Concluding sentence/CS = reiterate how your textual evidence and analysis support your claim in TS.

Sample CS:

This conflict between Winston and the Party is the main focus of this novel, and it leads to Winston sweeping his morals to the side in the name of self-preservation.

Thanks, Jalen!

The Party and Big Brother’s ironic logo . . . aides Orwell in exaggerating the power of lies.

Thanks, Marissa!

Tell your partner what you do in a conclusion. Go!

Concluding paragraph: reiterate thesis, and end on a powerful note!

Literature is often written originally as a push for change, and authors are very successful in influencing their readers when they utilize literary techniques that develop concepts that the masses relate to. Orwell’s use of symbolism interlaced with flashbacks supporting his character’s view on the Party, as well as his own view of his government, clarifies 1984’s thematic foundation of political protest.

Thanks, Caitlin B.!

Other shining moments:

It is salient for the minority to champion their opinion under peer pressure.

Thanks, Crystal!

In Hate Week and Two Minutes of Hate, as well as other rallies and leagues, the common ground of hate as opposed to love is an example of mockery towards the traditions of the real world.

Thanks, Orion!

Stellar diction/word choices (7-9): furtively, horde, onslaught, evinces (much better than “shows”), peril, intrinsic, synthesize, repugnant, amalgamate & bane (whoop whoop – vocab. words!), provoke, plagues, abyss, scavenging, denouncing, latter (yes, know the difference between former and latter), advocate, indoctrinated, ostensibly, morphing, myriad, impoverished, heinous, etc.

Look at this list, and incorporate into your writing!

Guide to Mrs. Bondi’s Comments

Checkmarks = specific textual evidence (should have 2-3 per body paragraph).

TS = topic sentence; CS = concluding sentence

UPT – use present tense verbs (literary present)

WC = improve word choice (e.g. thing, crazy, freaked out, bad, etc. )

= something great! (e.g. word choice, specific evidence, etc.). If not clear what star is referring to, please ask!

RO = run-on sentence (use a semicolon (;) to separate 2 complete sentences without a conjunction or break into separate sentences with transitions).

SF = sentence fragment

Lots of comments – in cursive – ask if you are not sure.

General Notes underlined portions

▪ Avoid praising the author (e.g. his brilliant use of . . . ); focus on your analysis of his techniques.

▪ Begin with TS regarding aspect you are focusing on for EACH body paragraph/chicken toe (e.g. moral implications for individual and society; specific technique (e.g. symbolism) Orwell employs to influence his audience; etc.). Do not begin with a fact – remember TS with claim/CM, evidence/CD, analysis to tie it together.

▪ End with CS to reiterate how evidence & analysis support TS (& relate back to thesis).

▪ To reiterate, body paragraph format = o TS with claim o textual evidence with analysiso CS – how evidence & analysis support claim in TS

▪ Avoid 1st (we, our, & us = 1st person) & 2nd person (you)

▪ Underline novel title (long works = underlined or italicized)

▪ Watch pronoun-antecedent agreement (practice coming soon!)

(e.g. Correct - When one struggles with his/her conscience, . . .

Incorrect - When one struggles with their conscience . . .

▪ Use active voice instead of passive voice – subject performs the action (practice coming soon!)

(e.g. Active – George Orwell employs literary techniques to illustrate . . .

Passive – Literary techniques are used by Orwell . . .

▪ it’s = it is (it’s is NOT possessive; it is a contraction)

Adulation & Candy6.5-9

Per. 4 – Tim, Savannah, Marissa, Em, Mila, Brooke, Sarah, Ethan, Emily S., & Ava.

Per. 5 – Shiv, Jalen, Tania, & OrionPer. 6 – Caitlin B., Crystal, Laya, Tara, Glenny, Ramina,

Natalie, & Anna On Prompt you will have your AP Score (1-9) &

point value out of 75 points (e.g. 6.5/67.5)

Reflection #2 9-8-16 Include AP Rubric Score on top (1-9), & reread essay.

Compose a T-Chart with Pluses/Deltas based on General Comments, Mrs.

Bondi’s Comments (remember are good!), Student Samples, and your own

self evaluation. This must be detailed (e.g. include any violations under

General Comments)! Also, look back at Reflection #1. List any deltas from

microtheme reflection that became pluses!

In a paragraph under chart, discuss both reflections, and what will be your

focus for your next essay.

Receive stamp from Mrs. Bondi, and place in your ELA file.

KEEP ALL OF YOUR REFLECTIONS! YOU WILL KEEP TRACK OF YOUR PROGRESS,

AS WELL AS RECEIVE PTS. FOR EACH REFLECTION WHEN YOU TURN THEM IN!

KEEP, KEEP, KEEP; A STAMP = YOU WILL RECEIVE CREDIT!

Sample “A” essays are available to view on front table (or receive an Aca Prep

pass to review). Now…

receive essays (return at end of period), questions/reflection, & STAMP – go!