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From the abstract to the concrete
SENTENCE LEVELING
Adapted from Pat Sherbert’s APSI class
Leveling means to group the sentences in your paragraph on different
levels to show the logical progression of thoughts.
WRITING A LEVELED PARAGRAPH
Abstract – Existing in thought, but having no physical existence
Examples: love, justice, freedom
Concrete – Existing in a real, physical form
Examples: dog, car, chair, turkey
ABSTRACT VS. CONCRETE
Leveling means that the sentences move from abstract ideas to more
concrete ideas.
WRITING A LEVELED PARAGRAPH
S. I. HAYAKAWA’S ABSTRACTION LADDER
TRANSLATING THE ABSTRACTION LADDER TO WRITING
Imagine this discussion.
“I have a pet at home.”“What kind of pet?”“It’s a dog.”“What kind of dog?”“It’s a Saint Bernard.”“Grown up or a puppy?”“It’s full grown.”“What color is it?”“It’s brown and white.”
TRANSLATING THE ABSTRACTION LADDER TO WRITING
Imagine this discussion.
“I have a pet at home.”“What kind of pet?”“It’s a dog.”“What kind of dog?”“It’s a Saint Bernard.”“Grown up or a puppy?”“It’s full grown.”“What color is it?”“It’s brown and white.”
More abstract -- pet
TRANSLATING THE ABSTRACTION LADDER TO WRITING
Imagine this discussion.
“I have a pet at home.”“What kind of pet?”“It’s a dog.”“What kind of dog?”“It’s a Saint Bernard.”“Grown up or a puppy?”“It’s full grown.”“What color is it?”“It’s brown and white.”
More abstract -- pet
More concrete – A fully grown, brown and white St. Bernard
I like motoring better than flying.
I like Rambler cars.
I like American cars better than English cars.
I like my Rambler Classic four-door sedan.
I like travel.
ANSWERS
I like motoring better than flying.
I like Rambler cars.
I like American cars better than English cars.
I like my Rambler Classic four-door sedan.
I like travel. (1)
ANSWERS
I like motoring better than flying. (2)
I like Rambler cars.
I like American cars better than English cars.
I like my Rambler Classic four-door sedan.
I like travel. (1)
ANSWERS
I like motoring better than flying. (2)
I like Rambler cars.
I like American cars better than English cars. (3)
I like my Rambler Classic four-door sedan.
I like travel. (1)
ANSWERS
I like motoring better than flying. (2)
I like Rambler cars. (4)
I like American cars better than English cars. (3)
I like my Rambler Classic four-door sedan.
I like travel. (1)
ANSWERS
I like motoring better than flying. (2)
I like Rambler cars. (4)
I like American cars better than English cars. (3)
I like my Rambler Classic four-door sedan. (5)
I like travel. (1)
ANSWERS
PRACTICE TIMEWITH EXAMPLE B
1. Livestock2. Cows______________2. Pigs_______________2. Sheep_____________
THE DEAD-LEVEL PARAGRAPH
Dead-level ParagraphWe have several types of livestock on my farm. The first kinds of animals are cows. The second kinds of animals are pigs. Finally, we also have sheep.
THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO
1. Livestock2. Cows__________________3. Dairy______________3. Beef_______________4. Angus__________2. Pigs___________________3. Pork_______________4. Berkshire_______
THE MULTI-LEVEL PARAGRAPH
Multi-Level ParagraphWe have several types of livestock on my farm. The first kinds of animals are cows. We have dairy cattle, which produce milk, and beef cattle, which are used for meat. In fact, our beef cattle are Angus cows, which are among the most expensive kind. We also have pigs on the farm. These are used for pork. They are the Berkshire species, which are a rare breed of pig.
THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO
Dead-Level Paragraph1. Livestock
2. Cows______________2. Pigs_______________2. Sheep_____________
Multi-Level Paragraph1. Livestock
2. Cows__________________3. Dairy______________3. Beef_______________4. Angus__________2. Pigs___________________3. Pork_______________4. Berkshire_______
THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO
Dead-Level ParagraphWe have several types of livestock on my farm. The fi rst kinds of animals are cows. The second kinds of animals are pigs. Finally, we also have sheep.
Multi-Level ParagraphWe have several types of livestock on my farm. The fi rst kinds of animals are cows. We have dairy cattle, which produce milk, and beef cattle, which are used for meat. In fact, our beef cattle are Angus cows, which are among the most expensive kind. We also have pigs on the farm. These are used for pork. They are the Berkshire species, which are a rare breed of pig.
THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO
Dead-Level ParagraphWe have several types of livestock on my farm. (1) The fi rst kinds of animals are cows. (2) The second kinds of animals are pigs. (2) Finally, we also have sheep. (2)
Multi-Level ParagraphWe have several types of livestock on my farm. The fi rst kinds of animals are cows. We have dairy cattle, which produce milk, and beef cattle, which are used for meat. In fact, our beef cattle are Angus cows, which are among the most expensive kind. We also have pigs on the farm. These are used for pork. They are the Berkshire species, which are a rare breed of pig.
THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO
Dead-Level ParagraphWe have several types of livestock on my farm. (1) The fi rst kinds of animals are cows. (2) The second kinds of animals are pigs. (2) Finally, we also have sheep. (2)
Multi-Level ParagraphWe have several types of livestock on my farm. (1) The fi rst kinds of animals are cows. (2) We have dairy cattle, which produce milk, and beef cattle, which are used for meat. (3) In fact, our beef cattle are Angus cows, which are among the most expensive kind. (4) We also have pigs on the farm. (2) These are used for pork. (3) They are the Berkshire species, which are a rare breed of pig. (4)
THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO
I don’t want this Dead-level paragraph(1, 1, 1, 1) or (1, 2, 2, 2, 2)
This is a little better Straight-level paragraph
(1, 2, 3, 4, 5)
This is the best Multi-level paragraph(1, 2, 3, 2, 3, 4) or (1, 2, 3, 4, 2, 3, 2, 3,
1) or all sorts of variations
WHAT KIND OF PARAGRAPH DO I WANT?
PRACTICE TIME
I share my house with two cats._____ The elder cat is named Sally._____ She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice._____ The other cat is named Yerdle._____ She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat._____ Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift._____ I hate it when she does this! _____
PRACTICE TOGETHER
I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally._____ She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice._____ The other cat is named Yerdle._____ She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat._____ Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift._____ I hate it when she does this! _____
PRACTICE TOGETHER
I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally. (2) She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice._____ The other cat is named Yerdle._____ She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat._____ Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift._____ I hate it when she does this! _____
PRACTICE TOGETHER
I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally. (2) She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice. (3) The other cat is named Yerdle._____ She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat._____ Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift._____ I hate it when she does this! _____
PRACTICE TOGETHER
I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally. (2) She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice. (3) The other cat is named Yerdle. (2) She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat._____ Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift._____ I hate it when she does this! _____
PRACTICE TOGETHER
I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally. (2) She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice. (3) The other cat is named Yerdle. (2) She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat. (3) Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift._____ I hate it when she does this! _____
PRACTICE TOGETHER
I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally. (2) She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice. (3) The other cat is named Yerdle. (2) She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat. (3) Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift. (3) I hate it when she does this! _____
PRACTICE TOGETHER
I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally. (2) She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice. (3) The other cat is named Yerdle. (2) She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat. (3) Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift. (3) I hate it when she does this! (4)
PRACTICE TOGETHER
1. I share my house with two cats.2. The elder cat is named Sally.
3. She is a white, brown, and black 2. The other cat is named Yerdle.
3. She is named after Dr. Seuss 3. Although she, too…
4. I hate it when she does this!
PRACTICE TOGETHER
COMPLETE THE BOTTOM
PARAGRAPH ON YOUR OWN