REVIEW ON DISCUSSION THESIS PART

Thesis is one of a requirement for graduated students to finish their study in the

university. The five chapters of the thesis: introduction, review of related literature, research

methodology, research finding and conclusion and suggestion, are important parts in thesis.

Each part should connect to the other parts. In this discussion, the writer will analyze the

discussion and interpretation of the thesis of Ismeilinda, her thesis title is The Effect of

Cooperative Learning Strategy “One Host-Many Visitors” Toward Students’ Learning

Motivation and High Level Reading Comprehension at the Second Years of SMAN 1

Bengkulu. In this thesis, the writer wants to analyze about unity and coherence, grammatical

errors and punctuation rules.

Firstly, talking about unity and coherence are the basic things and also very

important in writing. Unity means one idea is for a paragraph, and the idea should have the

supporting sentence that have to explain the main idea directly. Meanwhile coherence means

in a paragraph, all the sentences must hold together, the sentence should flow smoothly into

the next sentence. To make all the paragraph hold together, the writer have to put the

transition signals in the sentence. In this Ismeilinda’ thesis, she kept the unity of thesis until

the end of discussion, but there are some errors of coherence. The use of transition signals in

her thesis, it could be found in Paragraph III, line 1, the sentence “It can be concluded that…”

can be changed into in short, or clearly to make a the idea in the paragraph before more

clearly.

After that, in Paragraph V, line 1, the transition signal “Moreover” there can be

changed by “In addition”, it can be changed because this paragraph is the additional

information from the paragraph before. “Moreover” is also the transition signal, but it can be

put as the conjunctive adverb. Then, in Last Paragraph, Paragraph VIII, line 1, the writer also

use “It can be concluded that…” as the transition signal to conclude all the discussion. It can

be changed by “to summarize, in conclusion, or to conclude” to have a better word in writing.

Secondly, the grammatical error in writing should be a thing to consider in

writing. Actually there are several common grammar mistake that almost everyone makes for

examples: the use of your and you’re, its and it’s, there and their, which and that, who and

whom, may and might, the use of capital letter and many others. Related to Ismeilinda’s

thesis, in Paragraph VI line 6, and Paragraph VII, line 3, in the title of the thesis, she forgot to

use the capital letter on each word. For writing a title, each word of the title has to use the

capital letter. So, it could be “Cooperative Learning Strategy “One Host-many Visitors”.

Meanwhile, in Paragraph V, line 3, 7, 11 and 13, there are sentences which are not

using the capital letter on the first word, and it is also show the list of the elements of

cooperative learning strategy that’s why there is a number in bracket. It should use the capital

letter after the number.

The last is the using of punctuation rules in the sentence. Punctuation is also one

of the important things in basic of writing. Punctuation means the marks, such as full stop,

comma, colon, semicolons, and brackets, used in writing to separate sentences and their

elements and to clarify meaning. For punctuation rules, related to Ismeilinda’ thesis, it could

be found in Paragraph II, line 2, there is transition signal in sentence: “The result one of

learning motivation questionnaire”. In this sentence there is a comma should be put after the

transition signal “The result”. After that, in Paragraph V, line 3, there is no colon after “The

elements are..”. In this case, when the writer wants to mention some of the lists by using the

number in brackets, use the colon before the number. So the sentence could be “The element

are: (1) …”. Then, in the same paragraph, line 4, in the sentence “The students are assigned

carefully to heterogeneous group in terms of ability and gender so that each group is a cross-

sectional representation of the whole class”, to make the sentence is clear, it should be a

commas after the word “gender”.

To make the review of Ismeilinda’ thesis writing more clear, in short, there are

some errors types in it. Like the unity and coherence, using the capital letter, using the

punctuation rules such as commas, semicolons, and colons. There is a benefit after review her

thesis. After we read, we can get some of the information from it, try to analyze, make

correction, and we will make our thesis better.

Title

THE EFFECT OF COOPERATIVE LEARNING STRATEGY “ONE HOST-MANY

VISITORS” TOWARD STUDENTS’ LEARNING MOTIVATION AND HIGH LEVEL

READING COMPREHENSION AT THE SECOND YEARS OF SMAN 1 BENGKULU

Writer : ISMEILINDA ( 2010/19298 )