GCSE English - TIBHS

Tauheedul Islam Boys’ High School

GCSE EnglishWJEC English Units 1 and 2

‘ Man can have nothing, but what he strives for; (The fruit of) his striving will soon come in sight: Then he will be rewarded with a complete reward.’ (surah 53:39-41)

Why are exams important?

What’s the point of revising for them?

Well one reason is that, for the first time in over 10 years of education, you will sit exams that mean something for you. When you entered primary school, you did not sit exams to get in. When you came to Tauheedul, you did not need exams to be allowed to study here. (Yes, you did exams at the end of primary school – but really that was to judge the quality of your school. After all, you didn’t get a SATs certificate did you?)

However, the exams that you sit this summer will matter - for you. They will decide whether you get to go on to study the A Level or BTEC course that you want and, ultimately, whether you enjoy the career of your choice.

So, these exams are crucial. Not just to determine what you do next, but to decide what you will be doing in another 10 years’ time. Doors of opportunity will open or they will close.

To ensure you do well in these exams, your teachers will work very hard over the next few months to deliver the learning, guide you on your revision and give you feedback on your practice exams. Your parents will free you up from the housework, encourage and praise you when you do well and pray for your success.

Critically, there are two things that your parents and your teachers cannot do for you. They cannot revise for you and they cannot sit the exams for you. Over the next four months, we want you to take personal responsibility for your grades, work hard in each and every lesson and put the time in to revise at home.

To achieve great things, we must be prepared to give up things. We may need to give up social networking for a while, stop going out so frequently and watch a little less TV. Without doubt, a little bit of sacrifice and a commitment to revision time now; will mean a lot of happiness on results’ day in late August.

To help you to revise, your English teachers have designed this revision guide for you. This will help you navigate your revision plan, your English teachers will also provide you with revision resources (mind maps, practice papers, flash cards etc). But, and I am repeating myself, they cannot revise for you.

So, no excuses, it’s over to you!

I pray that the Almighty inspires you to work hard over the next few months, make the necessary sacrifices, strive to do well in the exams and rewards you fully for your efforts, Ameen.

Wassalaam

Mubaaruck IbrahimPrincipal and Chief Executive

‘ A little bit of sacrifice and time invested now will mean a lot of happiness on results’ day….’

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Your friend has asked you for your advice about running the London Marathon next year. Write a letter in response giving your views about his/her decision to run the race. Spend 25 minutes writing your answer.

23 Cherry Garden Drive Cherry Tree Blackburn

Lancashire BB3 7XY

Monday 8th February 2016

Hey Chloe,

How are you, my dear friend? I can’t believe it’s almost a year since I saw you last! When are you coming back up to the sunny North? It misses you; I miss you; we all miss you! How are the two little ones? I can imagine they love the weather in the South compared to the shocking weather we get all year round ‐ poor us. Do you fancy trading?

I received your letter; thank you for writing. I am okay thank you ‐ no need to worry… I know you’re only a phone call away if I need someone to talk to. We have been friends now for, wow, 15 years! We’ve had some great memories haven’t we? And now you want to add one more, one really big one… The London Marathon!

Firstly, I think it is amazing that you want to run the marathon ‐ I really do. I do have some questions for you though ‐ you know what I’m like! Which charity are you running for? When did you start training? Please tell me you have!?!?! Have you bought a fancy dress costume for the TV? And the most important question, can I join you? How fabulous would that be!

Thinking about charities, I would like to run for Cancer Research ‐ they helped out my Grandad when he was ill and I would like to repay them if I can. Which one would you run for Chloe? Raising money for charity would be amazing ‐ think about the feeling, emotions and pleasure we would get from doing something amazing! We could do it together ‐ you could get sponsors from the South and I could from the North ‐ we could raise thousands Chloe, thousands!

We need to do it in fancy dress though: Scooby and Scrappy doo, The Teletubbies, or even Mr and Mrs Santa Claus? The possibilities and endless; I am very excited about this now. Should we get anyone else involved: John, Jamie, Michelle or even David? (Can you imagine David running for 26.2 miles in fancy dress ‐ we would have to carry him half‐way haha…)

Right, one major thing we need to think about! We need to make a pact about dieting!!! The thought worries me; (I know it worries you too!) We need to stick to a strict diet ‐ even though I am drinking Coca‐Cola and eating chocolate as I write this letter. Oh well ‐ the diet

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starts Monday as they say. I will research the best ways to diet to build stamina and muscle and I will send the information to you as soon as possible, so we can start together. If you start earlier ‐ that’s cheating…

Okay, so I will end this letter here. I am so excited by this opportunity now and am relishing the chance to raise money for charity ‐ what a buzz we will get! Please take care of yourself and give the boys a hug from me. Look after yourself; I love you and miss you; I can’t wait to see you again my little running companion!

Lots of love,

Jennie

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Write a letter in reply, giving your opinions about mobile phones. Spend 25 minutes writing your answer. 23 Cherry Garden Drive Cherry Tree Blackburn

Lancashire BB3 7XY

Monday 8th February 2016

Blackburn Advisor 1 High Street Blackburn Lancashire BB1 1HT RE: The mobile phone ‐ a fantastic invention or a social liability?

Dear Editor,

I am writing this letter, in response to an extract in your latest edition of The Lancashire Telegraph, expressing my views and opinions regarding the significance of mobile phones and their practicalities.

Technology is evolving at a rapid pace, would you not you agree? Society is now driven by mobile devices; alarmingly 75% of the community’s population have mobile phone devices. This is a major increase from ten years ago where the figure stood at only 50%! In your article you do express that “technology can be very impressive.” I wholeheartedly agree with your statement and agree that technology can be impressive, yet the consequences, if used irresponsibly, can be cataclysmic!

A main motive for having a mobile phone is for convenience and for emergency situations. Firstly, having a mobile phone allows individuals to have regular communication with close friends and family ‐ would you not agree this is advantageous? Further to this, we are always able to stay connected and are able to use the device portably. One can use mobiles for various jobs: sending and receiving emails, browsing websites and downloading games/music. Secondly, although mobile phones do not guarantee safety, you can use it to make calls whenever there is an emergency. I implore anyone to argue against this essential point; everyone would agree that having a mobile in an emergency is a must!

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Having said this, I do take your other points into careful consideration as mobile devices, if used irresponsibly, could lead to anti‐social, and sometimes illegal, behaviour. This is where we need to be careful, clever and conscientious about how we use technology. One major worry I have are the amount of accidents, caused daily, due to people’s inability to use mobile devices safely. Inexplicably, in Blackburn alone, on average five people per day died on our roads last year ‐ due to the inappropriate use of mobile phones whilst driving ‐ a statistic we could all tremble at.

Outlined above, I have expressed my concern for the inappropriate use of mobile devices, but my view is that there are more rewards than hindrances of having one. This is why I have come to the conclusion that, for a modern day society, mobile phones are a necessity. Is it possible to live in today’s society without one? I am sure it is! Nonetheless, why would we if we are responsible and accountable for our actions when using such a magnificent invention!

In conclusion, I am a firm believer in everything having a place in the modern society we live in, as long as it is used sensibly and responsibly. I do believe that technology has a lot to answer for in regards to the safety and welfare of the local community and beyond, but the question I pose to you is, ‘Are mobile phones to blame for the issues generated socially or is it the users who are to blame?’

I acknowledge the time spent reading this letter and would be grateful if you could respond to my letter expressing your views further on this important matter.

Yours faithfully,

Mr I Ramsay

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Having said this, I do take your other points into careful consideration as mobile devices, if used irresponsibly, could lead to anti‐social, and sometimes illegal, behaviour. This is where we need to be careful, clever and conscientious about how we use technology. One major worry I have are the amount of accidents, caused daily, due to people’s inability to use mobile devices safely. Inexplicably, in Blackburn alone, on average five people per day died on our roads last year ‐ due to the inappropriate use of mobile phones whilst driving ‐ a statistic we could all tremble at.

Outlined above, I have expressed my concern for the inappropriate use of mobile devices, but my view is that there are more rewards than hindrances of having one. This is why I have come to the conclusion that, for a modern day society, mobile phones are a necessity. Is it possible to live in today’s society without one? I am sure it is! Nonetheless, why would we if we are responsible and accountable for our actions when using such a magnificent invention!

In conclusion, I am a firm believer in everything having a place in the modern society we live in, as long as it is used sensibly and responsibly. I do believe that technology has a lot to answer for in regards to the safety and welfare of the local community and beyond, but the question I pose to you is, ‘Are mobile phones to blame for the issues generated socially or is it the users who are to blame?’

I acknowledge the time spent reading this letter and would be grateful if you could respond to my letter expressing your views further on this important matter.

Yours faithfully,

Mr I Ramsay

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Writing Task

Write a report to the local council giving your views on the best way to improve the community cohesion in your town. Spend 25 minutes writing your answer.

A report to Blackburn and Darwen Council raising awareness of beneficial ways in order to improve community cohesion in the community of Blackburn and Darwen.

To: Blackburn and Darwen Council

From: Mr S Patel (Chairman of the school’s committee.)

Introduction

At a recent meeting, held at a Tauheedul Islam Boys’ High School, there were key matters arising with regards to ways in which the town of Blackburn could benefit from the injection of new and innovative ideas in order to achieve community cohesion. In this report, I will outline proposed ideas from the meeting which will highlight significant areas where Blackburn could benefit from improved communal facilities.

Current issues within the town centre

At this moment in time, the community of Blackburn lacks any ambition and drive to be unique, independent and traditional. A recent study shows that eighty‐two per cent of the local community do not feel as though their town is unrivalled and distinctive enough in comparison to other towns further afield in neighbouring boroughs. The local community feel that the town would benefit from copious innovative plans in order to bring the community together. In a recent census we highlighted particular areas that residents feel are essential in order to help develop, cultivate and re‐define the community of Blackburn and Darwen.

Engaging young people from different backgrounds

Schools, unquestionably, play a major part in developing cohesive communities. They have an open access to education and are able to promote social and cultural diversity; they provide a meeting place for community meetings; and they bring people together by involving people from different backgrounds in decision making processes. The town of Blackburn is filled with fruitful diversity and one major flaw, that can easily be eradicated, could be to use schools purposefully in order to develop whole community projects such as drama and arts festivals, music, food and drink festivals. By including the young people of the community in the decision making process, we are building a culture of togetherness and cohesion which is a major factor if the town aspires to be one hundred per cent cohesive. Would you not agree? This is a unanimous drive by the citizens of the Blackburn and Darwen community.

Community markets for festive periods of the year

In the Blackburn and Darwen area we celebrate numerous religious festivals: Eid, Christmas and Easter to name but a few. What do we do to celebrate these momentous events as a community? To develop the town’s cohesion, we need to mark each event collectively. It

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was claimed in the meeting, by numerous citizens, that we should hold annual community markets where food, drink, presents, gifts and stories are shared to mark each occasion joyously. Community markets would be a productive way to encourage and engage the whole community to join together as one. This idea was suggested and agreed by the majority of the community, as long as the markets are tasteful, sophisticated and elegant. We want the markets to be an advertisement for the local town and a welcoming feature for citizens of other boroughs to come and visit.

Challenging and changing attitudes

People generally base what they believe in from what they have experienced or heard through hearsay or through the media. When beliefs start to impact on or are divisive to individual or community relationships ‐ this causes a threat to cohesion. This is why it is fundamentally important that we find ways to define, test and then change perceptions of individuals and groups where these perceptions are misplaced or misunderstood. This will help develop the spirit of the community as long as we challenge and change those minor attitudes that could be disadvantageous for our journey forward; we must all respect, respond and act accordingly in order for this proposal to be successful. Conclusion Within this report I have outlined the ways in which the Blackburn and Darwen community could engross the community’s citizens in bringing together the residents of the town, and surrounding area, together as one by suggesting activities that could take place within the community. There is no question that community cohesion exists however we need to engage the community and open up the community’s spirit by putting together a project that shows cohesion consistently. I am sure, with your support and guidance, the community of Blackburn and Darwen could be the community where everyone joins as one to live in peace and harmony.




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People generally base what they believe in from what they have experienced or heard through hearsay or through the media. When beliefs start to impact on or are divisive to individual or community relationships ‐ this causes a threat to cohesion. This is why it is fundamentally important that we find ways to define, test and then change perceptions of individuals and groups where these perceptions are misplaced or misunderstood. This will help develop the spirit of the community as long as we challenge and change those minor attitudes that could be disadvantageous for our journey forward; we must all respect, respond and act accordingly in order for this proposal to be successful. Conclusion Within this report I have outlined the ways in which the Blackburn and Darwen community could engross the community’s citizens in bringing together the residents of the town, and surrounding area, together as one by suggesting activities that could take place within the community. There is no question that community cohesion exists however we need to engage the community and open up the community’s spirit by putting together a project that shows cohesion consistently. I am sure, with your support and guidance, the community of Blackburn and Darwen could be the community where everyone joins as one to live in peace and harmony.




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Write a lively article for your school or college magazine with the title: ‘How to Survive Your GCSE Year.’ Spend 25 minutes writing your answer.

‘How to survive your GCSE year.’

It’s that time of the year again when GCSEs sneak up behind us and suck us into their dark depths before we can even open our eyes. What if I was to tell you that there is a way to defeat such a beast? A humble trick passed on from generation to generation… REVISION! Firstly, let’s consider some of the devilish details. Now bear with me, I know that revision means countless hours spent working hard indoors. Locked away from the world as you pour over books. The occasional flecks of sun peep between the curtains and glint in your eyes in an attempt to pull you into its glorious gaze. Eventually, you succumb to its way and leave your books in haste. However, that was: year seven, eight, nine and ten. You could get away with it then. Now your school life and studies have simply become a lot more important.

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Think of it like this, GCSEs are your tickets out of the oppressive, depressing, gloomy school. Who would pass up such a glorious opportunity? A great poet once said, “It’s not about hiding in the shadows; it’s about dancing in the rain.” That means that you should live in the moment as best you can and not hide away from your responsibilities. I assure you that you will look back in years to come and think ‐ “if only I had revised for one more hour!” It’s not too late! You still have time! Quite simply, it’s up to you to deliver the work you are capable of. Be as resilient as an athlete with the finishing line in sight. Past experiences prove that the GCSE year is the hardest time and the most challenging, (but it is by far the most rewarding and important year of your life!) It sets a person up for every challenge that they encounter and I assure you it only gets harder in the years to come. So never put off until tomorrow what you can do today. Finally, this article isn’t just a lesson for us; it is a lesson for the generations to come. A humble message to be passed on to those who follow in our footsteps!

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Think of it like this, GCSEs are your tickets out of the oppressive, depressing, gloomy school. Who would pass up such a glorious opportunity? A great poet once said, “It’s not about hiding in the shadows; it’s about dancing in the rain.” That means that you should live in the moment as best you can and not hide away from your responsibilities. I assure you that you will look back in years to come and think ‐ “if only I had revised for one more hour!” It’s not too late! You still have time! Quite simply, it’s up to you to deliver the work you are capable of. Be as resilient as an athlete with the finishing line in sight. Past experiences prove that the GCSE year is the hardest time and the most challenging, (but it is by far the most rewarding and important year of your life!) It sets a person up for every challenge that they encounter and I assure you it only gets harder in the years to come. So never put off until tomorrow what you can do today. Finally, this article isn’t just a lesson for us; it is a lesson for the generations to come. A humble message to be passed on to those who follow in our footsteps!

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Writing Task

Writing Task

Write a leaflet aimed at persuading young people not to smoke cigarettes.

Remember that this is a test of your writing skills: you may show where illustrations would be used in your leaflet, but should not spend time drawing the pictures themselves.

Spend 25 minutes writing your answer. Take time out of your busy day to relax ‐ don’t take time off your life: Stop smoking!!!

The toxic truth about smoking Are you lunging for a smoke? If so, why?

Money doesn’t grow on trees…

A tragic tale of it being too late… don’t let it be you!!!

Read extract below.

In memory of our beautiful daughter, Debbie, who was taken from us on the 7th August, 2014 by lung cancer. Debbie was a teenage smoker until she passed away at the age of 18. She left behind her a life that was about to start ‐ she gained entry into university after achieving fantastic A level results ‐ she never got to see her results ‐ she passed away a week before her results were published.

This tragic story really makes you think, doesn’t it? Is a cigarette worth the life and pain for a friend, a family, a future? THINK and QUIT before the choice is made for you!!!

Playing football and hanging out with friends on an evening or a weekend is what we should be doing: relaxing and making the most of our adolescent years. We all have options; why would we choose the wrong one? What advice would we give to our friends if they needed us the most?

Why would you smoke the poison, toxic? Would you eat toxic? Why would you risk your life for something you hate?

Smoking, in the UK alone, kills 47,000 teens a year and, on average, one cigarette takes 11 seconds off your life! The question is, ‘Why would YOU do this to YOURSELF?’

Below, a picture of healthy lungs of a teenager who doesn’t smoke and a contrasting image of an unhealthy pair of lungs of a teenager who smokes constantly.

Just take a look at these figures that show the average amount of money a smoker spends…

1 day ‐ £7.17

1 week ‐ £50

1 month ‐ £215

1 year ‐ £2, 617

10 years ‐ £26,171

Alarmed, distressed and concerned? Good! You should be ‐ is this the debt you want to incur? If not, why not ask for help at one of our centres in Lancashire. We help thousands wanting to stop smoking each year. We can help you too!

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Call us on 0845 567 4324 today for a better quality of life!

Visit us at www.nhs.co.uk

Twitter: nhs_stopsmoking #for a better life

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Writing Task

You have been asked to give a speech to year six pupils about life in a secondary school as a student at Key Stage three. Write your speech about advice you would give to them before starting secondary school. Spend 25 minutes writing your answer.

Good morning all and a warm welcome to Tauheedul Islam Boys’ High School! (Hold arms out welcoming pupils to the school.) How did everyone find it today getting here? (Wait for a response from the audience.) Well, despite the weather being miserable, I can assure you that you will always get a warm, positive welcome, from all of us, here at TIBHS!

Firstly, give yourselves a round of applause for achieving a place here at Tauheedul (initiate the round of applause) congratulations to you all; you have all earned and deserved your place here. Before we start, I would like to introduce to you to some important people. To my left are the year eleven prefects (acknowledge the prefects to the left) who are always happy to assist you throughout the day; I promise they are the best! They, when they were in year nine, helped me on my first day‐ thank you again for the help and support! (A round of applause given.) We only have the best‐ such as yourselves‐ (acknowledge the audience again.) To my right are the Heads of Year‐ one of which you will definitely already know‐who will be helping you throughout the day. And lastly, myself, Mohammed Patel, and I am a pupil in year nine.

With the introductions out of the way let us start by discussing one of the biggest topics in the school: sports! The PE department work tirelessly to make sure everyone is valued and allowed to be a part of at least one sporting team. You will have a chance to meet the PE department later on and ask any questions you may have. We are all competitive and, here at Tauheedul, we offer a wide range of sporting activities for you to get involved with: from football (cheer), basketball (cheer) and cricket (louder cheer!) Last year alone, for year seven, we won three out of four of the major tournaments for football and basketball, but the biggest achievement was to win the country finals, held at Witton Park, for all year groups for athletics (applause). We know you can do the same too!

Now, one of the most important elements of school life is all about making friends, don’t you agree? (Wait for audience response) You will have been put into form groups ‐ you will get a chance to meet people in your forms today when we leave the hall so don’t worry! Here, we have a culture for making sure you make friends and we give you plenty of opportunities to do so ‐ just look at your friends already around the room (move arms around the room) ‐ including the Heads of Year if you don’t get into trouble…

As for the subjects you will study, we offer a wide range of subjects that you will love; my favourite is English! In English we study a wide range of topics: including poetry, Shakespeare, drama and non‐fiction novels. Hands up who loves English! (Hands go up.) We also offer other subjects; such as Maths, Business Studies, Geography, Citizenship, Art, ICT just to name a few ‐ I can assure you that you will love all the subjects here! You will be

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shown around the school and the different departments so that you don’t get lost on your first day… hopefully (smile at the audience.) Finally, with school subjects, make sure you do have all the equipment ‐ achievement points are very important here ‐ the rewards trips are brilliant: Alton Towers, Blackpool, Morocco (pause for effect) and Paris (pause again for effect) to name just a few! So, be aware that teachers are always ready to reward you for your work, effort and behaviour!

Finally, before we go off to your forms, I would again like to welcome you to Tauheedul Islam Boys’ High School and I would like to take this opportunity to welcome you into our family where pupils are always at the centre of what we do. Thank you and have a fantastic day! (Applause given.)



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Writing Task

‘Teen View’, a magazine for teenagers, wants to publish lively reviews from its readers. Write a review of a film or TV programme you have watched, or a book you have read.

Write your review. Spend 25 minutes writing your answer.

Jurassic Park: a ground breaking, heart stomping, dino sized film

Jurassic Park is simply the most epic film of its time for multiple reasons! Maybe it was the utter amazement when I first saw the Brachiosaurus eat from a tree, or maybe it was my adrenaline rushing when two twelve year olds were attacked by velociraptors, it might even be the chills that went down my spine when the T‐Rex first made his terrifying roar. Whatever it was, I was awe‐inspired by all of Spielberg's magical strokes of genius: from fantastic art direction and wonderful camera techniques to astounding technical quality.

Allan Grant (Sam Neil) and Ellie Sattler (Laura Dern) are two successful palaeontologists who are asked, by a rich man, John Hammond to come to his park for a major tour. They agree and are taken to an island where ‘Jurassic Park’ logos are everywhere; the two palaeontologists have no idea what they are getting themselves into. The first dinosaur to make an appearance is the Brachiosaurus, both of them are extremely amazed by its giant appearance, and so is the audience. What the two of them don't know is that there are countless more terrifying and carnivorous dinosaurs that are about to escape and run loose…

The most emphatic and heart stomping element of the movie is when the T Rex, coming ferociously and unrestrainedly out of the woods, chases three of the main characters who are driving a car!!! Yes, a T Rex chases a car!!! This has some people sitting on the edge of their seat, some shrieking in terror and some burying themselves into their seats to escape the impending terror that is to follow; this is a chase like no other… In 1994 this inspiring and remarkable film was nominated for forty ‐ yes forty ‐ awards for its performance the previous year, and won twenty‐nine awards including Best Science Fiction Film, Young Artists Award and a BAFTA!!! The recognition this film warrants and merits was evident throughout the year of 1994. I challenge anyone to sit through the film and not be enthralled by it. How could you not be enticed by terror, trepidation and fear? This film will take you on a dino‐sized adventure you will never forget‐ trust me! I’ve witnessed it first‐hand!

The only questionable drawback of the film I would make a point of, would be the ending. Without giving anything away, would the almighty, ruthless and merciless Tyrannosaurus Rex show compassion towards a living individual, or is it simply that he was already full and content with his afternoon’s work?

Overall, Jurassic Park is a true benchmark of cinematic achievement and is by far, still, the best film currently in theatres two decades after its initial release.

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