2011 FYS 110 Editor's Workshop Sheet

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Editors Sheet: Fill this out; make a copy; use the sheet to introduce the paper you have edited to

the rest of your small group during your assigned paper conference. When the conference isover, hand over the original copy to the author of the paper you have edited, along with his/her

completed draft. Keep a copy of this sheet just in case your author loses the original so that you

receive credit: THIS IS WORTH 5% OF YOUR TOTAL GRADE. Please treat this exercisewith respect because it is your job to collaborate to help other authors.

First of all, read to yourself, carefully, the paper that you will introduce.

Then work with the paper according to the following guidelines:

5 points: Heading information. Is the heading information in the same format as appears

page 621 of theHodges Harbrace Handbook? Yes or No _______If No, what needs to be changed?

5 points Title: Does the title let you (the reader) know what the paper will be about?

Yes or No _____ If No, what suggestions would you make to help yourauthor create a useful title?

5 points In the introduction, can you find the thesis? If you cannot find the thesisimmediately, go to the conclusion to track it down there. Now, can you identify

the thesis? Yes or No ________

Write the thesis down:

10 points Is it exquisitely clear? Yes or No______________

If the thesis isnt clear, please provide a suggestion to help your author createa thesis that is clear to a reader. Write on the back of this page if necessary.

5 points In the introduction, can you find the essay map? Yes or No _______

Is the essay map clear? Yes or No_____________

5 points Write down the essay map:

5 points If the essay map is not clear, please provide a suggestion to help your author

create an essay map that is clear to a reader. This suggestion could include word


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choice, sentence length, and/or going to the topic sentences to look for ideas.

5 points With what rhetorical device does the introduction begin? ________________________________________________________________________________

Is it catchy? Yes or No__________

Is the introduction focused on the TOPIC of the essay? Yes or No _________If NO, what would you suggest the author omit/change?

5 points. Are the relationships between the sentences made clear by means of

Consistently good use of transitions? Yes or No ______________

If no, put an X on the essay where you would like to see transitions added. Dontskimp on this.

5 points Make a comment that you feel is useful to help your author revise his/herintroductory paragraph. Write on the back of the page, if necessary.

10 points Can you find a topic sentence for each body paragraph? Yes or No ______

If you can find them, is each topic sentence appropriate for the paragraph in

which it appears? Why or Why not?

Put a ! beside each topic sentence.

10 points Is each point and subpoint of each topic sentence validated by an example fromthe diary or the Tao Te Ching? Yes or No ________ If No, put an * beside

each place where an example is necessary.

Are there more examples than are necessary to validate the point/subpoint? Yes

Or No _______ If Yes, but EXTRA EXAMPLE beside the extra example.

5 points Is there discussion/analysis in the authors own voice in every body paragraph?Yes or No ______ If No, write DISCUSSION? beside the paragraph from

which the discussion/analysis is missing.

5 points Are all examples from the diary introduced as being from the diary? Yes or

No _______


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Are all examples from the Tao Te Chings poems introduced and cited correctly?

Yes or No _____ For Example (Lao Tsu 15) as a citation for Poem Fifteenof the Tao Te Ching.

Please write citation? where citations are missing from the body paragraphs.

5 points Please write one detailed comment about the body paragraphs of the essay.

This may include both suggestions for improvement and indications ofwhat you found to be satisfying. Writing AWESOME! (or an equivalent, thought

saving clich) will earn you no points.

5 points The conclusion should contain, at minimum: 1) a rewording of the thesis

statement (or a strongly implied thesis statement, 2) a rewording/summary of the

essay map AND 3) a final sentence that leads the reader into the topic of thethesis. The essay should end with a sentence and a last word that is satisfying and

energetic.

1) Is the thesis present and reworded? Yes or No __________1a) OR is the thesis strongly implied? Yes or NO _________

2) Is the essay map present and reworded? Yes or NO _________3) Does the last sentence seem energetic by its variety of word length, precise

punctuation and careful word choice?

5 points Please write a final comment to your author to help him/her revise the concluding

_______ paragraph so that the reader will leave the essay satisfied. Dont skimp on your

100 points suggestion.

Youll noticepunctuation doesnt receive attention here. You may certainly suggest that your

author edit his/her paper to correct the punctuation in any comment space where it is appropriate.

Please use this form to help you introduce the paper to your group at the paper conference.

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2011 FYS 110 Editor's Workshop Sheet