Senior Paper Peer Revision #3

Pass the essay.

• Read the introduction and highlight the thesis.

• Highlight word glue in topic sentences of body paragraph #5 and onwards.

• If word glue is missing, please instruct them to add it.

Pass the essay.

• Highlight all quotes in paragraph #5 and onwards.

• Label the TCS for EACH ONE!!– Transition– Context– Speaker

• Please tell the writer to add this where it is missing.

Pass the essay.

• Read the 5th + body paragraph(s) and label the parts of the paragraph in the margin. Make them a note to add if they are missing one of the following:

– Topic sentence– Quote #1– Commentary/ 2 sentences minimum– Quote #2– Commentary/ 2 sentences minimum– Concluding sentence

Pass the essay.

• Read the introduction AND the conclusion.

• Label the three parts of the conclusion:

1) Rephrase the thesis2) Transition3) Broad/ universal statement

• Make a note if they are missing any of these parts.

Pass the essay.

• Read through the essay from 5th paragraph onwards and circle any verbs (outside of quotes) that slip into past tense.

• Circle any contractions. Formal writing cannot have any of these. The student needs to write out the two words:– Isn’t (is not)– Can’t (cannot)– Shouldn’t (should not)

Pass the essay.• Read for passive voice verbs and circle any you find. These will need to be

changed into active voice verbs:

– The ball was given to the boy by the player.vs.

– The player gave the boy the ball.

• Circle “be” verbs in the essay. These will need to be edited out and changed into ACTION VERBS:– Am– Is– Are– Was– Were– Be– Being– Been

Pass the essay.

• Check MLA format

• MLA heading• MLA page numbers- INCLUDING WORKS CITED

PAGE• 1” margins• 12 pt. font Times New Roman

Same person.

• Check the MLA Works Cited page

• No heading• MLA page number (last name plus number)• Centered title should be Works Cited• Sources listed in alphabetical order acc. to first word of

entry• Double-spaced/ 12 pt. font Times/ handing

indentations• Check that source info. look mostly correct

Pass the essay back to the owner.

• Look over marks by your peers.