Controversial Issues Peer Edit

New Groups

Use a highlighter to break apart your paper by the sections you are

covering!• Introduction• History • Extent• Repercussion• Solution 1 – Band

Aid Solution• Solution 2 – Big

Solution• Conclusion

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Based on the number of people at your table you will assign people to

different sections of the paper:1. Introduction &

Conclusion2. History 3. Extent4. Repercussion5. Solution 1 – Band Aid

Solution & Solution 2 – Big Solution

During your peer edit you will only review your paragraph(s) and do the following:

1. Initial on the opposite side of the labeled margin.

2. Mark directly on the paper any mistakes or corrections or questions – just like a normal peer edit.

3. On the notecard record the following:

2 strengths (+)2 items to consider ( )

The Introduction

• Is the attention getter vibrant? Will it truly draw in the reader?• Is there a clear statement of the problem?• Check your thesis – be sure it is the last sentence (or two) of the

intro paragraph.• Is the intro strong enough to capture the audience’s attention?• Is there a BRIEF background on the topic? Do you feel as though

you know a smidge about what you will be reading about?• Has the author created an interest for you in this topic? Are you

worried it could destroy the world?• Is there a smooth transition into the thesis?• Is there not too much “story” or narrative in the introduction? • Are you (as the reader) feeling a level of concern that you do

need to know more about this so that you can help to solve this problem?

The Body Paragraphs

History of the Problem -• Do you know all that you need to

know about the problem?• Is the focus on the problem at hand?

Read the thesis just to be sure!• Is the history contained within just

one paragraph?• Do you feel you need to know

anything else? If so, make a note of that!

The Body Paragraphs

Extent of the Problem (the immediate issues at hand) –• Do we know who is directly affected? • Do we know how bad it really is?• Is the extent “bad” enough to create

concern?• Is there a connection to why other

teens would care about this problem?

The Body Paragraphs

Repercussions (the snowball effect) – • Is it clear what will happen in the

future if the problem is not solved?• Are the repercussions clearly

addressing a snow ball effect? • Is a dire need for this “problem” to be

solved set forward?

The Body Paragraphs

Future Solutions –• Are there two paragraphs delineated for the solutions?• Is the first paragraph a smaller, immediate “band aid” to

the solution?• Could you (as the reader) take part in the band aid

solution?

• Is the second solution paragraph clearly a bigger, stronger solution that could potentially make a great change?

• Are there any holes or faulty logic within the solutions? Do you need to know more? Less?

The Conclusion

• Do you get a feeling of what the thesis was? (It doesn’t have to be restated, but we need to come back to the main ideas of the problem and the big picture solution.)

• Does the conclusion of the essay have a sense of completeness?

• Do you feel like this problem is real and you must do something to help be a part of the solution?

• Does the conclusion end with a strong final sentence without being too dramatic?

Quick Concerns:Match your PDDon’t stack quotes & paraphrases! You

need at least two sentences of commentary between.

Let your topic sentence do its job!No quotes or paraphrases as topic

sentences!

The Rubric

Early Submission:Due to me Friday, February 27th or Monday, March 1st

Regular Submission:Monday, March 9th

(you can turn in early if you like!)

The Rubric

Final Thoughts:List on the back Three things you did wellThree things you have left to doIf you had to assign yourself an overall

holistic score RIGHT NOW what would you give yourself and why – give the number (83) and then explain in six to eight sentences.

Due Dates:• Early Submission: 11:59pm, Friday, February 27th • Regular Submission: Friday, March 6th