VOICEVOICE

obvious person behind the obvious person behind the wordswords

writer is committed/ involved with topic

reaches out/ connects toreaches out/ connects to audienceaudience and and purposepurpose

energetic, livelyenergetic, lively

consistent toneconsistent tone

definite point of viewdefinite point of view

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Voice Voice is... is...

LiteratureLiterature

Read . . .Read . . . Picture Books/Stories Picture Books/Stories Junie B. JonesJunie B. Jones byby Barbara Park, Barbara Park, The True Story The True Story of the Three Little Pigs of the Three Little Pigs by by Jon ScieszkaJon Scieszka I am the I am the Dog, I am the Cat Dog, I am the Cat by Donald Hallby Donald Hall

Essay - Essay - Small Wonder Small Wonder by Barbara Kingsolverby Barbara Kingsolver

ReadingReading

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Work on Work on Writing Writing ActivitiesActivities

Rewrite storyRewrite storyA.A.

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No VoiceNo Voice

Using another Using another voicevoice

2.2.Cinderella - use step-Cinderella - use step-mother’s voicemother’s voiceThree Little Pigs - use Three Little Pigs - use wolf’s voicewolf’s voice

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Captain Abdul’s Pirate Captain Abdul’s Pirate School School

B.B.

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Connecting Voice to Purpose and Connecting Voice to Purpose and Audience.Audience.

One of the 3 little pigs is trying to buy insurance for his One of the 3 little pigs is trying to buy insurance for his house. house. A letter to a student’s parents regarding academic and A letter to a student’s parents regarding academic and behavioral issues.behavioral issues.A letter to your best friend about a student in your A letter to your best friend about a student in your classroom regarding academic and behavioral issues.classroom regarding academic and behavioral issues.A letter to the A letter to the Des Moines Register’sDes Moines Register’s editor regarding editor regarding an educational issue.an educational issue.A letter to the A letter to the Des Moines Register’sDes Moines Register’s editor recognizing editor recognizing someone who performed a “good deed” in the someone who performed a “good deed” in the community.community.Diary entry of one of your class periods at school.Diary entry of one of your class periods at school.WWrite a protest of cell phones in school.rite a protest of cell phones in school.

RAFTS for Voice

•Each table will be given a scenario. Write as a group

and we will share out at the end!

VoiceVoice““GGood writing is supposed ood writing is supposed to evoke sensation in the to evoke sensation in the

reader….reader….

NNot the fact that it’s ot the fact that it’s raining, but the feel of raining, but the feel of

being rained upon.”being rained upon.”

E.L. DoctorowE.L. Doctorow

Use Sample PapersUse Sample Papers

Look at and discuss rubric Look at and discuss rubric A.A.

Evaluate anonymous student papers Evaluate anonymous student papers B.B.

Read story Read story togethertogetherEvaluate individually, then as Evaluate individually, then as small groupsmall groupShare score with large Share score with large groupgroupDiscuss the reasoning for Discuss the reasoning for the scorethe score

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Oct./1/1990 Oct./1/1990 It is 7:45 AM I was deer hunting I It is 7:45 AM I was deer hunting I walked in the meadow. I heard walked in the meadow. I heard something and I looked and it was a something and I looked and it was a deer. It was a four point buck I deer. It was a four point buck I tride to get closer and it started tride to get closer and it started to move. So I pulled back the hammer to move. So I pulled back the hammer and I puled the trigger and I hit and I puled the trigger and I hit it. When I hit it it jumped up and it. When I hit it it jumped up and then fell down. I started to walk then fell down. I started to walk towards the deer it jumped up and towards the deer it jumped up and ran away I tried to track it down. I ran away I tried to track it down. I wish I was using my 30.06 I would of wish I was using my 30.06 I would of got it then. I fallowed the blood got it then. I fallowed the blood trial as far as I could but I could trial as far as I could but I could not find it. So I kept on not find it. So I kept on hunting.That same day I saw four hunting.That same day I saw four deer one of them was the one I shot deer one of them was the one I shot that morning so I shot it this that morning so I shot it this

Time and it ran on privet land and Time and it ran on privet land and layed down and died so I went on the layed down and died so I went on the land to get it but he owner would land to get it but he owner would not let me get it and I said it is not let me get it and I said it is a law you have to. He took the deer a law you have to. He took the deer so I went and got a police officer so I went and got a police officer and I told him the hole story and he and I told him the hole story and he went up and told that man to give went up and told that man to give back my deer. He said but iv gutted back my deer. He said but iv gutted it and I skined it. And the police it and I skined it. And the police officer asked him who shot it and he officer asked him who shot it and he said the kid did. So he gave it back said the kid did. So he gave it back to me. And I won the big buck to me. And I won the big buck contest that I enterd. They took my contest that I enterd. They took my picther and put it in the newspaper. picther and put it in the newspaper. THE ENDTHE END

Grade 12Grade 12

Zeena and the Marshmellows

Zeena, I know just how you feel. I love chocolate covered marshmellows too! But let me tell you what happened to me.

My mom came home from the store one day and let me have a chocolate covered marshmellow. It was love at first bit. So lite, fluffy, chewy and slipped down my throat like a small piece of heaven. Just thinking about it makes me want to have another one until I recall what happened when I finished my last bag of those spuishy delights.

My mom told me I can help myself to a few and before I knew it the whole bag was gone. My mom called me to dinner, and you know, the last thing I wanted or even cared about was dinner, but you know how mothers are, I had to sit down and take one bite of everything. And after that, I had diaria,diaria,diaria.Last fall my mom bought me all of these cute clothes for my birthday, shorts, jeans, skirts, so when the weather got warm, and I went to put on my new clothes, they didn’t fit to my amazement and not because I had grown too tall,….

just because I couldn’t even zip them. But it couldn’t be the marshmellows, their too lite and fluffy: in fact a whole bag of marshmellows doesn’t weight as much as one orange.

One day, when I put the tight clothes out of my mind, I grabbed myself some chocolate covered marshmellows,when I was biting down on one, a sharp stabbing pain went up my tooth and the side of my head. And when ever I ate, my teeth hurt. So my mom took me to the dentist, and let me tell you it was not a pretty picture. I had seven expensive, painful cavities.So Zeena, you may keep popping those marshmellows into your mouth, but before you do, remember not everything about chocolate covered marshmellows is sweet.

Teacher Teacher provides provides assignmentassignment

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Peer and teacher feed Peer and teacher feed through use of the rubricthrough use of the rubric

Guided revision Guided revision based on based on feedbackfeedback

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Use rubric to do final ratingUse rubric to do final rating

““VVoice separates writing oice separates writing that is read from writing that is read from writing

that is not read…that is not read…

Donald MurrayDonald Murray

VVoice is the writer oice is the writer revealed.”revealed.”

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Do you already:•Identify the audience•Think about what the audience ..already knows•Adjust tone for the audience•Make sure tone matches purpose

…….then you’re teaching voice!

I am teaching voice when…. I am teaching voice when….