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Lesson 12 - Lesson Plan

Edit Down the Lane and Using a Rubric

Literary Essay

Aim: To edit and improve an essay. NJSLS. L.8.2A, L.8.2C, W.8.2A, W.8.2C, W.8.4, W.8.5, W.8.6.

Focus: “Today we are going to learn how to evaluate our own essays using a rubric and how to put the finishing touches on an essay by editing it.”

Assessment: The assessment rubric for this lesson is below.

On-Task Student Assessment Rubric Points EarnedStudent works cooperatively with a group or with a partner. 2Student addresses and participates in all components of the lesson. 8Student focuses on the task and, when asked, works without supervision when writing independently.

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Total Points Earned 20

Procedure:

Teacher makes assessment rubric available to class.

Teacher distributes writing folders.

Whole Class Instruction

Teacher distributes the Literary Essay Rubric Exercise directions and rubric on p.3 and goes over the directions and each item on the rubric. All items have been covered in previous lessons for this genre.

Writing Group Activity

Teacher implements the Literary Essay Rubric Exercise.

Whole Group Instruction

Teacher shows PowerPoint which explains the Edit Down the Lane Activity.

Group Activity

Teacher uses Editing Cards 3 and 8 and chooses enough additional card numbers that best fit the lesson being taught and the ability of his or her students. However, Editing Card 8, Punctuating Quotes in an Essay MUST be one of the cards used for this lesson. Teacher chooses the same number of cards as there are students in a writing group.DEPENDING ON THE EDITING ASSIGNMENT AND STUDENTS’ KNOWLEDGE, A MINI LESSON ON SELECTED EDITING CARDS MAY BE NECESSARY. When teacher distributes Card #3, teacher may want to draw students’ attention to Lesson 1, Source 1, under the paragraph entitled, Back in Vogue and the use of the dash in that paragraph.

Teacher distributes cards to each group and then assigns temporary new groups so that each new group has the same editing card with the same writing rule. For example, one group will all have Editing Card 1, another group will all have Editing card 2, etc.

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Teacher instructs students to study their assigned Editing Card in their new groups and help each other to understand the rule.

Teacher circulates to explain any part of any Editing Card to any group that needs help. When students are ready, teacher instructs students to go back into their writing groups, distributes colored pens or markers, and implements the Edit Down the Lane activity.

Independent Writing

After students have finished the Edit Down the Lane Activity, teacher instructs students to make all corrections on their essays from the rubric exercise and the Edit Down the Lane exercise. Teacher informs students that this is their final revision.

Teacher instructs students to put all work in their writing folders.

Highlights Recap: Teacher asks for a few volunteers to share a mistake that the rubric or the editing cards caught in their essays.


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Optional Follow-up Assignments Now that students

have learned the skills to write and REVISE a literary essay on a fictional character, teacher, at any time during the school year, chooses a character from a text recently read in class. Teacher gives students the prompt to write an essay that proves a claim about the character using text evidence.

Teacher assigns the essay to be written at home or in class, whichever timing works best for the class. All students should have the following items before they begin writing their

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Name of Student-Writer __________________________________________ Name of Student-Evaluator________________________________________

Literary Essay Rubric / Peer Evaluation Exercise

Directions: Use the rubric below to check your own work.

Then, check the essay of one of your group members. As you check your classmate’s essay, write the number of each rubric requirement next to the part of the essay that fulfills the requirement. Some numbers may be used more than once. Feel free to make any additional corrections and offer any additional suggestions.

Rubric for Literary EssayEssay has an introductory paragraph that contains a:

1. Claim2. Preview of the essay3. A hook or background context

Essay has three body paragraphs each containing:4. An example from the text as evidence5. A quote or paraphrase from the text that supports and develops the example6. An explanation of how the quote supports and develops the example and the claim

Essay has a concluding paragraph that:7. Restates The Claim8. Summarizes The Essay9. Leaves The Reader With An Observation Or Evaluation Of The Piece Of Literature

Analyzed In The EssayEssay uses a transition in:

10.The Beginning of Each Body Paragraph11.The Beginning of The Concluding Paragraph.12.Essay uses quotation marks around text excerpts and direct quotations from a character in

the text.13.Essay uses advanced punctuation: either an ellipsis or a dash.14.Essay uses verbal phrases for variety and conciseness.15.Essay uses four higher level vocabulary words from past or present word walls.16.Essay maintains a formal style with no slang or conversational tone.


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Editing Card 1 - Punctuate Dialogue Correctly

Editor’s Directions: Circle all of the correct punctuation for every piece of dialogue, put an “X” over incorrect or missing punctuation. Use the following rules and examples to guide you. [Dialogue consists of the words that are spoken by a character.]

QUOTATION MARKS ARE REQUIRED AT THE BEGINNING AND END OF WHOLE SENTENCE DIALOGUE.

Incorrect: “You can accomplish anything if you put your mind to it.

Correct: “You can accomplish anything if you put your mind to it.”

A COMMA SEPARATES A WHOLE SENTENCE DIALOGUE FROM ITS DIALOGUE TAG, AND PERIODS AND COMMAS ALWAYS GO INSIDE THE QUOTATION MARKS.

Incorrect: “You can accomplish anything if you put your mind to it” Doc Brown said.

Correct: “You can accomplish anything if you put your mind to it,” Doc Brown said.


There should be quotation marks at the end of the speaker’s words

A comma should be inside the quotation marks

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DIVIDED DIALOGUE REQUIRES A COMMA BETWEEN ANY PART OF THE QUOTATION AND THE REST OF THE SENTENCE AND A SECOND COMMA AFTER THE TAG.

Incorrect: “You can accomplish anything” Doc Brown said “if you put your mind to it.”

Correct: “You can accomplish anything,” Doc Brown said, “if you put your mind to it.”

A NEW PARAGRAPH IS REQUIRED EVERY TIME THE SPEAKER CHANGES.

Incorrect:

“You can accomplish anything if you put your mind to it,” Doc Brown said. “So, you can really send me back to the future,” Marty asked.

Correct:

“You can accomplish anything if you put your mind to it,” Doc Brown said.

“So, you can really send me back to the future,” Marty asked.


A new paragraph is needed here because the speaker has changed.

A comma is needed after the first part of the quotation

A comma is needed after the dialogue tag.

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Editing Card 2 - Use the Correct Homonymit’s, its, your, you’re, there, their, they’re, to, two, too

Editor’s Directions: Circle all of the correct uses of the homonyms, place an “X” over any incorrect homonyms. Use the following rules and examples to guide you.

It's is the contraction for it is. ( It's snowing so school will be closed.) Its is the possessive form ("possessive" means belongs to) of it. (The dog hurt its paw.)

You're is a contraction for you are. ( You're going to be a great writer.)

Your is a possessive adjective. (Please correct your essay.)

They're is the contraction for they are. (They're going to have a great school year this year.)

There is an adverb showing a definite or indefinite place. She put the folder over there. [definite place] There will be pain. [indefinite place]

Their is a possessive adjective. (The students put their essays in their writing folders.)


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To is used as a preposition to introduce a prepositional phrase. (I went to the meeting after school.)

To is also used to begin an infinitive which is the word to plus a verb. ( I want to buy those new shoes.)

Two spells out the number 2. If you can replace two with 2 in the same sentence, and it still makes sense, then you are using it correctly. (I usually want two(2) helpings of everything at dinner.)

Too is used as a synonym for also. ( I want a piece of candy too.) [If you look carefully at the word too is has one letter “o” and another letter “o” also. This might help you remember how it’s used.]

Too is also used to show that something exceeds what is required. (This is too hard for me.) [Again, if you look carefully at the word too, perhaps it has one too many letter o’s.]


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Editing Card 3 - Use the Correct End Mark and Dashes Correctly

Editor’s Directions: Circle all of the uses of end marks and dashes. Place an “X” over any incorrect or missing end marks and over any incorrect or missing dash.

Period. Use a period at the end of a sentence that makes a statement, gives a command, or makes an indirect quotation.

(Katniss walked into the arena . ) [statement](Give the pin to your mother . ) [command](Prepare to die . ) [command](The boy talked about the kissing in the book . ) [indirect quotation]

Question Mark. Use a question mark after a direct question.(What grade did I receive ? )

Exclamation Mark. Use an exclamation point at the end of a sentence to express strong emotion. (I won ! )(You’re out ! )


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The Dash. A dash is not a hyphen. To access the dash on your computer, go to insert, then symbols, then special characters, and then select Em Dash. Use a dash to show a conclusion (you can often substitute the words “which is” or “that is” to make sure you are using it correctly.)

(After hours of arguing, the committee finally made a decision — the new rule is defeated.)(I think it’s healthy for a person to be nervous. It means you care — that you work hard and

want to give a great performance.)

Use two dashes to emphasize material in the middle of a sentence as if it interrupts the sentence.

(Everything I learned in school — from solving math equations to analyzing sentence

structure — was useful to me in my life.)

( The students — they were each over the age of eighteen — lined up in the streets to vote for the presidential candidates.)


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Editing Card 4 - Use Commas Correctly

Editor’s Directions: Circle all of the correct uses of commas and place an “X” over any incorrect or missing commas. [Use commas to set off transitions and items in a series, and to separate main clauses.] [There should be no space between a comma and the word it follows, but the following examples have a space between the word and the comma so that the commas can be bolded.]

Use Commas to set off transitions. Put a comma before and after transitions.

(Dogs are very useful animals , for instance , they can help the police find suspects.) (Students can improve their writing by using transitions. Also , they can improve their writing by applying writing rules.)

Use Commas to separate items in a series. Put a comma after each item in a list that is contained in a sentence except for the item before the word and.

(The flag is red , white and blue.) (You should use dialogue , flashback , hypotheticals and strong verbs in your writing.)

Use a comma between two main clauses in a compound sentence when the clauses are joined by the word “and” or the word “but.” [A main clause is a group of words that contains a subject and a verb and can stand alone as a sentence.]

(You finished writing your essays , but you have not revised them yet.) (Many people write about their personal experiences , and quite a few people sell their stories to magazines.)


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Editing Card 5 - Make Sure That Verbs Agree With Their Subjects

Editor’s Directions: Circle all of the subjects and verbs and draw a connecting line between the two. If they do not agree, place an “X” over the verb. [A subject performs the action or state of being of the verb. Subjects must agree with their verbs; singular subjects have singular verbs, plural subjects have plural verbs.]

Sometimes the subject and verb are close together.

(The king rules the country.)

Sometimes the subject and verb are farther apart because other words come between them. Ignore these words when looking for the subject and verb.

The king from the Tudor family with a long line of monarchs rules the country.

Sometimes a sentence can have more than one clause and each clause will have a subject and verb.

When the rains came the rivers overflowed their banks, and the distressed homeowner reported that a large

quantity of furniture was destroyed by the water, but everything in time was better.


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Editing Card 6 – Tense Consistency

USE PRESENT TENSE WHEN POSSIBLE AND WHEN DESCRIBING A PIECE OF FICTION.

Incorrect: The fairy godmother appeared to Cinderella and created a ball gown for her.

Correct: The fairy godmother appears to Cinderella and creates a ball gown for her.

MAKE SURE YOUR TENSES ARE CONSISTENT IN PAST, PRESENT, AND FUTURE TENSE.

Incorrect: I worked on my math homework as I talk on the phone.

Correct: I work on my math homework as I talk on the phone.

DO NOT USE COMPLEX TENSE UNLESS ABSOLUTELY NECESSARY.

Incorrect: I had been to New York recently.

Correct: I went to New York recently.


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Editing Card 7 – Use the Correct Pronoun

Incorrect: That was me.

Correct: That was I.

Use these Pronouns AFTER These Prepositions - even if there are two or more pronouns.

me

him

her

it

us

them

whom

aboard

about

above

across

after

against

along

amid

among

around

as

at

before

behind except

excepting

excluding

following

below

considering

despite

beneath

beside

besides

between

beyond

but

by

round

save

since

down

during

for

from

in

inside

into

like

minus

near

of

off via

with

within

without

on

onto

opposite

outside

over

past

per

plus

regarding

to

toward

towards

under

underneath

unlike

until

up

upon


Use these Pronouns AFTER These VerbsI, he, she, it

we, they who

am, is, are, was, were, been, being, been

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anti concerning through than versus

Incorrect: Keep this between you and I.

Correct: Keep this between you and me.

Incorrect: This is from Richard and I.

Correct: This is from Richard and me.

Incorrect: This came from she and I.

Correct: This came from her and me.

Incorrect: Divide the money between he and I.

Correct: Divide the money between him and me.

Remember: The pronoun I is never correct after the word between.


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Editing Card 8 – Punctuating Quotes in an EssayQuotation Marks, Comma, Brackets, Ellipsis

Editor’s Directions: Circle all of the punctuation marks in a quote. If the punctuation is incorrect, put an X through it.

HOW TO PUNCTUATE QUOTATIONS

TWO KINDS OF QUOTES FROM A TEXT THAT REQUIRE SPECIAL PUNCTUATION WHEN YOU INCLUDE THEM IN AN ESSAY ARE:

1. AN EXCERPT QUOTE FROM THE TEXT’S NARRATION (what the author or narrator writes, not what a character says).

2. A DIRECT QUOTE OF WHAT A CHARACTER SAYS IN A TEXT. Put quotation marks around a part of the text’s narration (an excerpt quote) when you include it in an essay. You can change the capitalization of a quote in order to make it fit into your sentence.

Example: Jesse attended a poor school. The author describes it as, “short on everything, especially athletic equipment, so all the balls went to the upper grades at recess time after lunch. Even if a fifth grader started out the

period with a ball, it was sure to be in the hands of a sixth or seventh grader before the hour was half over. ”


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Put quotation marks around a direct quote spoken by a character when you include it in an essay.

Example: Percy defended his mother’s honor when he told his stepfather, “to show some respect.”

Insert a character’s name in a quote with brackets to make it clearer or easier to understand.

Example: Percy explains how he is learning when he tells us, “he [Luke] demonstrated the move on me in slow motion.”

HOW TO OMIT A WORD OR WORDS FROM A QUOTE

Use an ellipsis, a set of three periods ( . . . ) separated by spaces, to indicate a missing word or group of words in a quotation

Example:

Original Sentence: Beyonce Knowles aptly pointed out, “ I truly believe that women should be financially independent from their men. Let’s face it, money gives men power to run the show. And men define what’s feminine. It’s ridiculous.”

Incorrect Omission of words: Beyonce Knowles aptly pointed out, “ I truly believe that women should be financially independent from their men. _______________ And men define what’s feminine. It’s ridiculous.”

Correct Omission of words: Beyonce Knowles aptly pointed out, “ I truly believe that women should be financially independent from their men. . . . And men define what’s feminine. It’s ridiculous.”


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