Closing time: considering conclusions and inspecting the introductions

CLOSING TIME:CONSIDERING CONCLUSIONS AND INSPECTING THE INTRODUCTIONSEnglish 101 Honors Writer’s Workshop Fall 2013

Let’s start at the very beginning of your

introduction—a very good place to start.

What is the FIRST thing that you introduction

paragraph must have?

Hook, Line, and Sinker….

Hooks that make Mrs. Sullivan want to read more... Statistical Opening (using numbers or percentages

relevant to topic)In 1982, ten thousand humans beings died of starvation. Millions of thoughtless overfed people did nothing about it. This shouldn’t happen in today’s world. Man must develop a concern for his fellow man.


Hooks that make Mrs. Sullivan want to read more... Leading Questions (using 3 questions min. that aren’t

answered in body of paper)


Hooks that make Mrs. Sullivan want to read more... Allusion (referencing some famous literary work, event in

history, or piece of art.) Two thousand years ago, Jesus told how three men walked past a robbed and bleeding traveler and how only the fourth, a Samaritan, had enough humanity to pause and help the sufferer. There are not enough “Samaritans” in this modern world. Man must develop a concern for his fellow man.

Two thousand years ago, Jesus told how three men walked past a robbed and bleeding traveler and how only the fourth, a Samaritan, had enough humanity to pause and help the sufferer. There are not enough “Samaritans” in this modern world. Man must develop a concern for his fellow man.


Hooks that make Mrs. Sullivan want to read more... Descriptive Opening(use more than the five senses who

you see, smell, hear, taste, or touch!)

When walking through any village in America one may discover on at least one end of the town the dirty, neglected, overcrowded tenements or hovels where the poor abide. In leaky roofed shacks with torn, dingy shreds of wall paper hanging from water stained walls, the beaten, helpless children huddle with pinched and hungry faces around the evening’s scanty offerings. It is ironic that modern man has developed his technology to the point where he could relieve virtually all of such unnecessary suffering, but has not developed his social conscience to the point that he is moved to do so. Man must develop a concern for his fellow man.

When walking through any village in America one may discover on at least one end of the town the dirty, neglected, overcrowded tenements or hovels where the poor abide. In leaky roofed shacks with torn, dingy shreds of wall paper hanging from water stained walls, the beaten, helpless children huddle with pinched and hungry faces around the evening’s scanty offerings. It is ironic that modern man has developed his technology to the point where he could relieve virtually all of such unnecessary suffering, but has not developed his social conscience to the point that he is moved to do so. Man must develop a concern for his fellow man.


Hooks that make Mrs. Sullivan want to read more... Conversation(using 3 questions min. that aren’t answered in

body of paper)

A French peasant came begging to the door of Marie Antoinette, the bride of Louis XVI.“And what does he want?” demanded the queen.“Your Highness, the man is hungry,” replied a courtier.“Well, then let him eat bread.”“Your Highness, he has no bread.”“Then let him eat cake, and the haughty queen turned thoughtlessly to her own pursuitsAccording to the story, a month later the queen was dead. She was guillotined by the French people because she did not have enough social conscience to feed a hungry man. Many people in the modern world are turning from the needy of today fully as callously as Marie Antoinette turned from the French Peasant. Modern man must develop a concern for his fellow man.

A French peasant came begging to the door of Marie Antoinette, the bride of Louis XVI.“And what does he want?” demanded the queen.“Your Highness, the man is hungry,” replied a courtier.“Well, then let him eat bread.”“Your Highness, he has no bread.”“Then let him eat cake, and the haughty queen turned thoughtlessly to her own pursuitsAccording to the story, a month later the queen was dead. She was guillotined by the French people because she did not have enough social conscience to feed a hungry man. Many people in the modern world are turning from the needy of today fully as callously as Marie Antoinette turned from the French Peasant. Modern man must develop a concern for his fellow man.

Ok, so I’ve got my hook…now what? The remainder of your alphabet entry

should look like this triangle: Hook Transition

General Discussion about topic

Transition into thesis

Directional, NOT destination thesis

IN THE NAME OF SHARING!

Considering the Clincher….

Clinchers that make Mrs. Sullivan go hmm… Evaluation of the V.I.P. status of your essay’s

subjectThese amazing, controversial photographs of the comet will continue to be the subject of debate because, according to some scientists, they yield the most important clues yet revealed about the origins of the universe.


Clinchers that make Mrs. Sullivan go hmm… Statement of essay’s broader implications

Since the studies of feline leukemia may someday play a role in the discovery of a cure for AIDS in human beings, the experiments, as expensive as they are, must continue.

Since the studies of feline leukemia may someday play a role in the discovery of a cure for AIDS in human beings, the experiments, as expensive as they are, must continue.


Clinchers that make Mrs. Sullivan go hmm… Call your audience to action

The fate of World War II hero, Raoul Wallenberg, is still unknown. Although Congress has awarded him honorary citizenship, such a tribute is not enough. People must write their congressional representatives today to voice their demand that they investigate his disappearance or produce proof of his death. No hero deserves less.

The fate of World War II hero, Raoul Wallenberg, is still unknown. Although Congress has awarded him honorary citizenship, such a tribute is not enough. People must write their congressional representatives today to voice their demand that they investigate his disappearance or produce proof of his death. No hero deserves less.


Clinchers that make Mrs. Sullivan go hmm… Warning based on essay’s thesis.Understanding the

politics that led up to Hiroshima is essential for all Americans—indeed, for the entire world’s people. Without such knowledge, the frightful possibility exists that somewhere, sometime, someone may drop the bomb again.

Understanding the politics that led up to Hiroshima is essential for all Americans—indeed, for the entire world’s people. Without such knowledge, the frightful possibility exists that somewhere, sometime, someone may drop the bomb again.


Clinchers that make Mrs. Sullivan go hmm… Witticism that emphasizes or sums up the

point of the essayNo one said dieting was easy. However, for some people who have surrendered, the cliché, “half a loaf is better than none” has taken on a new meaning.


Clinchers that make Mrs. Sullivan go hmm… Quotation, story, or joke that emphasizes or sumps up the

point of the essay.

Given the horrific conditions in which cows are kept, to the even more terrifyingly painful end endured when they are murdered, it is essential for all Americans to adapt to a more humane, vegetarian diet, acknowledging that the kind of cheese that is not their cheese is “nacho cheese.”

Given the horrific conditions in which cows are kept, to the even more terrifyingly painful end endured when they are murdered, it is essential for all Americans to adapt to a more humane, vegetarian diet, acknowledging that the kind of cheese that is not their cheese is “nacho cheese.”


Clinchers that make Mrs. Sullivan go hmm… Image or description that lends finality to the

essayAs the last of the Big Screen’s giant ants are incinerated by the army scientist, one can almost hear the movie audiences of the 1950’s breathing a collective sigh of relief, secure in the knowledge that once again, the threat of nuclear radiation has been vanquished by the efforts of the U.S. Military.

As the last of the Big Screen’s giant ants are incinerated by the army scientist, one can almost hear the movie audiences of the 1950’s breathing a collective sigh of relief, secure in the knowledge that once again, the threat of nuclear radiation has been vanquished by the efforts of the U.S. Military.


Clinchers that make Mrs. Sullivan go hmm… Rhetorical question that makes the readers

think about the essay’s main point.No one wants to see hostages put into danger. However, what nation can afford to let terrorists know that they can get away with murder?


Clinchers that make Mrs. Sullivan go hmm… Forecast based on essay’s thesisSoap operas will

continue to be popular not only because they distract people from daily chores, but also because they present life as people want it to be: fast paced, glamorous, and full of exciting characters.

IN THE NAME OF SHARING!

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Closing time: considering conclusions and inspecting the introductions