HELP, Through Students’ Eyes

and the 6 traits of writing.

Guiding Questions

 

1) What are the most important NEEDS in your community? 2) What types of LEADERSHIP are required in order to address these needs?

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The 6 Traits of Writing

•Ideas•Organization•Voice•Word Choice•Sentence Fluency•Conventions

IDEASGuiding Question:

1) What are the most important NEEDS in your community?

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IDEASThe main message of the piece, the theme, with supporting details that enrich and develop that theme.

IDEASKey Question:

Did the writer stay focused and share original and fresh information or perspective about the topic?

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IDEAS2) What types of LEADERSHIP are required in order to address these needs?

• LEADERSHIP STYLES(Breeze 8)

• LEADERSHIP QUALITIES

OrganizationThe internal structure, thread of central meaning, logical and sometimes intriguing pattern or sequence of the ideas.

OrganizationKey Question:

Does the organizational structure enhance the ideas and make it easier to understand?

Word Choice

The use of rich, colorful, and precise language that moves and enlightens the reader.

Word ChoiceKey Question:

Do the words and phrases create vivid pictures and linger in your mind?

Word ChoiceRead the following paragraph.

The big bear stood by the water. He looked at his shadow in the big lake. He thought that he looked nice. He went to take a drink of water. A fish went by. The bear wanted to eat the big fish. He ate up the fish and went away.

You probably noticed that the author used words that were not that exciting.  Brainstorm some words or phrases you could use, instead of the underlined words, that would make the story more lively and memorable for the reader.  Revise the story adding precise, colorful words.  Share your new more interesting story.  Notice how an author's voice and choice of words makes a story unique.

Sentence FluencyFluent writing has rhythm.  Sentences vary in length andstructure.  It is easy and pleasurable to read aloud.  

It is important to think about: Is my story easy to read? Do my sentences begin in different ways? Did I use some long and some short sentences? Does my paper sound smooth as I read it aloud?

         

Read this next paragraph aloud. My horse is white. He has one blue eye and one brown eye. He is friendly. He likes when we brush him. He snuggles his nose into us when we brush him. He is fun to ride. He is my horse and I am glad.You probably noticed that most of the sentences started the same way. Think of some different ways to change these sentences to make the story easier and more fun to read aloud. My friendly horse, Flash, has one blue eye and one brown eye. This majestic white creature loves when I brush his soft coat. I can tell because he snuggles his nose into me and whinnies. He also loves to race through the corn fields behind our barn. Whoosh! Flash gallops through the stalks like a Nascar racer flying around a speedway. I clutch his mane and shriek with laughter. He is a wonderful horse!This story had different sentence beginnings and added a bit more detail. It made the story more interesting for the reader. Try to add some different beginnings to your story.