Morning Check-In

• Look over the three that you created.

• Put an (*) next to the one that you feel is the strongest.

Partner Check-in

• In a moment, you will be reviewing one of your peer’s practice sentence (the one with a * next to it).

• Take turns giving feedback on your different examples.

• Did s/he:1. Include a personal opinion WITHOUT using

a personal pronoun

2. Give three specific, different reasons?

Transition Time

• IN A MOMENT, you will transition to the desk behind you, but you will leave your iPad face up and unlocked.

• Then, you will number 1-3 underneath their thesis sentence that has a *.

Answer these questions:

1.Did s/he include a specific opinion WITHOUT using personal pronouns? Y/N

2.Does s/he list 3 subtopics that are logical and different from each other? Y/N

3.Give your peer one piece of advice that would make his/her thesis sentence stronger. Be specific, but CONSTRUCTIVE!

Introductions & Conclusions

The appropriate way to say “hello” and “goodbye” to your readers in

academic writing

Structure of Intro Paragraph

• Think of the intro as an inverted triangle.

Very broad attention getter. I want someone to read this paper, but I don’t want to give away any important info yet.

I start to narrow my ideas by introducing the main topic.

I am very narrow and specific here. I’ll tell you exactly what I am going to say in my paper.

What else goes in to the introductory paragraph?

There are three parts to a great introductory paragraph.

1.An opening lead or attention getter.

2.A sentence or two that names the main topic.

3.The thesis sentence that details what will be in the rest of the paper.

The “recipe” for this essay’s paragraph

• Sentence #1: Attention getter (see next slide for appropriate ways to do this)

• Sentence #2: : Bridge to topic (family, attitude, etc).

• Sentence #3: Thesis sentence

Appropriate attention getters

There are several ways to appropriately attract your reader’s attention:

•Rhetorical Question: Grab your reader’s attention by asking a question, but does NOT use the pronoun “you.”•Example: Imagine a world where there was no such thing as violence.•NON-example: Can you imagine a world that didn’t have any violence? Wouldn’t that be amazing?

Appropriate attention getters

• Another way is to include a brief anecdote or story. This should relate to the topic and attract your reader’s interest.

• Example: A little girl once walked up to her mother, wondering if she could go outside. What this little girl did not know, was that the world outside was no longer a safe place for her to live anymore.

• Non-example: One time I ate so much pizza that I barfed for HOURS! It was so gross, but guess what? I’m never going to make the mistake of jumping on a trampoline after inhaling a large by myself. Talk about VIOLENT sickness.

Attention getters continued…

• This might not be overly effective or simple, for this paper, but you could also use interesting facts or statistics to grab your reader’s attention.

• Example: According to a recent Gallup poll, 79% of Americans report that “family” is among their first three priorities when they plan their weekend.

• Non-example: 10 out of 10 WWMS students report that family is pretty important.

Now, a few “concluding” remarks…

What goes into the conclusion?

Turn the triangle right-side up to get a visual of the conclusion.

Restate your narrow thesis.

Broaden the topic out. Make it more general.

End with a memorable close

What goes into the conclusion?

The conclusion paragraph will also likely have three parts:

1.Re-state the thesis sentence.

2.Transition to the general topic.

3.End with a memorable close.