Writing about

a brief introduction

to a person

Guess who he is.

* Born in Shanghai in 1980, he is a world famous basketball player.

* He was born in a sporting family.

Guess who he is.

* After graduation from high school, he entered Harvard, where he dropped out in 1975 to enjoy writing programs.

* He became one of the richest men In America in his thirties.

* He was the great genius inventor of the electrical age( 电气时代 ).

Guess who he is.

* His most famous inventions are the first practical long-lasting light bulb and the phonograph( 留声机 ) .

Thomas Edison

* Born in Shanghai in 1980, he is a world famous basketball player.* He was born in a sporting family.

birth date and birthplace;family background

* After graduation from high school, he entered Harvard, where he dropped out in 1975 to enjoy writing programs.* He became one of the richest men in America in his thirties.

education;

achievement

* He was the great genius inventor of the electrical age( 电气时代 ).

evaluation

1. Background information (including birth date, birthplace, family background; appearance and personality);

2. Experiences (including education and career) and achievements;

3. Evaluation (what other people think of him or her).

What aspects may be included

when writing a brief introduction to a person?

Background information?

Experiences and achievements?

People’s evaluation of him?

To write a brief introduction to Mo Yan

He won the Nobel Prize in Literature, making him the focus of attention worldwide.

Let’s read and get to know more about Mr Mo.

Birth date and birthplace

Experiences and achievements

People’s evaluation of him

Birth date and birthplace:

In 1955;

Gaomi, Shandong

dropped out and began to work;

joined the army;

studied literature and began to write;

published his first short story;

left the army;

Experiences :(in order of time)

When he was

12:

20:

During his service in the army:

In 1981: In 1997:

He gradually developed a writing style all of his own, creating many famous works.

Achievements :

won the eighth Mao Dun Literature prize;won the Nobel Prize in Literature

People’s evaluation of him:

Negative:

1.Mo’s works have a tendency toward vulgarity. (Para 7)

2.Mo Yan’s works are still short on the idealism of pursuing humanity . (Para 7)

莫言的作品仍然缺乏追寻人性的理想主义。

Positive:

1.His calligraphy is surprisingly beautiful.(Para 3)

2. In his writing, he can make words live and breathe. (Para 3)

What’s your evaluation of his winning the prize?

make great contributions to Chinese literature;renew people’s enthusiasm towards literature;motivate us to move forward with confidence;inspire people to aim high;enhance our national pride;enhance the people’s sense of national dignity and self-confidence;mean that Chinese literature begins to win its recognition worldwide;……

A brief introduction to Mr Mo

Para 1

Para 2

Para 3

Three

parts

Background information

Experiences and achievements

Evaluation

江苏省高考英语书面表达评分标准第五档 很好 (21-2521-25 分 ) ：完全完成了试题规定的任务，完全达到了预期的写作目的。

1. 覆盖所有内容要点。2. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。3. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。4. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。

Practice to better write Para 1 : birth date, birthplace and family background

_________________________________________, Jay Chou, _________________, was raised by his mother,____________________________________ .

Jay Chou was born on the 18th of January, 1979 in Taiwan. He was raised by his mother and was shy and quiet during his childhood. He now is a famous singer.

A better one:

Born on the 18th of January, 1979 in Taiwana famous singer

who was shy and quiet during his childhood

分词结构

定语从句同位语

Practice to better write Para 1 :

In the video, Psy is chubby and has a round belly. He wears a suit and fashionable sunglasses and ties of different colors.

A better one:

* In the video, Psy is chubby_________________, ____wears a suit _____ fashionable sunglasses and ties of different colors.

with a round bellywho with

定语从句

with 结构

appearance

Tips for better writing Para 1 :

尽量用分词短语分词短语、同位语同位语以及巧用 withwith 结构结构，作定语 / 状语，使文章简洁、紧凑、通顺。

Practice to better write Para 2 : experiences :

education

In 1988, Obama was admitted into Harvard Law School and he gained his doctor’s degree in 1991 there. After he graduated from Harvard, he worked as a lawyer, lecturer and then took up politics.

A better one:

In 1988, Obama was admitted into Harvard Law School, _____he gained his doctor’s degree in 1991. __________________from Harvard, he worked as a lawyer, lecturer and then took up politics.

定语从句

非谓语动词

whereHaving graduated

Practice to better write Para 2 :

On November 7, 2012, Obama beat Republican challenger Romney and won re-election to a second term in the White House after a long and bitter campaign.

A better one:

beatingOn November 7, 2012, Obama won re-election to a second term in the White House, _______Republican challenger Romney after a long and bitter campaign.

非谓语动词

achievement

Practice to better write Para 2 :

A better one:

It's South Korean star Psy's 'Gangnam style' video. The video has beaten Justin Bieber and has become the most liked video on YouTube.

It's South Korean star Psy's 'Gangnam style' video_______has beaten Justin Bieber and has become the most liked video on YouTube.

that

强调句

achievement

Tips for better writing Para 2 :

可用非谓语动词非谓语动词 , 使文章精炼 ;尽量用复合句复合句 , 倒装句倒装句 , 强调句强调句，润色文章。

Practice to better write Para 3 : evaluation

Why Jay Chou _____his __________popularity is that for one thing, his own unique Chinese R&B style is________________________ （无法匹敌的） by others;__________, he continues to ___________________ （突破） as he _____________ （冒险） on tryinging new things.

Jay Chou is popular in the nation. No one is better than him because of his unique Chinese R&B style and he continues to create something different as he likes to try new things. A better one:

beyond comparison

gains nationwide

for anothermake breakthroughs takes a chance

高级词汇 适当的连接词

Tips for better writing Para 3 :

尽力使用较复杂结构较复杂结构或较高级词汇较高级词汇；　　有效地使用语句间的连接成分连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。

To write a better introduction, we need to pay attention to the following tips:

尽力使用较复杂结构较复杂结构或较高级词汇较高级词汇；　　有效地使用语句间的连接成分连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。

可用非谓语动词非谓语动词 , 使文章精炼 ;尽量用复合句复合句 , 倒装倒装 , 强调句强调句，润色文章。

尽量用分词短语分词短语、同位语同位语以及巧用 withwith 结结构构，作定语 / 状语，使文章简洁、紧凑、通顺。

作家莫言的成功开启了中国人获得诺贝尔（ the Nobel Prize ）的先河，结合下表的内容写一篇 150 字左右的莫言简介，分享成功并发表感想。

姓名 莫言

身份 中国当代著名作家出生 1955 年 2 月 17 日， 山东省高密县个人主要经历及成就

1. “ ”在家乡上小学； 文革 期间被迫辍学。2. 20 岁参加中国人民解放军； 1981 年仍在部队的莫言开始文学创作，诸多作品深受欢迎；3. 2011 年 8 月获得第八届茅盾文学奖；4. 2012 年 10 月获得诺贝尔文学奖，成为中国获此殊荣的第一人，名扬世界。

成功的原因

1. 丰富的人生经历； 2. 孜孜不倦的文学创作； 3. 对中国传统文化的深刻理解

你个人对莫言获奖的评价

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Our task today:

Born in Gaomi county, Shandong Province on February 17, 1955 ， Mo Yan, a famous contemporary Chinese writer, attended primary school in his hometown. However, he was forced to drop out of school during the Cultural Revolution. At the age of twenty, fortunately, he joined the People's Liberation Army. In 1981, he began writing while he was still a soldier, and since then, he has been writing and creating many fabulous works, which gains him considerable popularity. In August, 2011, he was awarded as a winner of the 8th Mao Dun Literature Prize. What came as the greatest honor is that on October 11,

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2012, he won the Nobel Prize in Literature, making him the first one in China to enjoy it and meanwhile he became famous worldwide overnight.

Looking back to his great achievements, we can find that it is his rich life experience, diligence in writing and his profound understanding of Chinese traditional culture that contribute to his great success. As Chinese, we’re proud of his winning the prize. Not only will this exciting news definitely renew people’s enthusiasm towards literature, but people in other fields are also inspired to aim high confidently.

Homework:

Complete the writing.

Thank you!