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"Write Tight(er)" [Presentation], by Marcia Riefer Johnston
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Write Tight (er)
Marcia Riefer Johnston@MarciaRJohnston
Sept. 9, 2014
A Fast, Pain-Free Technique for Creating Concise, Compelling,
Less-Costly Copy
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
What does conciseness mean (and not mean)?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
What does conciseness mean (and not mean)?
How much difference can conciseness make?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
What does conciseness mean (and not mean)?
How much difference can conciseness make?
How does conciseness help me sell?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
What does conciseness mean (and not mean)?
How much difference can conciseness make?
How does conciseness help me sell?
How can I write more concisely?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
What does conciseness mean (and not mean)?
Fast, !pain-free technique
How much difference can conciseness make?
How does conciseness help me sell?
How can I write more concisely?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
What does conciseness mean (and not mean)?
Fast, !pain-free technique
How much difference can conciseness make?
How does conciseness help me sell?
How can I write more concisely?
WORKSHOP
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
What does conciseness mean (and not mean)?
Fast, !pain-free technique
How much difference can conciseness make?
How does conciseness help me sell?
How can I write more concisely?
WORKSHOP
Three-minute (mock) video
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
What does conciseness mean (and not mean)?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Minimalism
What does conciseness mean (and not mean)?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Concise means “minimal.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Concise means “minimal.”Not short.
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Concise means “minimal.”Not short.
“Cut me a short string.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Concise means “minimal.”Not short.
“Cut me a short string.” Huh?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Concise means “minimal.”Not short.
“Cut me a short string.” Huh?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Concise means “minimal.”Not short.
“Cut me a short string.”
Make text (like string) as long as needed.
Huh?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Make text, like string, as long as needed. @MarciaRJohnston
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Concise means “minimal.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Not robospeak.
Concise means “minimal.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Not robospeak.
Concise means “minimal.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Not robospeak.
Push button.
Concise means “minimal.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Not robospeak.
Push button. Push the button.
Concise means “minimal.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Not robospeak.
Keep the the.
Push button. Push the button.
Concise means “minimal.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Concise means “minimal.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Not gutted for mobile.
Concise means “minimal.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Not gutted for mobile.
Concise means “minimal.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Not gutted for mobile.
Don’t think, “Smartphone users won’t need that.”
Concise means “minimal.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Not gutted for mobile.
They will.
Don’t think, “Smartphone users won’t need that.”
Concise means “minimal.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Not gutted for mobile.
They will.
Don’t think, “Smartphone users won’t need that.”
Concise means “minimal.”
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Example
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Example
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
No discussion board?
Example
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No discussion board?
No calendar?
Example
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Concise ≠!Gutted
No discussion board?
No calendar?
Example
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Minimal.
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Minimal.
Enough to meet your audiences’ needs
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Minimal.
Enough to meet your audiences’ needs
Enough to accomplish your purpose
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Minimal.
Enough to meet your audiences’ needs
Enough to accomplish your purpose
No more
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Minimal.
Enough to meet your audiences’ needs
Enough to accomplish your purpose
No more No less
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Write Tight(er): A Fast, Pain-Free
Technique for Creating Concise, Compelling,
Less-Costly Copy
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Audience needs:!“What’s in it for me?”
Write Tight(er): A Fast, Pain-Free
Technique for Creating Concise, Compelling,
Less-Costly Copy
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Audience needs:!“What’s in it for me?”
My purpose:!Get you here
Write Tight(er): A Fast, Pain-Free
Technique for Creating Concise, Compelling,
Less-Costly Copy
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
No more
Audience needs:!“What’s in it for me?”
My purpose:!Get you here
Write Tight(er): A Fast, Pain-Free
Technique for Creating Concise, Compelling,
Less-Costly Copy
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
No more No less
Audience needs:!“What’s in it for me?”
My purpose:!Get you here
Write Tight(er): A Fast, Pain-Free
Technique for Creating Concise, Compelling,
Less-Costly Copy
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
How much difference can conciseness make?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
How much difference can conciseness make?
“Measured usability was dramatically higher for the concise version [of the website]—58% better.”!!
Nielsen Norman Group!www.nngroup.com/articles/
how-users-read-on-the-web
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How does conciseness help me sell?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Small screens
How does conciseness help me sell?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Small screens
Translation costs
How does conciseness help me sell?
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Small screens
Translation costs
Readability
How does conciseness help me sell?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Small screens
Translation costs
Readability
Think !usability, engagement.
How does conciseness help me sell?
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@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Write Tight (er)
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“But I already write concisely.”This is your toothbrush when it’s new. The blue bristles are blue all the way to their tips.
This is your toothbrush when it’s ready to replace. The blue bristles have turned half white.
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Readers want this.
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Especially if you translate.
Philips Sonicare™ toothbrush
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“But my stuff isn’t translated.”
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“But my stuff isn’t translated.”
Get ready!
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How much can a word cost?
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You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
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You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?words6
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You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?words6
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You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
You may need a loan.
words6
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You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
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You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
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You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
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You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
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You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
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You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
1 sentence, 1 language
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You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
1 sentence, 1 language
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
10,000 sentences,* 1 language
1 sentence, 1 language
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
* the size of a Harry Potter novel
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
10,000 sentences,* 1 language
1 sentence, 1 language
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
* the size of a Harry Potter novel
$ 2,500.00
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
10,000 sentences,* 1 language
1 sentence, 1 language
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
* the size of a Harry Potter novel
$ 2,500.00
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
10,000 sentences,* 25 languages
10,000 sentences,* 1 language
1 sentence, 1 language
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
* the size of a Harry Potter novel
$ 2,500.00
$ 62,500.00
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
10,000 sentences,* 25 languages
10,000 sentences,* 1 language
1 sentence, 1 language
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
* the size of a Harry Potter novel
$ 2,500.00
$ 62,500.00
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
10,000 sentences,* 25 languages
10,000 sentences,* 1 language
1 sentence, 1 language
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
a word? How so?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
a word? How so?
Close enough
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
a word? How so?
Close enough
Varies with the language
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
a word? How so?
Close enough
Varies with the language
Depends on the translation memory (database)
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
a word? How so?
Close enough
Varies with the language
Depends on the translation memory (database) unrecognized word
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
a word? How so?
Close enough
Varies with the language
Depends on the translation memory (database) unrecognized word
Full price
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
a word? How so?
Close enough
Varies with the language
Depends on the translation memory (database) unrecognized word “fuzzy” match Full price
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
a word? How so?
Close enough
Varies with the language
Depends on the translation memory (database) unrecognized word “fuzzy” match Full price
Pay less
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
a word? How so?
Close enough
Varies with the language
Depends on the translation memory (database) unrecognized word “fuzzy” match “perfect” match
Full price
Pay less
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
a word? How so?
Close enough
Varies with the language
Depends on the translation memory (database) unrecognized word “fuzzy” match “perfect” match
You still pay!
Full price
Pay less
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Whether or not you translate,
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Whether or not you translate,
whatever size your page or screen,
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Whether or not you translate,
whatever size your page or screen,
you owe it to yourself to ask …
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
How can I write!more concisely?
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Dump these words!*
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Dump these words!**unless you need them
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)the fact that
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)the fact thatjust
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)the fact thatjustbegin to, try to, tend to, in order to
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)the fact thatjustbegin to, try to, tend to, in order toperiod of time
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)the fact thatjustbegin to, try to, tend to, in order toperiod of time in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)the fact thatjustbegin to, try to, tend to, in order toperiod of time in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)proverbial
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)the fact thatjustbegin to, try to, tend to, in order toperiod of time in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)proverbialdifferent (as in many different, 36 different)
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)the fact thatjustbegin to, try to, tend to, in order toperiod of time in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)proverbialdifferent (as in many different, 36 different)particular
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)the fact thatjustbegin to, try to, tend to, in order toperiod of time in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)proverbialdifferent (as in many different, 36 different)particularverbiage
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)the fact thatjustbegin to, try to, tend to, in order toperiod of time in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)proverbialdifferent (as in many different, 36 different)particularverbiageany other verbiage or unneeded words that you can pitch
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)the fact thatjustbegin to, try to, tend to, in order toperiod of time in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)proverbialdifferent (as in many different, 36 different)particularverbiageany other verbiage or unneeded words that you can pitch
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)the fact thatjustbegin to, try to, tend to, in order toperiod of time in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)proverbialdifferent (as in many different, 36 different)particularverbiageany other verbiage or unneeded words that you can pitch
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)not, no (& other negative words)the fact thatjustbegin to, try to, tend to, in order toperiod of time in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)proverbialdifferent (as in many different, 36 different)particularverbiageany other verbiage or unneeded words that you can pitch
Dump these words!**unless you need them
Fast, !pain-free technique
@MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
be-verbs
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be
be-verbs
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isbe
be-verbs
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isbe
are be-verbs
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isbe
am
are be-verbs
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isbe
wasam
are be-verbs
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isbe
has beenwasam
are be-verbs
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isbe
will be
has beenwasam
are be-verbs
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isbe will have
been being
will be
has beenwasam
are be-verbs
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be-verb. Any form of the verb to be—namely, am, are, be, been, being, is, was, and were—whether used as an auxiliary verb or as a main verb.
—Bryan Garner!Garner’s Modern American Usage
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Start seeing be-verbs! @MarciaRJohnston
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See be-verbs.
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See be-verbs.
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See be-verbs.
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See be-verbs.
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Now available
Start seeing be-verbs.HowToWriteEverything.com
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Start seeing be-verbs.HowToWriteEverything.com
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Barbara Beresford, Minneapolis
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Examples
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“Bias tape has the advantage of being able to be applied smoothly around curves as well as straight.”
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“Bias tape has the advantage of being able to be applied smoothly around curves as well as straight.”
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“Bias tape has the advantage of being able to be applied smoothly around curves as well as straight.”
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“Bias tape has the advantage of being able to be applied smoothly around curves as well as straight.”
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The fix might not be self-evident.
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The fix might not be self-evident.
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The fix might not be self-evident.
You have to think.
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The fix might not be self-evident.
You have to think.
(Not too painful.)
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“A scheme of which every part promises delight can never be successful.”
—Jane Austen, Pride and Prejudice
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“A scheme of which every part promises delight can never be successful.”
—Jane Austen, Pride and Prejudice
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Audit logs are proof that no data breach !has occurred.
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Audit logs are proof that no data breach !has occurred.
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Our team wants to be predictive.
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Our team wants to be predictive.
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Our team wants to be predictive.
What does the team
want to do?
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Skydiving was fun.
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Skydiving was fun.
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Skydiving was fun.
What happened?
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Use be-verbs when they serve a purpose.
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what?
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is
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“Write when there is something that you know; and not before; and not too damned much after.”!
—Ernest Hemingway, Death in the Afternoon
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“Write when there is something that you know; and not before; and not too damned much after.”!
—Ernest Hemingway, Death in the Afternoon
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What it is is…
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“What was found was that access points on maps were not reflective or accurate for where they are.”
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“What was found was that access points on maps were not reflective or accurate for where they are.”
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“ There are known knowns. These are things we know that we know. There are known unknowns. That is to say, there are things
that we know we don’t know. But there are also unknown unknowns. There are things
we don’t know we don’t know.”!(attributed to a one-time US secretary of defense)
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“ There are known knowns. These are things we know that we know. There are known unknowns. That is to say, there are things
that we know we don’t know. But there are also unknown unknowns. There are things
we don’t know we don’t know.”!(attributed to a one-time US secretary of defense)
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“ There are known knowns. These are things we know that we know. There are known unknowns. That is to say, there are things
that we know we don’t know. But there are also unknown unknowns. There are things
we don’t know we don’t know.”!(attributed to a one-time US secretary of defense)
We don’t know diddly—
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“ There are known knowns. These are things we know that we know. There are known unknowns. That is to say, there are things
that we know we don’t know. But there are also unknown unknowns. There are things
we don’t know we don’t know.”!(attributed to a one-time US secretary of defense)
We don’t know diddly—except to avoid (most) be-verbs.
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Be-verbs are everywhere. See? @MarciaRJohnston
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Be-verbs are everywhere. See? @MarciaRJohnston
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See be-verbs.
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
Dump these words!**unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
Dump these words!**unless you need them
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
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Jane fully expects a big publisher to snap up her first novel.
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Jane fully expects a big publisher to snap up her first novel.
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We hope that people will actively participate.
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We hope that people will actively participate.
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Please listen carefully to the following choices so that we can immediately direct your call to the appropriate person.
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Please listen carefully to the following choices so that we can immediately direct your call to the appropriate person.
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Please listen carefully to the following choices so that we can immediately direct your call to the appropriate person.
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Mahatma Gandhi truly changed the world.
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Mahatma Gandhi truly changed the world.
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!
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very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
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Fred likes his toast very dry.
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Fred likes his toast very dry.
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Fred likes his toast very dry.
Fred likes his toast so dry.
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Fred likes his toast very dry.
Fred likes his toast so dry.
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Fred likes his toast very dry.
Fred likes his toast so dry.
Fred likes such dry toast.
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Fred likes his toast very dry.
Fred likes his toast so dry.
Fred likes such dry toast.
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Exception:the doge meme
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Exception:the doge meme
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Exception:the doge meme
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)!
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)!
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not, no (& other negative words)
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Do not use negative phrasing.
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Do not use negative phrasing.
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If you want viewers to focus on something, do not show faces looking away from it.
(This image is from an eye-tracking study by James Breeze!as cited in Garr Reynolds’s book Presentation Zen.)
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If you want viewers to focus on something, do not show faces looking away from it.
(This image is from an eye-tracking study by James Breeze!as cited in Garr Reynolds’s book Presentation Zen.)
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The Oregon Ducks have not lost a “Civil War” game to their archrivals, the Beavers, in seven years.
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The Oregon Ducks have not lost a “Civil War” game to their archrivals, the Beavers, in seven years.
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The Oregon Ducks have not lost a “Civil War” game to their archrivals, the Beavers, in seven years.
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The Oregon Ducks have not lost a “Civil War” game to their archrivals, the Beavers, in seven years.
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)!not, no (& other negative words)!
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the fact that
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Given the fact that Joan understood topic-based writing, everyone went to her with questions.
Concept Task Reference
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Given the fact that Joan understood topic-based writing, everyone went to her with questions.
Concept Task Reference
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just
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It's just that I just say just a lot. I just have the habit, so it’s just hard to stop saying it.
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It's just that I just say just a lot. I just have the habit, so it’s just hard to stop saying it.
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)!not, no (& other negative words)!the fact that!just!
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)!not, no (& other negative words)!the fact that!just!
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begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
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Michael Noer handed the six-year-old the tablet. With no instruction, and never having seen a computer, the boy began to swipe the screen, launch apps, and play a pinball game.
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Michael Noer handed the six-year-old the tablet. With no instruction, and never having seen a computer, the boy began to swipe the screen, launch apps, and play a pinball game.
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Try to focus on breathing.
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Try to focus on breathing.
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“Stop trying to hit me, and hit me.”!—Morpheus to Neo
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“Stop trying to hit me, and hit me.”!—Morpheus to Neo
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“Do or do not. There is no try.”!
—Yoda
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“Do or do not. There is no try.”!
—Yoda
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“When our tools don’t work, we tend to blame ourselves for being too stupid or not reading the manual or having too fat fingers.”!
—Lev Grossman, Time
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“When our tools don’t work, we tend to blame ourselves for being too stupid or not reading the manual or having too fat fingers.”!
—Lev Grossman, Time
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In order to divert 34,000 tons of food scraps from landfills, Portland created a curbside-pickup program for compostable waste.
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In order to divert 34,000 tons of food scraps from landfills, Portland created a curbside-pickup program for compostable waste.
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Dump these words!**unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)!not, no (& other negative words)!the fact that!just!begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
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period of time
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Jones and Caruthers have worked here for a long period of time.
Sketch by Brian Poulsen. Used with permission.
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Jones and Caruthers have worked here for a long period of time.
Sketch by Brian Poulsen. Used with permission.
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)!not, no (& other negative words)!the fact that!just!begin to, try to, tend to, in order to!period of time
Dump these words!**unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)!not, no (& other negative words)!the fact that!just!begin to, try to, tend to, in order to!period of time
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in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
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In light of my lack of cash, we stopped at an ATM.
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In light of my lack of cash, we stopped at an ATM.
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In light of my lack of cash, we stopped at an ATM.
Since…
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In light of my lack of cash, we stopped at an ATM.
In spite of his poor health, Samuel attended his niece’s graduation.
Since…
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In light of my lack of cash, we stopped at an ATM.
In spite of his poor health, Samuel attended his niece’s graduation.
Since…
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In light of my lack of cash, we stopped at an ATM.
In spite of his poor health, Samuel attended his niece’s graduation.
Since…
Despite…
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In light of my lack of cash, we stopped at an ATM.
In spite of his poor health, Samuel attended his niece’s graduation.
I prefer that TV in terms of cost.
Since…
Despite…
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In light of my lack of cash, we stopped at an ATM.
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I prefer that TV in terms of cost.
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In light of my lack of cash, we stopped at an ATM.
In spite of his poor health, Samuel attended his niece’s graduation.
I prefer that TV in terms of cost.
Since…
Despite…
…that cheaper TV.
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“The word of is, in anything other than small doses, among the surest indications of flabby writing.”!
—Bryan Garner!Garner’s Modern American Usage
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“The word of is, in anything other than small doses, among the surest indications of flabby writing.”!
—Bryan Garner!Garner’s Modern American Usage
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“The word of is, in anything other than small doses, among the surest indications of flabby writing.”!
—Bryan Garner!Garner’s Modern American Usage
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)!not, no (& other negative words)!the fact that!just!begin to, try to, tend to, in order to!period of time!in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
Dump these words!**unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)!not, no (& other negative words)!the fact that!just!begin to, try to, tend to, in order to!period of time!in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
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proverbial
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The proverbial needle in the haystack
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The proverbial needle in the haystack
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The proverbial needle in the haystack
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)!not, no (& other negative words)!the fact that!just!begin to, try to, tend to, in order to!period of time!in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)!proverbial
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different (as in many different, 36 different)
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Our company understands the pros and cons of all these different technologies.
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Our company understands the pros and cons of all these different technologies.
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Steve Jobs’s name appears on 212 different Apple patents.
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Steve Jobs’s name appears on 212 different Apple patents.
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particular
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Google’s CEO, Eric Schmidt, has a particular belief that Android’s open platform leads to more options and more consumer choice.
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Google’s CEO, Eric Schmidt, has a particular belief that Android’s open platform leads to more options and more consumer choice.
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While Lady Gaga’s particular sense of style puzzles many, millions of fans say that her affirming theme of bravery and kindness has changed their lives.
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While Lady Gaga’s particular sense of style puzzles many, millions of fans say that her affirming theme of bravery and kindness has changed their lives.
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)!-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)!very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)!not, no (& other negative words)!the fact that!just!begin to, try to, tend to, in order to!period of time!in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)!proverbial!different (as in many different, 36 different)!particular
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verbiage
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We’ll throw some verbiage in there.
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We’ll throw some verbiage in there.
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Want to make this technique even faster?
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Try this.
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This is your toothbrush when it’s new. The blue bristles are blue all the way to their tips.
This is your toothbrush when it’s ready to replace. The blue bristles have turned half white.
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This is your toothbrush when it’s new. The blue bristles are blue all the way to their tips.
This is your toothbrush when it’s ready to replace. The blue bristles have turned half white.
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This is your toothbrush when it’s new. The blue bristles are blue all the way to their tips.
This is your toothbrush when it’s ready to replace. The blue bristles have turned half white.
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This is your toothbrush when it’s new. The blue bristles are blue all the way to their tips.
This is your toothbrush when it’s ready to replace. The blue bristles have turned half white.
Bet you didn’t miss the headline I deleted.
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It’s mind-boggling to consider !what TIGHTENING that !
dramatic would do to!IMPROVES KEYWORD DENSITY.
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It’s mind-boggling to consider !what TIGHTENING that !
dramatic would do to!IMPROVES KEYWORD DENSITY.
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It’s mind-boggling to consider !what TIGHTENING that !
dramatic would do to!IMPROVES KEYWORD DENSITY.
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It’s mind-boggling to consider !what TIGHTENING that !
dramatic would do to!IMPROVES KEYWORD DENSITY.
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Adjectives • absolutely certain, absolutely essential, absolutely
guaranteed, completely necessary, totally sure!• bald-headed!• best ever, first ever!• blue in color, few in number, long in duration, nubbly in
texture, round in shape, slovenly in appearance, short in height, slow in speed, small in size, tall in stature!
• booked solid!• exact same, same exact, same identical!• filled to capacity!• incredible to believe, visible to the eye, warm to the touch
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Nouns • actual experience, actual fact!• added bonus!• advance notice, advance planning, advance preview,
advance reservations, advance warning!• all-time favorite, all-time record!• alternative choice!• anonymous stranger!• annual anniversary!• armed gunman!• artificial prosthesis!• autobiography of her own life, biography of his life
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Nouns • actual experience, actual fact!• added bonus!• advance notice, advance planning, advance preview,
advance reservations, advance warning!• all-time favorite, all-time record!• alternative choice!• anonymous stranger!• annual anniversary!• armed gunman!• artificial prosthesis!• autobiography of her own life, biography of his life
And that’s just!the a’s.
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collaborate together, combine together, confer together, connect together, cooperate together, fuse together, gather together, join together, integrate together, meet together, merge together, mingle together, mix together, pool together, share together, splice together
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Dump these words!**unless you need them
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Cost to translate into 1 language 25 languages
x 10,000 sentences
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BEFORE Your original text here with more words than you need. 10 $2.50 $62.50 $625,000.00
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