LESSON 19

TODAY’S AGENDA

1. Modifiers1. Team Challenge Review

2. Finish up A,B,C, and D of on-demand writing.

3. Timed Writing #1

Students will apply techniques discussed in class to a timed-writing prompt.

DANGLING OR MISPLACED?

Team Challenge

REMEMBER…

Misplaced: the modifier is MISPLACED (in the wrong place). Usually, a sentence with a misplaced modifier seems funny.

Dangling: the modifier is DANGLING because it seems to be modifying nothing. You usually need to add words (usually a subject) to make it make sense.

I sent a poster to Mom rolled in a tube.

Misplaced Sitting on the telephone

wire, he saw a meadowlark. Misplaced

Looking through the telescope, the moon seemed enormous.

Dangling

While doing the dishes, a mouse ran across the floor.

Dangling We rented a boat from my

cousin with two motors. Misplaced

We saw several blue jays looking out our front window.

Misplaced

We could see corn growing from our car window.

Misplaced Sitting on the porch swing, the

wasp startled the couple. Misplaced

I gave olives to my friend that I stabbed with my fork.

Misplaced

WHICH IS CORRECT?

1. The other day I shot an elephant in my pajamas.

2. While I was in my pajamas, I shot an elephant.

WHICH IS CORRECT?

1. Portia rushed to the store loaded with cash to buy the birthday gift.

2. Loaded with cash, Portia rushed to the store to buy the birthday gift.

WHICH IS CORRECT?

1. Having finished dinner, Joe turned on the football game.

2. Having finished dinner, the football game was turned on.

WHICH IS CORRECT?

1. Playing solitaire on the computer for three hours, Timmy’s paper was not completed.

2. Because Timmy played solitaire on the computer for three hours, he did not complete his paper.

WHICH IS CORRECT?

1. Three bicycles were reported stolen by the police yesterday.

2. The police reported that three bicycles were stolen yesterday.

WHICH IS CORRECT?

1. After years of neglect in a basement closet, I found my old teddy bear and brought it to my room.

2. I found my old teddy bear, which had been neglected for years in a basement closet, and brought it to my room.

WHICH IS CORRECT?

1. Lying in the grass on a warm day, I saw the sun shining above me.

2. Lying in the grass on a warm day, the sun shone above me.

WHICH IS CORRECT?

1. Miranda, screaming her head off, ran to the teacher.

2. Miranda ran to the teacher screaming her head off.

YOU WILL HAVE A QUIZ OVER MODIFIERS DURING LESSON

20!!!!!!!

ON-DEMAND WRITING

What do each of the letters represent? Where does your thesis go?

At the end of the first paragraph, if the subject is not too controversial.

Why would you want to hold off on an explicit thesis for controversial subjects?

You don’t want your reader to stop reading.

How many paragraphs should you have? multiple – one idea per paragraph

TIMED WRITING #1

MINUTE 1 – “A”

Read the prompt and think about your response.

Make sure you understand what is being asked.

TIMED WRITING #1

Write an essay in which you discuss a time when discontent led to action. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your readings, studies, experiences, or observations.

MINUTE 1 – “A”

Read the prompt and think about your response.

Make sure you understand what is being asked.

MINUTES 2 – 5 “B” & “C” Brainstorm ideas Write down words that come to your mind. Do these words have correlations? Take a position Write a thesis – what do you think about the

prompt? Make sure the thesis is specific instead of too

broad. Develop an outline – use the blank space

under the prompt. Plan on a 4-5 paragraph essay Introduction – Main Points - Conclusion

MINUTES 5 - 17

Using the outline as a guide – begin writing.

Suggested 400 words

Use paragraphs

Make sure your essay makes sense.

MINUTES 18 – 22

Time check You have about 7 minutes left – make

sure you are almost finished. If you are almost finished – focus on

the conclusion. Finish Conclusion

MINUTES 23 –25 “D”

Read your essay. Proofread for errors. Do you need to add

transitions? Reread. Relax.