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Copy editing III: StructureReview interview assignments: Top bloopers
Diagnosing weak stories: confusion, incoherence and weak constitution
Story modeling and planning
In-class assignment: Save an incoherent story
Story symptoms
Unclear, unsupported or buried lead
Poorly used quotes
Straying from story topic
Poor explanation
Lack of transitions
Illogical order
Wordiness/jargon
Case studies
Forensic hospital story – confusing lead
Berry farm story – buried lead and visuals
Corn story – overuse of quotes, lack of explanation, etc.
Neighbourhood watch story – lack of transition
Prevention
Go over notes and quotes. Write an outline:
Rank new information by order of importance
Add in supportive information (specific details, quotes)
Weave in background
Add perspective
Flaherty outline
Lead: Flaherty makes statement, gets criticized
Sentence 2: Follow up on the statement and criticism
Expansion on Manley’s argument, with specifics, quotes
Context of Flaherty’s comments and background on the debate.
Expansion on Flaherty’s points, with specifics, quotes
KPMG study – relevant related news
Post-meeting follow-up from Manley, Flaherty
Perspective/look ahead to future of business
Accident story
Lead: Summarizes what witness saw
Follow-up: Witness’s statement zeroes in on community issue.
Description of accident
Background: victim’s identity, health status, police details
More witnesses/anecdotes on crosswalk
Councillor: What is being done?
Final quote brings it back to current victim. Too little too late.