Revising Your WIAF Poem

(1) Adding Detail and (2) Using Line Breaks

Some detailed linesI am from collecting binders to bouncy balls, bouncy balls to key chains, key chains to books, and books to teddy bears I’m from late night sleepovers, just waiting for them to fall asleep before I can prank themI’m from head banging rock and roll

Some detailed linesI’m from travelling in the high sky looking at the clouds in a plane. It’s so high that the houses look like blocksGulp Gulp Gulp the sound of me drinking my delicious strawberry orange smoothieGoing on a trip in the summer and getting huge, pinkish-red, mosquito bites

Some lines that need detailAnswering my family when they call me by one of my many nicknames

C’mon! Include a few nicknames. We’re all dying to know what they are!

Some lines that need detailI’m from staying up all night at sleepover parties

What sort of things do you do at the sleepovers?

Some lines that need detailI am from staying inside on rainy days reading my favourite books

List a few of your favourite books

Adding line breaks

Deciding where and how to create line breaks is a challenging aspect of writing poetry

Tips for adding line breaks

Line breaks serve 2 main purposes:1. Separate ideas2. Emphasize words

Tips for adding line breaks1. Separate ideas• I’m from late night sleepovers,• just waiting for them to fall asleep• before I can prank them

Tips for adding line breaks1. Separate ideas

Gulp, Gulp, Gulp the sound of me drinking my delicious strawberry orange smoothie

Tips for adding line breaks2. Emphasize words

I’m from clothes on the ground shoes all over the place unmade bed drawers open messy room = parent mad

Tips for adding line breaks2. Emphasize words

I am from collecting binders to bouncy balls, bouncy balls to key chains, key chains to books, and books to teddy bears