WFTB Grades 4-6Review of 3 Day Process and

Elaboration Techniques

Cristy Wellik

Steph Reeves

pp. 290 - 292

Composing in Fourth/Fifth GradePersonal Narrative Writing

Day 1Prompt: Tell about a trip you went on with your class.

Trip to the zoo

African Area

Bird aviary Reptiles

•Teacher models focusing on prompt.

•Teacher brainstorms events and concrete things.

•Students complete their own Circle Maps.

4th/5th Grade Composing – Day 1

Composing in Fourth/Fifth GradePersonal Narrative Writing

Day 1

Last year my second grade class went to the Riverbanks Zoo in Columbia, SC. We had been studying animals and we were going to see them first hand.

African area

Bird aviary

Reptiles

•Teacher models selecting three events from the Circle Map and placing on the Flow Map.

•Students select three events from their Circle Maps and place on their Flow Maps.•Teacher models opening paragraph.•Students write their opening paragraphs.

4th/5th Grade Composing – Day 1

Composing in Fourth/Fifth GradePersonal Narrative Writing

Day 1

Last year my second grade class went to the Riverbanks Zoo in Columbia, SC. We had been studying animals and we were going to see them first hand.

African area

Bird aviary

Reptiles

Elephants

Giraffes

Zebras

Peacocks

Parrots Squawking

Different sizes

Python

3 Cars long

Slithered up tree

•Teacher models adding 3 details for each event (tell me more).

•Students add 3 details to their Flow Maps.

4th/5th Grade Composing – Day 1

Horizontal Elaboration We began by visiting the African Area. We saw groups of elephants with large flapping ears. There were giraffes with long slender necks eating from the tree tops. When we saw the zebras I was amazed at how their striped fur made them look like inmates.

elephants giraffes zebras

African Area

Vertical Elaboration

Later on we got to see the reptiles. My favorite was the giant python. He was as long as three cars and as big around as a fire hydrant. We watched as he slowly slithered up a tree.

python

size

slithered

Reptiles

How is vertical elaboration achieved?

By connecting ideas between sentences:

Through the use of pronouns

Through the use of transitions

Vertical Elaboration

Later on we got to see the reptiles. My favorite was the giant python. He was as long as three cars and as big around as a fire hydrant. We watched as he slowly slithered up a tree.

python

size

slithered

Reptiles

Vertical Elaboration

Later on we got to see the reptiles. My favorite was the giant python. As we approached I realized that he was as long as three cars and as big around as a fire hydrant. While we were watching he slowly slithered up a tree.

python

size

slithered

Reptiles

Composing in Fourth/Fifth GradePersonal Narrative Writing

Day 2Last year my second grade class went to the Riverbanks Zoo in Columbia, SC. We had been studying animals and we were going to see them first hand.

African area

Bird aviary

Reptiles

Elephants

Giraffes

Zebras

Peacocks

Parrots Squawking

Different sizes

Python

3 Cars long

Slithered up tree

We began

After a while

Later on

When the teacher said it was time to go I could hardly believe we had been there five hours. Our class trip was a great way to learn more about some interesting animals.

•Teacher models “think aloud”.•Students do independent “think alouds”.•Teacher adds transition words/ phrases.•Students add transition words/ phrases.•Teacher models closing paragraph.•Students add closing paragraphs.•Students work in pairs to orally rehearse their stories using their Flow Maps.

4th/5th Grade Composing – Day 2

Composing in Fourth/FifthGradePersonal Narrative WritingDay 3- Taking it off the Map

Last year my second grade class went to the Riverbanks Zoo in Columbia, SC. We had been studying animals and we were going to see them first hand.

African area

Bird aviary

Reptiles

Elephants

Giraffes

Zebras

Peacocks

Parrots Squawking

Different sizes

Python

3 Cars long

Slithered up tree

We began

After a while

Later on

When the teacher said it was time to go I could hardly believe we had been there five hours. Our class trip was a great way to learn more about some interesting animals.

4th/5th Grade Composing – Day 3

Composing in Fourth/Fifth GradePersonal Narrative WritingDay 3- Taking it off the Map

Last year my second grade class went to the Riverbanks Zoo in Columbia, SC. We had been studying animals and we were going to see them first hand.

We began by visiting the African Area. We saw groups of elephants with large flapping ears.There were giraffes with long slender necks eating from the tree tops. When we saw the zebras I was amazed at how their stripped fur made them look like inmates.

After a while we moved on to the bird aviary. The most impressive bird that I saw was a peacock that spread his colorful tail into a giant fan. Parrots perched on trees squawked at us as we passed their cages. There were tiny birds there like the humming birds and giant emus that were taller than our teacher.Later on we got to see the reptiles. My favorite was the giant python. He was as long as three cars and as big around as a fire hydrant. We watched as he slowly slithered up a tree.When the teacher said it was time to go I could hardly believe that we had been there five hours. Our class trip was a great way for us to learn more about some interesting animals.

Fourth/Fifth Grade Mini LessonI went to Canada with my family.

First wewent to the glass museum. Three hourslater we went to Buffalo. We spent the night there. The next day we went to Niagara Falls. We rode the boat that went near the falls. I was scared because the boat went so close to the falls that I got wet. We drove to Niagara-on-the-Lake and we went to a souvenir shop and we slept in a hotel.

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Fourth/Fifth Grade Mini Lesson

If the dinosaurs came back they could carry my Daddy to work and back.Every morning at 7:30 Daddy would grab his suitcase and stand on the curb to wait. When the dinosaur arrived, Daddy would climb up its tail and take his place on the dinosaur’s neck. As the dinosaur trudged away, Daddy would wave to his friends passing by in their cars.