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How to Compare
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Learning intentions
• Understand how to compare TEXTS
• Compare two poems
• S4L: ....
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Say a lot about a little – you know this mantra, but too few of you are actually doing it.
THIS IS A SKILL THAT WE USE RIGHT THE WAY THROUGH ENGLISH – THIS IS ENGLISH!(It’s actually just going on about stuff in detail)
This is what it looks likeThe speaker shows her feelings about her son going
off to war with the lines ‘All my words/ flattened, rolled, turned into felt’. Here, the asyndeton of the words that are synonymous with crushing show how the speaker is trying to hold back her feelings. The metaphor of ‘turned into felt’ is particularly effective as the process of making felt requires laborious, extensive crushing that helps the reader realise the extent of the mother’s suppressed feelings. It is also a domestic reference, of which there are many throughout the poem, that places the experience of conflict with the woman and shows the effect of conflict on mothers. It helps the reader realise that the experience of conflict is not limited to soldiers, but also helps you to consider the feelings of their mothers and the domestic experience of war.
Decent sized quote that I can analyse
Structural analysis
Taken a gem from
my quotation for further analysis
Further analysis
that links to conflict
Link to question
But you need more!!! Yikers.
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Comparison. You need to have detailed and sustained analysis that is comparative...
How do we merge this together?
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Firstly,
Plan.
Look at the question. This must be your guide.
Find a point of difference and similarity.
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Compare how poets present the experience of soldiers in Bayonet Charge and one other
poem.
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Experience of Soldiers Right, first thing I am thinking is
which poem? I need one that isn’t too similar and is the soldier’s experience.
I’m going to chose Come on Come Back.
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PlanIn my intro summarise the poems
and how they link (remember, a blend of the story and comparison, if you don’t know this, look at the exam skills PPt on the blog)
SimilaritiesExperience of
soldiers painful and confusing Why are they there?
Differences Female and future
war – but both suggest futility of war
Don’t forget: PRECISION –
you’re not going to go
through both the poems in
detail, but pick out
small points that you can
say a lot about
The soldiers’ experiences are similar as war seems to make them question their existence as well as the nature of conflict itself. In Bayonet Charge the second stanza slows and shows how the soldier almost stops and asks ‘In what cold clockwork of the stars and the nations/ Was he the hand pointing that second?’ his experience has made him question his place in the ‘cold clockwork’ and Hughes skilfully makes him seem small and separate both from the universe and the nation he is fighting for, the harsh alliterative ‘c’ emphasising the brutality and ‘cold(ness)’of war. Similarly, the experience of Vaudevue in Come on Come Back shares this confusion with ‘She fears and cries, me why am I here?’ here, the questioning is more direct and shows the soldier frightened and crying, the interjection ‘ah’ creates a personal appeal to the reader and shows the turmoil of her ‘black’ mind. The use of questioning in both poems shows the personal mental anguish caused by the soldiers’ experiences, both in the heat of the battle and post battle. Furthermore, the questioning from the soldiers as they experience conflict shows the futility of war; an answer is not given to their questions and the personal experiences make this seem more harrowing to the reader. This questioning could be seen as a rhetorical cry against war and conflict.
The soldiers’ experiences are similar as war seems to make them question their existence as well as the nature of conflict itself. In Bayonet Charge the second stanza slows and shows how the soldier almost stops and asks ‘In what cold clockwork of the stars and the nations/ Was he the hand pointing that second?’ his experience has made him question his place in the ‘cold clockwork’ and Hughes skilfully makes him seem small and separate both from the universe and the nation he is fighting for, the harsh alliterative ‘c’ emphasising the brutality and ‘cold(ness)’of war. Similarly, the experience of Vaudevue in Come on Come Back shares this confusion with ‘She fears and cries, me why am I here?’ here, the questioning is more direct and shows the soldier frightened and crying, the interjection ‘ah’ creates a personal appeal to the reader and shows the turmoil of her ‘black’ mind. The use of questioning in both poems shows the personal mental anguish caused by the soldiers’ experiences, both in the heat of the battle and post battle. Furthermore, the questioning from the soldiers as they experience conflict shows the futility of war; an answer is not given to their questions and the personal experiences make this seem more harrowing to the reader. This questioning could be seen as a rhetorical cry against war and conflict.
Look at your copy of this
paragraph. What does it do that
makes it successful?
The soldiers’ experiences are similar as war seems to make them question their existence as well as the nature of conflict itself. In Bayonet Charge the second stanza slows and shows how the soldier almost stops and asks ‘In what cold clockwork of the stars and the nations/ Was he the hand pointing that second?’ his experience has made him question his place in the ‘cold clockwork’ and Hughes skilfully makes him seem small and separate both from the universe and the nation he is fighting for, the harsh alliterative ‘c’ emphasising the brutality and ‘cold(ness)’of war. Similarly, the experience of Vaudevue in Come on Come Back shares this confusion with ‘She fears and cries, me why am I here?’ here, the questioning is more direct and shows the soldier frightened and crying, the interjection ‘ah’ creates a personal appeal to the reader and shows the turmoil of her ‘black’ mind. The use of questioning in both poems shows the personal mental anguish caused by the soldiers’ experiences, both in the heat of the battle and post battle. Furthermore, the questioning from the soldiers as they experience conflict shows the futility of war; an answer is not given to their questions and the personal experiences make this seem more harrowing to the reader. This questioning could be seen as a rhetorical cry against war and conflict.
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The soldiers’ experiences are similar as war seems to make them question their existence as well as the nature of conflict itself. In Bayonet Charge the second stanza slows and shows how the soldier almost stops and asks ‘In what cold clockwork of the stars and the nations/ Was he the hand pointing that second?’ his experience has made him question his place in the ‘cold clockwork’ and Hughes skilfully makes him seem small and separate both from the universe and the nation he is fighting for, the harsh alliterative ‘c’ emphasising the brutality and ‘cold(ness)’of war. Similarly, the experience of Vaudevue in Come on Come Back shares this confusion with ‘She fears and cries, me why am I here?’ here, the questioning is more direct and shows the soldier frightened and crying, the interjection ‘ah’ creates a personal appeal to the reader and shows the turmoil of her ‘black’ mind. The use of questioning in both poems shows the personal mental anguish caused by the soldiers’ experiences, both in the heat of the battle and post battle. Furthermore, the questioning from the soldiers as they experience conflict shows the futility of war; an answer is not given to their questions and the personal experiences make this seem more harrowing to the reader. This questioning could be seen as a rhetorical cry against war and conflict.
Quotations
Be precise! Your quotes shouldn’t be too long or so short that you haven’t got
enough to say.
The soldiers’ experiences are similar as war seems to make them question their existence as well as the nature of conflict itself. In Bayonet Charge the second stanza slows and shows how the soldier almost stops and asks ‘In what cold clockwork of the stars and the nations/ Was he the hand pointing that second?’ his experience has made him question his place in the ‘cold clockwork’ and Hughes skilfully makes him seem small and separate both from the universe and the nation he is fighting for, the harsh alliterative ‘c’ emphasising the brutality and ‘cold(ness)’of war. Similarly, the experience of Vaudevue in Come on Come Back shares this confusion with ‘She fears and cries, me why am I here?’ here, the questioning is more direct and shows the soldier frightened and crying, the interjection ‘ah’ creates a personal appeal to the reader and shows the turmoil of her ‘black’ mind. The use of questioning in both poems shows the personal mental anguish caused by the soldiers’ experiences, both in the heat of the battle and post battle. Furthermore, the questioning from the soldiers as they experience conflict shows the futility of war; an answer is not given to their questions and the personal experiences make this seem more harrowing to the reader. This questioning could be seen as a rhetorical cry against war and conflict.
Separate Analysis
The soldiers’ experiences are similar as war seems to make them question their existence as well as the nature of conflict itself. In Bayonet Charge the second stanza slows and shows how the soldier almost stops and asks ‘In what cold clockwork of the stars and the nations/ Was he the hand pointing that second?’ his experience has made him question his place in the ‘cold clockwork’ and Hughes skilfully makes him seem small and separate both from the universe and the nation he is fighting for, the harsh alliterative ‘c’ emphasising the brutality and ‘cold(ness)’of war. Similarly, the experience of Vaudevue in Come on Come Back shares this confusion with ‘She fears and cries, me why am I here?’ here, the questioning is more direct and shows the soldier frightened and crying, the interjection ‘ah’ creates a personal appeal to the reader and shows the turmoil of her ‘black’ mind. The use of questioning in both poems shows the personal mental anguish caused by the soldiers’ experiences, both in the heat of the battle and post battle. Furthermore, the questioning from the soldiers as they experience conflict shows the futility of war; an answer is not given to their questions and the personal experiences make this seem more harrowing to the reader. This questioning could be seen as a rhetorical cry against war and conflict.
Comparison
The soldiers’ experiences are similar as war seems to make them question their existence as well as the nature of conflict itself. In Bayonet Charge the second stanza slows and shows how the soldier almost stops and asks ‘In what cold clockwork of the stars and the nations/ Was he the hand pointing that second?’ his experience has made him question his place in the ‘cold clockwork’ and Hughes skilfully makes him seem small and separate both from the universe and the nation he is fighting for, the harsh alliterative ‘c’ emphasising the brutality and ‘cold(ness)’of war. Similarly, the experience of Vaudevue in Come on Come Back shares this confusion with ‘She fears and cries, me why am I here?’ here, the questioning is more direct and shows the soldier frightened and crying, the interjection ‘ah’ creates a personal appeal to the reader and shows the turmoil of her ‘black’ mind. The use of questioning in both poems shows the personal mental anguish caused by the soldiers’ experiences, both in the heat of the battle and post battle. Furthermore, the questioning from the soldiers as they experience conflict shows the futility of war; an answer is not given to their questions and the personal experiences make this seem more harrowing to the reader. This questioning could be seen as a rhetorical cry against war and conflict.
You can do this! It’s basically PEE+ with a difference!
Linked pointEvidence and explanation
Then a linking phrase Evidence and explanation
+Further analysis of both texts
The use of questioning in both poems shows the personal mental anguish caused by the soldiers’ experiences, both in the heat of the battle and post battle. Furthermore, the questioning from the soldiers as they experience conflict shows the futility of war; an answer is not given to their questions and the personal experiences make this seem more harrowing to the reader. This questioning could be seen as a rhetorical cry against war and conflict.
This is the skill - write about two texts at the same time. Because I am being really precise, focusing on a small aspect of the poem, it’s easier to discuss both at the
same time.
This skill is necessary for both poetry and Q4 of the language
paper. So it’s ESSENTIAL to get it right.
This is the skill - write about two texts at the same time. Because I am being really precise, focusing on a small aspect of the
text, it’s easier to discuss both at the same time.
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What do you need?
To compare in the topic sentence.
To use comparative words:Similarly, conversely, likewise, on the
other hand, in contrast etc.
Discuss both poems at the same time.
Compare how poets present the experience of soldiers in Bayonet Charge and one other poem.
Skilled Writing will
1. Identify and comment on the poets’ use of language to show the experience of conflict with explanation of layers of meaning.
2. Have some comparison between poems in use of language and structure
Excellent Writingwill
1. Have a perceptive, detailed explanation, with appropriate terminology, of how language and structure are used to show the experience of soldiers
2. Commentary simultaneously explores the meaning/ideas created in both texts with increasingly sophisticated comparisons
Homework
For tomorrow – do Q4 in this exam paper.
DO NOT lose it. You’ll have completed this by the end of the week and I want you to have detailed feedback ready for your exam.
Remember your 10 mark challenge!
