2 Pupil Pack Poetry Valentine 2 (1)

7/25/2019 2 Pupil Pack Poetry Valentine 2 (1)

1/22

Valentineby

Carol Ann Dufy

Pupil Unit

Includes Formative AssessmentStrategies


2/22

Critical Essay: Poetry

Valentine

by

Carol Anne Dufy

By the end of this Unit you will be able to write Critical Essays on the oem!"alentine#$

%ou will be able to write relevantly about the central concern&s'(theme&s' ofthe oem and be able to suort your views by reference to aroriate oetictechni)ues$

%ou will learn about(revise the following techni)ues:

Imagery

*one

+ord Choice

Structure

Symbolism

Selected Poems for Higher EnglishValentine by Carol Ann Duy

2


3/22

%ou will be able to adat your ,nowledge of the central concerns/themesofthe oem and the techniquesused to answer )uestions which as, you tochoose a oem-

!-which you feel is articularly relevant to a teenage audience$#

!- in which - a seemingly unimortant incident ac)uiresincreased signi.cance by the end of the oem$#

!- in which you feel there is a signi.cant moment which revealsthe central idea of the oem$#

!- which creates a sense of menace$#

!- on the sub/ect of love$#

!- in which there is a noticeable change of mood at one or morethan one oint in the oem$#

Activities in this unit are designed to be erformed in classroom

conditions involving discussion0 eer assessment and written

assignment$ *he teacher will facilitate the lessons and discussionsgiving aroriate advice and modelling when aroriate$


3


4/22

!"alentine#

Carol Ann Duffy

Not a red rose or a satin heart.

!i"e you an onion.

t is a moon #rapped in bro#n paper.t promises li!htli$e the care%ul undressin! o% lo"e.

&ere.t #ill blind you #ith tearsli$e a lo"er.t #ill ma$e your re'ectiona #obblin! photo o% !rie%.

am tryin! to be truth%ul.

Not a cute card or a $isso!ram.

!i"e you an onion.ts (erce $iss #ill stay on your lips)possessi"e and %aith%ulas #e are)%or as lon! as #e are.

*a$e it.

ts platinum loops shrin$ to a #eddin!+rin!)i% you li$e.

,ethal.ts scent #ill clin! to your (n!ers)clin! to your $ni%e.


4
http://plagiarist.com/poetry/poets/446/http://plagiarist.com/poetry/poets/446/


5/22

Valentine

*he poemis not

about anonion.

-ou ha"e minutes

to discuss #ith apartner #hat thepoem is about


5


6/22

0ocus o% Close Analysis

the positi"e aspects o% lo"econ"eyed in the poem and how

Dufy has con"eyed herspea$ers positi"e attitude

throu!h ima!ery) #ord choice

and symbolism.


6


7/22

*he tas, we are going to concentrate on as we e1amine

2u3y#s oem is:

Choose a oem on the sub/ect of love$Show how the oet treats the sub/ect0 and e1lain towhat e1tent you .nd the treatment convincing$&4igher English 5667'

Pupil

Valentine by Carol Ann Dufy

First we are going to e1amine the ositive asects of love conveyed

in the oem and how 2u3y has conveyed her sea,er#s ositiveattitude through imagery0 word choice and symbolism

2u3y uses the e1tended metahor of an onion to show her

sea,er#s ositive attitude to love$

+or,ing with a artner0 comlete the table below$

8odel your resonses on the two that have been done for you$

Conte1t/

Understandin!

2"idence/3uote Analysis/

2"aluation/Personal 4esponse

*he title of theoem suggeststhat it will dealwith fairlyconventionalnotions of love$

!"alentine# Connotations ofhearts(9owers(romance we all li,e the idea thatsomeone loves us andcares enough to show itthrough giving us gifts

%etunconventionalgift o3ered ; anonion$

!It is a moon wraedin brown aer$#

E1cellent metahor;moon is a conventionalsymbol of love suggestsromance< !brown aer# no fancy wraings todisguise the ob/ect truth(honesty$ *his is verybelievable$

Positive asect oflove ; otimismat the beginningof a relationshi

!romises(light# Hint Comment on theword choice ofpromises?

Is this convincing?

*he longer arelationshi lasts

!Its latinum loosshrin, to a wedding;

4int+hat does 2u3y#s


7


8/22

it will becomemore seriousand may lead tomarriage acommitmentwhich is not tobe made lightly$

ring0# ersona suggest aboutthe relationshi in thismetahor=

Is this !convincing#=

Positive asect oflove ; otimismat the beginningof a relationshi love has manylayers$

!It romises lightli,e the carefulundressing of love$#

4int

Strength andower of therelationshi$

!-faithful0as we are0

4int


8


9/22

5ini+essay *as$

6ho# ho# the poet re"eals the positi"e aspects o% thespea$ers attitude to lo"e and e1plain to #hat e1tentyou (nd the treatment con"incin!.

5ini 2ssay

%our teacher will model how you should use the information from one of therows of the table to suit a 7line o% thou!ht8and how you should lin, theinformation ensuring that whenever a statement is made there should beanalytical and evaluative comment made

*he following can be done in airs0 each air ta,ing one or two rows from thetable:

+rite your aragrahs and swa with another air or grou$

*he other grou should consider whether anything else can be added$

Use your notes from the temlate to hel you$

%our mini;essay should show understanding &conte1t'0 reference to the

te1t &)uote' and evaluative resonse &analysis and ersonal comment'$

21amine the model belo# to see ho# you can structure and lin$ yourideas in your response to the tas$ abo"e9+

Conte1t(Understanding

*he title of the oem suggests that it will deal with fairlyconventional ideas of love:

Evidence(>uote !"alentine#

Analysis(Evaluation( Personal

?esonse

In this word there are connotations of romance$ +e allli,e the idea that someone loves us and cares enough toshow it through giving us gifts li,e 9owers and

chocolates$


%et 2u3y#s sea,er o3ers an unconventional symbol oftheir love to their artner$ *he gift of an onion isresented by the ersona as a ositive e1ression oftheir feelings for their artner:

Evidence(>uote !It is a moon wraed in brown aer$#

Analysis(Evaluation

( Personal?esonse

*he moon is a conventional symbol of love and this

metahor suggests romance0 tenderness and sensitivity$*he !brown aer# the s,in of the onion shows thatthere are no fancy wraings to disguise the ob/ect


9


10/22

imlying that the relationshi will be based on truth andhonesty$ *his is very believable as we would all li,e tothin, that our artners will not only treat us sensitivelyand tenderly and ,ee the romance alive in ourrelationshi but also that they will have no secrets fromus$


10


11/22

Comlete the sentence-

Identify 5 areaswhere you havedone well andwrite them in thestars$

!I need to imrove-

Comlete the sentence-Comlete the sentence-

!I need to imrove-


!I need toimrove-


Peer Assessment

4ow did you get on= +or,ing with a artner0 use the chec,list below to assesswhether or not you have included all necessary information in your mini;essay$

If you have used all the information from your table and the model which yourteacher rovided0 you should have very little to imrove in your mini;essay$

Conte1t/Understandin! 2"idence/3uote 2"aluation

!"alentine#

!It is a moon wraedin brown aer$#!Its latinum loosshrin, to a wedding;ring0#

!romises(light#

!faithful0#


*echnical Accuracy

*oic Sentence

Full stos(caital letters used roerly

"aried sentence structure

>uotes set out roerly

Selling correct

@in,age used eg Inaddition(furthermore(moreover(yet etc

11


12/22


*he ne!ati"e aspects o% lo"econ"eyed in the poem and howDufy has con"eyed) throu!h

ima!ery) #ord choice and tone)that her spea$er/persona

becomes increasin!ly %rustratedby their lo"ers re:ection o% the!i%t o% the onion and e"entuallyadopts a threatenin! attitude.


12


13/22

*he tas, we are going to concentrate on as we e1amine 2u3y#soem is:

Choose a oem on the sub/ect of love$Show how the oet treats the sub/ect0 and e1lain to whate1tent you .nd the treatment convincing$

PupilValentine by Carol Ann Dufy

n this section) #e are !oin! to e1amine the ne!ati"easpects o% lo"e con"eyed in the poem and how Dufy hascon"eyed) throu!h ima!ery) #ord choice and tone) thather spea$er becomes increasin!ly %rustrated by theirlo"ers re:ection o% the !i%t and e"entually adopts a

threatenin! attitude.

Ne!ati"e aspects o% relationships con"eyed in thepoem

Dufy uses the e1tended metaphor o% an onion to sho# her

spea$ers increasin! %rustration that the !i%t o% an onion has beenre:ected. 2"entually) the spea$er adopts a threatenin! attitude astheir lo"er re%uses to accept the !i%t.

;or$in! #ith a partner) complete the table belo#. 5odel your responses on the t#o that ha"e been done %or you.

Conte1t/Understandin!

2"idence/3uote Analysis/2"aluation/Personal 4esponse

*he onion reresents arelationshi which mayocasionally cause youain$

!It will blind you withtearsli,e a lover$#

Simile truth(honesty suggests love can causedistress< +ord choicesuggests ain and grief$

Believable inrelationshis0 oneartner can often becruel( hurtful$

*he onion is li,e a mirror but the image may bedistorted$$

!It will ma,e yourre9ectiona wobbling hoto ofgrief$#

E1tended metahor !wobbling hoto of grief# ain(tears( distress canbe caused byrelationshis(truth(honesty< word

choice suggests ainand heartache$ I amcertain that this is the


13


14/22

case relationshis arenot always comletelyagreeable$

Powerful love is verydicult to forget as is abrutal(violentrelationshi$

!.erce ,iss will stay onyour lis0#

Hint

Strength and ower ofthe relationshi achange in therelationshi$

!ossessive and faithful0# Hint

*he longer a relationshilasts it will become moreserious and may lead tomarriage which maybecome a restrictiverelationshi$

!Its latinum loosshrin, to a wedding;ring0#

4int

Intense relationshi maylead to violence$ !@ethal$# 4int

Powerful love is verydicult to forget andmay lead you intodangerous situationswhere the .nal outcomemay be brutal(violent$

!Its scent will cling toyour .ngers0cling to your ,nife$#

4int


14


15/22

5ini+essay *as$

6ho# ho# the poet re"eals the spea$ers increasin!%rustration and the efect this has on his commentsabout


16/22


16


17/22



!I need toimrove-

Peer Assessment




!It will blind you withtearsli,e a lover$#!It will ma,e yourre9ectiona wobbling hoto ofgrief$#!.erce ,iss will stay onyour lis0#

!ossessive andfaithful0#!Its latinum loosshrin, to a wedding;ring0#!@ethal$#

!Its scent will cling to

your .ngers0cling to your ,nife$#


*echnical Accuracy

*oic SentenceFull stos(caital letters used roerly



Selling correct


17


18/22


HowDufy has con"eyed)throu!h structure) that her

spea$er/persona #ho ofers the!i%t o% an onion as a

representation o% their lo"e %or

their partner) becomesincreasin!ly %rustrated by theirlo"ers re:ection o% the !i%t ande"entually adopts a threatenin!

attitude.


18


19/22

*he tas, we are going to concentrate on as we e1amine 2u3y#soem is:

Choose a oem on the sub/ect of love$Show how the oet treats the sub/ect0 and e1lain to whate1tent you .nd the treatment convincing$&4igher English 5667'

PupilValentine by Carol Ann Dufy

n this section) #e are !oin! to e1amine How Dufy has con"eyed)throu!h structure) that her spea$er/persona #ho ofers the !i%t o% an

onion as a representation o% their lo"e %or their partner) becomesincreasin!ly %rustrated by their lo"ers re:ection o% the !i%t ande"entually adopts a threatenin! attitude.

6tructure

Dufy uses structure to sho# that her spea$er/persona #ho ofers

the !i%t o% an onion as a representation o% their lo"e %or theirpartner) becomes increasin!ly %rustrated by their lo"ers re:ectiono% the !i%t and e"entually adopts a threatenin! attitude.

Dufy has used 0422 V2462 in this poem > there is no ob"ious

rhyme scheme or rhythm.

*he poem sho#s one side o% a con"ersation.

;or$in! #ith a partner) complete the table belo#.

5odel your responses on the t#o that ha"e been done %or you.

Conte1t/Understandin!

2"idence/3uote Analysis/2"aluation/Personal 4esponse

Central idea of the oemis the central line

!I am trying to betruthful$#

Central line very directstatement< attitude ofsea,er before this lineis mainlyositive(gentle< after0more brutal0threatening$ "eryersonal note use of.rst erson !I#$


19


20/22

Sea,er immediatelydismisses conventionalsymbols of love andreeats this later in oem

!ot a red rose or a satinheart$#!ot a cute card or a,issogram$#

First line verblesssentence directstatement dismissescoventional symbols oflove< note that the word!not# starts eachsentence so that there

can be no doubt that theersona does not wish toshow their feelingsthrough overlysentimentalconventional symbols$?eetition of similarlystructured line reinforcessea,er#ssincerity(desire to betruthful(candid$ Entirelyconvincing "alentines materialistic(suer.cial many eole loo, for adi3erent way to e1ressdevotion and theersona has donee1actly that$

Sea,er is insisting thatlover will accet gift of an

onion$ the sea,er isalmost challenging theerson she is tal,ing to0,eeing the emotioncontrolled yet stronglyconnected with love:

!4ere$#!*a,e it$#

Hint

*he sea,er0overwhelmed by there/ection of the gift0resorts to threatening0almost violent language

!@ethal$# Hint

Powerful love is verydicult to forget andmay lead you intodangerous situationswhere the .nal outcomemay be brutal( violent$


4int


20


21/22

5ini+essay *as$

&o# does Dufy con"ey throu!h structure the spea$ers chan!e inmood/attitude? 21plain to #hat e1tent you (nd the treatmentcon"incin!.

5ini+2ssay

%our teacher will model how you should use the information from one of therows of the table to suit a 7line o% thou!ht8and how you should lin, theinformation ensuring that whenever a statement is made there should beanalytical and evaluative comment made$

*he following can be done in airs0 each air ta,ing one or two rows from thetable:

+rite your aragrahs and swa with another air or grou$

*he other grou should consider whether anything else can be added$

Use your notes from the temlate to hel you$

%our mini;essay should show understanding &conte1t'0 reference to the

te1t &)uote' and evaluative resonse &analysis and ersonal comment'$

21amine the model belo# to see ho# you can structure and lin$ yourideas in your response to the tas$ abo"e9+


2u3y has chosen to lace the central idea of the oem

right in the middle of it$ *he sea,er has dismissedconventional symbols of love in an e3ort to show theirartner /ust how much love they feel for them$ *hesea,er is very oen and fran, they simly want toshow their artner that there is no dishonesty in theirfeelings:

Evidence(>uote !I am trying to be truthful$#

Analysis(Evaluation( Personal?esonse

*his line is a very direct statement a simle sentence$

Before this line the ersona has so,en of their love inmainly gentle terms which shows the sincerity of theirfeelings$ %et0 after this line0 desite the sincerity of thesentiments reviously e1ressed0 the language of thesea,er becomes more brutal0 more threatening thusreinforcing the sea,er#s truthfulness and integrity$ Bythe use of the .rst erson0 2u3y conveys that thesea,er feels very strongly that they want honesty intheir relationshi$


21


22/22


!I need toimrove-


Peer Assessment




!I am trying to betruthful$#

!ot a red rose or asatin heart$#!ot a cute card or a,issogram$#!4ere$#!*a,e it$#

!@ethal$#


Selected Poems for Higher English

*echnical Accuracy

*oic SentenceFull stos(caital letters used roerly



Selling correct


22

Documents

2 Pupil Pack Poetry Valentine 2 (1)