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A Law Enforcement Holiday
SUGGESTED ANSWERS
Note: Your versions may vary. These are suggestions for
improving the
excerpts.
1. Too much repetition, misuse of advised(use told), and a
misplaced
period (it should go insidethe quotation mars).
!etter: " intervie#ed $udolph. %e told me the other reindeer
#ere calling
him names lie &$ed !ea' and &$osy Nosy.'
. issing apostrophe (widowswindow), unnecessary apostrophe
(daughters), misspelled #ords (trying, dowries, thought,
threw).
!etter: !ishop Nicholas denied that he intended to *rea the
#ido#+s
#indo#. %e said he #as trying to toss *ags of money to serve as
do#ries
for her three unmarried daughters. %e said he thought the #indo#
#as
open #hen he thre# the *ags.
. -se told, not advised. liminate repetition/you don+t need to
record
your questions. -se everyday language (house, not domicile0
about, not
regarding).
!etter: r. ane told me that he had purchased the *irds as a gift
for his
girlfriend. They included a partridge, t#o turtledoves, three
2rench hens,
four calling *irds, and seven s#ans a3s#imming. " ased if he #as
a#are of
local regulations a*out o#ning *irds. %e told me the *irds #ere
a gift for
his girlfriend, #ho lives outside city limits #here there are no
restrictions
against eeping *irds.
4. This statement includes an opinion (Mrs. Parker was telling
the truth)
that should *e eliminated. 5ust record #hat she told you. "nsert
a commaafterson.
!etter: rs. 6arer told me that t#o *oys named 7cut 2arus and
8rover
9ill had attaced her nine3year3old son, $alphie 6arer.
. ;void over*lo#n, outdated language (ascertained, in his
possession).
-se simple, timesaving language.
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#as his. %e told me he the gold #as a gift for a ne# ing that he
and the
other t#o ings #ere looing for.
?. This is #ordy. You can save time *y #riting short, simple
sentences.
!etter: " intervie#ed rs. 7mith, o#ner of the !ethlehem @oAy
"nn. "ased her a*out t#o suspicious persons reportedly seen near
her inn. 7he
said she gave permission for a young couple to stay there
*ecause all the
inns in to#n #ere already filled.
B. There+s a dangling modifier here (&-pon arrival, the
manC'). ae it
clear that you+re the one #ho arrived (&-pon my arrival, the
manC')
@hange passive voice (wasquestioned, wasdetermined, wassought)
to
active voice to indicate #ho performed the actions.
!etter: Dn 9ecem*er 4 at approximately 11:E pm, " #as dispatched
to
investigate a report of a suicidal man at !edford 2alls !ridge.
-pon my
arrival, " questioned the man, 8eorge !ailey. %e told me he
#as
contemplating Fumping off the *ridge to his death. " called for
medical
assistance.
G. You+ll save time and sound more up3to3date *y using
everyday
language. 9on+t use advise#hen you mean toldorsaid. ;n
apostrophe
needs to *e correctly placed:Mooresroof.
!etter: " told @lement @lar oore that neigh*ors had called H11
to
complain a*out a noisy distur*ance on the oores+ roof. oore said
that a
team of reindeer, a sled full of gifts, and an over#eight driver
had landed
on the roof a*out E minutes earlier. %e agreed that the visitor
had *een too
noisy. " reminded oore a*out the to#n=s noise ordinance
requiring only
quiet activities after 11 pm. oore gave the visitor=s address as
The North
6ole. oore did not have a telephone num*er or email address for
the
visitor. oore promised to try to contact the man a*out maing
less noise
in future visits.
H. -se simple, everyday language. -se advisedonly #hen you
mean
counseled(it+s correct in the second sentence *elo#). @hange
passive voice
(wasprovided) to active voice to sho# that you+re the one #ho
provided
the *rochure.
!etter: r. @ros*y told me he #as depressed a*out the lac of sno#
this
year. " advised him to mae an appointment to tal #ith a
mental3health
professional. " gave him a *rochure listing local providers.
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1E. -se active voice to sho# #hat you did (I interviewedC). To
save time,
don+t record your questions. The possessive offamilyisfamilys.
@hange
green in colortogreen.
!etter: " intervie#ed @indy3ou >ho a*out the intruder #ho had
stolen
her family=s @hristmas tree and gifts. 7he said that he #as
male, tall, andgreen. %e had slanting eyes. %e #as #earing a red
Facet and a stocing hat
trimmed in #hite.
11. !onus: $e#rite the information *elo# in *ullet style.
r. 7crooge descri*ed the intruder as:
a male ghost
his former partner, 5aco* arley
a*out = 11' transparent
frightening
dead for seven years
The ghost #ore:
spectacles on his head
a *lue erchief
a *ro#n #aistcoat, *lac tights, and *lac shoes
The ghost #as dragging a chain:
approximately 1= long
made of heavy iron lins
connected to ledgers, eys, padlocs, and cash*oxes
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