Spring semester 2016

Editing the NMIH107

case study & preparing

for the NMIH105 essay

Dr Jeannette Stirling,

Senior lecturer,

Learning Development

Subject

Assessment

1

Assessment

2

Assessment

3

Assessment

4

NMIH105 Week 6 Essay

2000 wds

40%

Weeks 8 & 9 Group presentation

20 mins

20%

Exam Period Final exam

120 mins

40%

NMIH106 Week 9 In-class quiz

60 mins

20%

Week 10 Assignment

2500 wds

40%

Exam Period Final exam

120 mins

40%

NMIH107 Week 4 Case study

1500 wds

35%

Week 13 Case study

3000 wds

65%

Week 13

Nursing

Competency

Assessment

Schedule

NMIH108 Week 7 Health Behaviour

Change diary

1500 wds

60%

Exam Period Final exam

120 mins

40%

Does anyone want to revisit

any points from last week’s

seminar on the NMIH107

case study assignment?

Before we get started…

Proof reading & editing the NMIH107 case study

1. Check overall structure

2. Check your grammar &

punctuation

3. Check that you’ve addressed

the ‘technical’ aspects of the

assignment

Editing for structure

Can you clearly identify the

discrete sections of the

case study by the

suggested sub-headings?

Introduction

Discussion

Nursing care plan

Conclusion

Does each section address

the points in the checklist

on the next slide?

• Preview the key aspects of Kyle’s condition in paediatric terms?

• Briefly state the importance to a Nursing assessment & the development of a relevant care plan?

• Identify the main focus of your discussion?

Introduction

Approx. 250 wds.

• Provide an overview of how these 2 AoLs have been affected?

• Clearly explain how you’ll assess Kyle in relation to these AoLs?

• Prioritise Kyle’s initial care needs & then discuss how you will treat his symptoms?

Discussion: Breathing & controlling body

temperature

Approx. 600 wds.

• Identify ONE issue related to breathing OR controlling body temperature relevant to Kyle’s case?

• Formulate a plan / goal for improving the symptom?

• Clearly identify your strategies for achieving the plan?

• Evaluate the merit of the plan?

Nursing care plan

Approx. 400 wds.

• Summarise the key points emerging from your case study & the key learning from your research about prioritising & managing these particular AoLs in a paediatric context

Conclusion

Approx. 250 wds.

Checklist: does your ……

Editing for grammar & punctuation

Read through carefully &

check for:

Any problems with

sentences (sentence

fragments, run-on

sentences, & so forth);

that you have achieved

consistent noun-verb

agreement;

that your use of

apostrophes is elegantly

aware.

Remember that a complete, grammatically

correct sentence requires …

Subject (noun phrase) Verb phrase Object (noun phrase) Adverbial

Somebody broke the window last night

Essential Essential Essential Optional

Sentencing: the fragment…

Sentence fragments are strings of words that

have been punctuated as a sentence but are not

valid sentences;

that is, they do not contain all the elements

necessary to create a sentence.

Sentence fragments are usually incomplete ideas

Some examples from Nursing essays …

For example, low levels of education,

higher rate of domestic violence, and

young maternal age.

Describe and identify community

resources to assist in the prevention of

injury in the home.

Please

explain???

Completing the idea …

There are several reasons for this statistical difference;

for example, low levels of education, higher rate of

domestic violence, and young maternal age.

Before Mrs Wall is discharged it is essential to identify

community resources to assist in the prevention of future

injury in the home.

On the other hand, you don’t want to overpack …

Ensuring the patients maintaining an airway which

Mr Beto is clearly communicating ultimately his

breathing on his own and he has circulation.

This is called a run-on sentence

Ensuring the patients maintaining an airway

which Mr Beto is clearly communicating

ultimately his breathing on his own and he has

circulation.

It is important to ensure that the patient is

maintaining an airway. Mr Beto is

communicating clearly, breathing normally and

his circulation appears viable.

Matching your verbs to your subject or noun

Crookes and Davies (2006 p. 232) states

that questionnaires in research is defined

as a “printed self-report form(s) designed

to elicit information that can be obtained

through written responses of the

subject”.

Crookes and Davies (2006) state that

questionnaires in research

are defined as a “printed self-report

form(s) designed to elicit information

that can be obtained through written

responses of the subject” (p. 232).

Apostrophes?

Where do I go? Where DO I go???

The ‘Stolen Generation’ is well

documented throughout the literature and

the significant dissociation effects it has

on Indigenous Australian’s.

Nordby, Kjønsberg and Hummelvoll (2010)

argue that consumers rights and, indeed,

recovery, are improved by involvement of

carers in mental health care.

The ‘Stolen Generation’ is well documented

throughout the literature and the significant

dissociation effects it has on Indigenous

Australians.

Nordby, Kjønsberg and Hummelvoll

(2010) argue that consumers’ rights and

recovery, are improved by involvement of

carers in mental health care.

OR

OR

Evaluating resources / moving the discussion

along…

X states that…

X asserts that…

X points out that…

X takes the view that…

X concludes that…

X claims that…

X suggests that…

X observes that…

X proposes that…

X insists that…

However, Y argues that…

The evidence suggests

that…

Controlling the comic commas…

Leonora walked on her

head, a little higher

than usual. or

Leonora walked on, her

head a little higher than

usual.

The convict said the

judge is mad. or The convict, said the

judge, is mad.

Truss, L 2003, Eats, Shoots & Leaves, Profile Books, London, p. 97.

The driver managed to

escape from the vehicle

before it sank and swam to

the river-bank.

or

The driver managed to escape

from the vehicle before it sank,

and swam to the river-bank.

And finally … Are your in-text & listed references correctly formatted?

This type of a method has the potential to

introduce bias into the study as participants are

considered simply because they are available

and convenient at the time of recruitment

Crookes and Davies (2006, p. 100).

This type of a method has the potential to

introduce bias into the study as participants are

considered simply because they are available

and convenient at the time of recruitment

(Crookes and Davies 2006, p. 100).

This type of a method has the potential to

introduce bias into the study as participants are

considered simply because they are available

and convenient at the time of recruitment

(Crookes & Davies 2006, p. 100).

OR

OR

A Harvard style reference list looks like?

Australian Aboriginal and Torres Strait Islander Health Survey 2012-13, Australian Bureau of Statistics, viewed 28 August 2014, http://www.abs.gov.au/ausstats/abs@.nsf/mf/4727.0.55.001

Australian Institute of Health and Welfare, viewed 24 August 2014, http://www.aihw.gov.au/indigenous-australians/

Candlin, S 2007, Therapeutic communication. A lifespan approach, Pearson Education Australia, Frenchs Forest.

Goethals, S, Gastmans, C & de Castler, B 2010, ‘Nurses’ ethical reasoning and behaviour: A literature review’, International Journal of Nursing Studies, vol. 47, no. 5, pp. 635-650.

Harms, L 2007, Working with people. Communication skills for reflective practice, Oxford, Melbourne.

Sievert, D, Armola R, Armola M 2011, ‘Chlorhexidine gluconate bathing: does it decrease hospital-acquired infections’, American Journal of Critical Care, vol. 20, no. 2, pp. 166-170.

Silverman, J, Kurtz, S & Draper, J 2005, Skills for communicating with patients, 2nd edn, Radcliff Publishing, Oxford.

Sully, P & Dallas, J 2005, Essential communication skills for nursing, Elsevier Mosby, Sydney.

World Health Organisation, viewed 19 August 2014, http://www.who.int/mediacentre/factsheets/fs138/en/

NB: Note that the list is organised in alphabetical order.

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Planning for the NMIH105 Essay: 2000wds

QUESTION:

According to the World Health Organisation (WHO) more than 900 million

international journeys are undertaken every year. Global travel on this scale

exposes many people to a range of health risks. Many of these risks can be

minimized by precautions taken before, during and after travel (WHO 2012).

Recently, the West African Ebola outbreak has been the largest, most

severe and most complex in human history. For more than a year, people

from all over the world have answered the call to work with WHO to

overcome this outbreak.

On the 9 June 2016 WHO declared the end of the most recent outbreak of

Ebola virus disease in Liberia. This announcement came 42 days (two 21-

day incubation cycles of the virus) after the last confirmed Ebola patient in

Liberia tested negative for the disease for the second time. Liberia now

enters a 90-day period of heightened surveillance to ensure that any new

cases are identified quickly and contained before spreading.

GOAL:

The goal of this assignment is for students to conduct library

research and to acquire knowledge and understanding about

the Ebola virus and safety precautions when travelling. The

students will develop an appreciation of health precautions and preventions surrounding the virus.

In the beginning …

Deep breaths. Focus. Scan the

terrain.

Plot your navigational points …

Analyse the task:

• PLAN each stage of your essay so that when you begin writing, you

can be fairly sure that you’re going to address all aspects of the topic.

Briefly map your plan of

action:

• WHAT will be the organising focus for your discussion ?

• HOW do you need to order your response?

Consider the terms of your topic:

• DO YOU UNDERSTAND the meaning of all the terms / ideas relevant to the task?

Do I understand the history and pathophysiology of Ebola (including varied strains) and its mode of

transmission?

Can I discuss the incidence and prevalence of reported cases of Ebola in Guinea, Liberia & Sierra

Leone, including the current estimated morbidity and mortality rates?

Can I clearly identify the incubation period of Ebola along with the current treatment methods of persons

affected by Ebola including vaccination options?

What are the three - 3 - objectives in the Phase 3 Ebola crisis identified by WHO?

Do I understand Objective one – 1 – of the phase 3 goals, including plans to accurately

define & rapidly interrupt all remaining transmission chains?

Planning your structure …

Next week …

Delving deeper

into the NMIH105

essay?