To use planning to prepare for writing childhood narratives

All MUST understand when to start a new paragraph in their work and demonstrate this in their writing.

Most SHOULD use different techniques to make writing lively and engaging

Some COULD consider how to use flashbacks to frame their narratives

Nearly there! Use your time effectively this lesson to plan your assessment piece!

Registration Starter…with a partner• Look at the autobiographical excerpts in front of you. • CHOOSE the ONE you like BEST and put your names

on top.1. Put a star beside ONE, to show you like it best.2. Underline all the connectives you can find

(chronological order).3. Put a wiggly line underneath your favourite

descriptive words (remember sights, sounds, sensations/touch, smells and tastes. LABEL THEM. if you can AND put a Square around great nouns and verbs!!!!!!!!!!

4. BONUS: Circle any synonyms, metaphors, and figurative or symbolic language that you can find.

Next to your name on top, draw a faceto show how you feel after doing this…

To use planning to prepare for writing childhood narratives

I can organise my ideas and show how they are linked in sentences with

CONNECTIVES.

I can use paragraphs to help organise the

content of my writing.

I always use paragraphs to clearly structure my

ideas.

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Level4

Level 5

Pesky paragraphsA paragraph is made up of a series of sentences about the same

topic or key idea. Why has the writer started a new paragraph below?

Rats make excellent pets and can be easily and cheaply bought. If you wish to keep rats as pets, you should go to a good pet shop or contact an official breeder who can give you advice.

It is important to choose your pet rats carefully. Check that they are healthy. You will know because they will be alert and their eyes, nose and ears will be clean. Rats must be at least six weeks old before you buy them and they should be kept in pairs of either males or females.

Writing TIP TOP Paragraphs

Always start a new paragraph when you change:

TimePersonTopicPlace

Get these into your book! You need them

for the next challenge

Team Challenge – A Grand Time

• Using the extracts from Boy, your challenge is to identify and explain the greatest number of paragraphs in 5 minutes.

Using the chart, set out your work like this:Text Reason for new paragraph

One of my most enduring…

Topic paragraph for introduction

The gardener that my mother…

Change of focus (person) from narrator to Joss.

Let’s look at this… A GRAND TIME

One of my most enduring memories of early childhood was my friendship with Joss Spivvis. It all started in the early 1920s, not long after my father and my eldest sister had both died within a few weeks of one another. The remainder of our large family, consisting of my mother and six children, had moved to a house in Llandaff, near Cardiff, which was called Cumberland Lodge. The gardener that my mother engaged to look after everything outdoors was a short, broad-shouldered, middle-aged Welshman with a pale brown moustache whose name was Jones. But to us children he very soon became known as Joss Spivvis, or more often simply Joss. And very rapidly Joss became a friend to us all, to my brother and me and my four sisters. Everyone loved him, but I loved him most of all. I adored him. I worshipped him, and whenever I was not at school, I used to follow him around and watch him at his work and listen to him talk. Endless stories about his young days Joss would tell me as I followed him round the garden. In the summer holidays my mother always took us to Norway, but during the Christmas and Easter hols I was with Joss all the time. I never ate lunch in the house with the family. I ate it with Joss in the harness-room. I would perch on a sack of maize or a bale of straw while Joss sat rather grandly in an old kitchen chair that had arms on it.

And the winners are…

Here’s another example…What do you notice about the

dialogue/speech and paragraphs? The next day, we were allowed to inspect the appendixitself in a glass bottle. It was a longish black wormy-lookingthing, and I said, ‘Do I have one of those inside me,Nanny?’ ’Everyone has one,’ Nanny answered. ’What’s it for?’ I asked her. ’God works in mysterious ways,’ she said, whichwas her stock reply whenever she didn’t know the answer. ’What makes it go bad?’ I asked her. ’Toothbrush bristles,’ she answered, this time with nohesitation at all.

Part 2…

’Toothbrush bristles?’ I cried. ‘How can toothbrush bristlesmake your appendix go bad?’ Nanny, who in my eyes was filled with more wisdomthan Solomon, replied, ‘Whenever a bristle comes out ofyour toothbrush and you swallow it, it sticks in yourappendix and turns rotten. In the war,’ she went on, ‘the German spies used to sneak boxloads of loose-bristled toothbrushes into our shops and millions of our soldiers got appendicitis.’ ’Honestly, Nanny?’ I cried. ‘Is that honestly true?’ ’I never lie to you, child,’ she answered. ‘So let that bea lesson to you never to use an old toothbrush.’ For years after that, I used to get nervous whenever Ifound a toothbrush bristle on my tongue. p.95

How prepared are you to organise your rough draft?

Individual planning

You are going to spend the rest of this lesson planning and drafting your exciting childhood narrative, using:

• Your flowchart and plot line, if you used one

• Chronological connectives• Paragraphs• Different sentences• Lively and exciting vocabulary

Peer assessment

• Using a different coloured pen or pencil, review your partner’s work. Check to make sure all of the following are included and are clear:

• What they are going to write about• The order to write in• Connectives• Some suggestions about language

Can you think of anything that is

missing?

Homework

• Task: To write a childhood narrative that entertains the reader

• How: Typed or neatly handwritten• Due on Thursday, 24 October 2013.

• You have next lesson to complete your drafts.