 4 of thePoems you have read. Choose 2 from list A

And 2 from list B

Mid-term BreakDiggingCatrin

Babysitting

Song of the Old MotherOn My First Sonne

Sonnet

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Compare how the experience of being a parentIs shown in Song of the Old Mother and

Catrin

Then compare how the relationship between parent And child is shown in On My First Sonne and any

One poemby Seamus Heaney

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Compare how the poets use and present places inSonnet and one poem by Heaney

Then compare how the poets use and present places inCold Knap Lake and one more poem from the

Pre 1914 bank

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Compare how the poets have used structure to Contribute to the meanings of At a PotatoDigging by Heaney ONE poem by Clarke

And TWO poems from the 1914 bank

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Compare how weather is presented in Patrolling Barnegat and Storm on the Island

Then compare the presentation of summer in The Field Mouse and Sonnet

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General Advice for Literature Paper• Know the texts well! Revise from your

anthologies and exam notes carefully.• Take time to think about what the question is

asking – the best answers use a plan• Use quotations to support your answers and do

try to use technical language in your comments• Consider the structure of the texts – stories:

where is the climax? Is there any symbolism? Do the endings provide a significant resolution?

• For poetry consider the structure of the stanzas. Is there any change in the mood? Is the punctuation significant? Is there alliteration, imagery, or interesting phrases that are used for effect? What effects do the poets want to achieve? Are they successful?

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