Wednesday, October 24

Writing Workshop Day!

Please have your QW out to work on.

Due Date Reminders:Mon. Oct. 29 - grammar quiz (review Fri.)Weds. Oct. 31 - Writing Workshop & QWs

Mon. Nov. 5 - Reading Workshop (book project)

WRITING WORKSHOP

1. Do the quick writes each day they are assigned!2. REVISIONS!

*Keep them & attach them, this is where all your points are earned!*Revising & editing are different!*Highlight your revisions for easy identification.

3. WRITER'S CRAFT*points for figurative language (similes & metaphors) *imagery (5 senses - show, don't tell)*other literary devices (symbolism, foreshadowing,etc.)

4. Final copy should be typed & publishable.

·Writing Workshop - due Weds. Oct. 31o Must keep ALL stages of drafts (even if they’re messy) - if you don’t turn these in you have no

evidence that you worked on your original & your score will suffer!o Don’t forget the reflection journal!o Make your final piece look ready for publishing - you can include graphics or artwork if you

would like.

Making Your QW Better with Brush Strokes

Look at your QW & find a place to:1. Paint with a PARTICIPLE

Participle = "ing" word

* add it on to the beginning or the end of a sentence to paint a better picture

OriginalThe diamond-scaled snakes attacked their prey.

Better with a ParticipleHissing, slithering, and coiling, the diamond-scaled snakes attacked their prey.

Look at your QW & find a place to:2. Paint with an ABSOLUTE

Absolute = noun + "ing" particple

OriginalThe mountain climber edged along the cliff.

Better with an AbsoluteHands shaking, feet trembling, the mountain climber edged along the cliff.

Feet trembling on the snow-covered rocks, the mountain climber edged along the cliff.

Look at your QW & find a place to:3. Paint with an APPOSITIVE

Appositive = noun or pronoun that identifies or renames a noun

OriginalMrs. Loomer hopes to help you improve your writing this year.

Better with an AppositiveMrs. Loomer, a stellar teacher, hopes to help you improve your writing this year.

Look at your QW & find a place to:4. Paint with ADJECTIVES OUT OF ORDER

Adjective = describes a person, place, or thing(Don't put too many in a row!)

OriginalThe large, red-eyed, angry bull charged the intruder.

Better with Adjectives out of OrderThe large bull, red-eyed and angry, charged the intruder.

Look at your QW & find a place to:5. Paint with ACTION VERBS

Action Verbs = verbs that are not "is," "was," "were," or any other forms of "be"

OriginalThe gravel road was on the left side of the barn.The grocery store was robbed by two armed men.

Better with Action VerbsThe gravel road curled around the left side of the barn.Two armed men robbed the grocery store.

Brooklyn BridgeBy Caroline Loomer

A warm sunny morningfollowing a day of torturous rain.Brilliant shallow puddles reflect the light like diamonds.We marvel at its cathedral peakstogether, hand in hand.

We stroll, make new plans, laugh.The comfort of five married yearspads the souls of our feetas we let bikers, runners, and other hurried pedestrians rush by.I take in the waters, greenish-blue and fresh and sparkling -

or are those your eyes?

You indulge your affinity for photography -your sensitive eyes transform the most unexpected objectsinto worthy subjects - the leaves gliding in the puddle, the ? central park, me.

We take our time, enjoy each other - the bridge is long and there is much to appreciate.

Miles of glistening cable weave together - like our lives -to form an inseparable web of strength.

The stone masonry, perfectly shaped and nuzzled together,the smooth silhouette a result of weathering wayward storms.

The expanse of the Manhattan skyline, its breadth a source of optimism and possibility for all dreamers.

The merging of grace and muscle - a message for all.

My message to you?Keep this memory tucked in your back pocketfor those days you sense the storm might unravel the cable.Absorb the skyline for safekeeping when it seems like our dreams teter on the pier.And most importantly, remember

VERSION 1Brooklyn BridgeBy Caroline Loomer

A glowing golden morningfollowing a day of torturous rain.Brilliant shallow puddles reflect the light like diamonds.We marvel at its cathedral peakstogether, hand in hand.

We stroll, make new plans, laugh.The comfort of five married yearspads the souls of our feetas we let bikers, runners, and hurried pedestrians buzz by.I take in the waters, greenish-blue and fresh and sparkling -

or are those your eyes?

You indulge your affinity for photography -your sensitive eyes transform the most unexpected objectsinto worthy subjects - two leaves embrace as they ease through a puddle,

algae topped ponds sheathed in a skyscraper sky, me.

We take our time, enjoy each other - the bridge is long and there is much to appreciate.

Miles of glistening cable spun tightly and strung like harp strings, a song of support vibrating from their chords.

The stone masonry, perfectly shaped and nestled together;its smooth silhouette the result of weathering wayward storms.

The expanse of the Manhattan skyline, its breadth a source of optimism and possibility for all dreamers.

The merging of grace and muscle - a message for all.

My message to you?

Keep this memory tucked in your back pocketto protect you when storm threatens to unravel the cable.

Absorb the skyline for safekeeping when it seems like dreams teter on the pier.

And most importantly, remember

VERSION 2

Brooklyn BridgeBy Caroline Loomer

A glowing golden morning warmly greets us,absorbs the drenching downpouruntil all that remains arebrilliant shallow puddles that reflect the light like diamonds.

We marvel at its cathedral peakstogether, hand in hand.

We stroll, make new plans, laugh.The comfort of five married yearspads the souls of our feetas we let bikers, runners, and hurried pedestrians buzz by.I take in the waters, greenish-blue and fresh and sparkling -

mirrors of your eyes.

You indulge your pleasure of photography -your sensitive eyes transform the most unexpected objectsinto worthy subjects - two leaves embrace as they ease through a puddle,

skyscraper skies hug an algae topped pond,

me.

We take our time, enjoy each other - the bridge is long and there is so much to appreciate.

Miles of glistening cable spun tightly and strung like harp strings, a song of support vibrating from their chords.

The stone masonry, perfectly shaped and nestled together;its smooth silhouette the result of weathering wayward storms.

The expanse of the Manhattan skyline, its breadth a source of optimism and possibility for all dreamers.

The merging of grace and muscle - a message for all.

My message to you?

Seek shelter in the strength of the overpassto protect you when storms threaten to silence your song.

Absorb the skyline for safekeeping when dreams teter on the pier.

And most importantly, believe the bridge will take us where we need to be,for we have put all we have into it.

That is enough.

VERSION 4