6 Trait Writing Rubric

8/2/2019 6 Trait Writing Rubric

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Fourth Grade

Soccer

My brother plays soccer at Amy Blank, and

at a reall soccer feild.

At the soccer feild there is a plase near the

end. It is behind a bliding, it is like a dich.

Micky,s brother play soccer so I see Micky.

We look for lisrds. We havent found any

but at Falls School Micky cout one.

My brother also plays soccer at Amy Blank.

Micky and I find a spot and practs king

sometimes I play in the playground. wile

Micky waches the soccer game.

these arethe best

weekends!

Rubric Score 1:

The writer includes a vaguecentral idea (brother playssoccerthe fieldcatchinglizardsplaying on theplayground), but does notestablish a real idea/plot.The details are notorganized in a paragraphingstructure causing thesequence of events to beconfusing.The writer attempts todescribe a place near theend of the soccer field thatis like a ditch; but both theplace and purpose fordescribing it are unclear.

Conventions are sometimesincorrectly used, and manyhigh frequency words andword parts are incorrectlyspelled (plase, dich, wile,waches).The misspellings do notinterfere withcomprehension, but do causethe reader to slow down to

decode it.This paper compares to a 1on a 4 point rubric.


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Fourth Grade

A Trip to The Zoo

It was a bright sunny morning My sisters and I were

getting ready to go to the zoo. We had just gotten are

favorite outfits on. Then we went downstairs and we all had

are absoult favorite cereals. Mine was coco puffs. After we

ate, we heard our mom and stepdad yelled ARE YOU GIRLS

READY YET we yelled back OF COURSE. They knew we

wouldnt miss the zoo for anything. Next we had to put are

delishuse lunchs into are paper bags that we had decorated.

Then our mom and stepdad finally were ready and came

downstairs. We told tem we pack their boring lunchs to.

Finally it was time to go to the zoo. Are parents told us it

might take a while because we were going to the Sacramento

zoo.

We finally got to the zoo. First we saw the tigers,

lions, and bears. My sister thought the bears were scary.

Then we saw so many other animals I cant even remember all

their names. Then we went on a tiger rollercoaster. We went

on it about 4 times. Then when we were on it for the 3rd time

my sister screamed so loud that I felt like I was going to die.

Then we had to go home. On that long ride home our parents

knew my sisters and I had had the best time of our lifes. The

End

Rubric Score 2:

The writer clearly states his/hermain idea and stays on topic thewhole paper. There is an obviousbeginning, middle, end and anattempt to show emotion whenthe writer states, my sisterscreamed so loud that I felt like Iwas going to die.There was an effort to showvoice through the use of humorwhen she described the

delishuse and boring lunches.To make the voice effective theywould need to add meaningfuldetails to that section.The sentence fluency is adequatewith attempts to blend dialogueand sentence length. (Are yougirls ready yet and Mine wascoco puffs)Use of conventions is good withsome spelling errors that do notinterfere with meaning.

This paper is a 2 on a 4 pointrubric


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Fourth Grade

My Saturday

On a Saturday, at around 10:30 am was the best

Saturday yet. It was near the end of my Tae Kwon Do

class when my teacher was about to announce if we

graduated to the next belt level.

As he was saying the names in alphabetical order, I was

becoming impatient, that I started to fidget. After I

stopped squirming around I finally heard my name, I

stood up, waiting to find out if I graduated or not, my

answer came, has graduated from white belt level to

yellow belt level, first degree!, said my teacher. I was

jumping for joy, I felt so happy and proud of myself.

Then I took my certificate, my new belt, and bowed.

After everyone was called and happy, our teacher said

chuckling, Now you guys all look like bumblebees! We

looked like bumblebees because our uniforms were black

and our belts were yellow. Everyone started splitting

their sides of laughter. Then we all had a big celebration

with cake, soda, and candy.

Moreover, thats why this was my best Saturday yet.

Rubric Score 3:

The writer includes a central ideawith relevant facts, supportingdetails (my teacher was aboutto announce if we graduated tothe next belt level.) The writerhas an organizing structure witha clear beginning, middle andend. The author attempted tobuild momentum througheffective use of word choice (Iwas becoming so impatient that I

started to fidget, after I stoppedsquirming I finally).Emotion, insight and voice arepresent in several areas of thepaper, (I was jumping for joy, Ifelt so happy and proud ofmyself or Now you guys looklike bumblebees).This writer demonstratesknowledge of conventionsespecially for a 4th grader.This paper is a 3 on a 4-point

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Fourth Grade

Hmmmmy favorite Saturday. Thats a hard one, but I

think theres one that reigns over all. It was about two weeks ago.

We went to Scandia, where we did minutre golf. My parents were

gone, so my babysitter took a friend and I. It was quite fun, for

many reasons. One, I lost my golfball about three times!

It was a Saturday night. I was with my babysitter, and my

sister was at a football game. So I said Im not going to sit here all

night doing nothing!, then we called my friend, Brian, to see if he

could come. He could, so at about six oclock, we headed out into

the wild world of flying golfballs.

It was only a about 15 min. drive to Scandia, so we didnt

get to bored. I think we were all exited, because you could just

sense it. When we got there, we all pied out and began our way

over to the minutare-golf course. It was great! I especially liked

how they werent just regular old holes. They had bumpers, brick

walls, you name it! My favorite of them all was this one that had

bumpers on both sides of the fairway, and was a par 6!

We were having a great time. But you know whenever your

having a lot of fun, something goes wrong? Well, I was the person

all the things going wrong happened to! The thing is, I lost my ball

about three times! One time, on that hole thats my favorite, (theres

a pond next to it too) I hit the ball right down the center really

hardSsmmmaaccKK! The ball had curved off course, hit the last

bumper, and flew off the hole, into the water. Sploosh!

You know how I said it was hard to think of my best

Saturday? If anyone askes me that again, I think Ill know what to

say. I mean, I got to go with my friends, all the wacky holes, and

losing my ball, I dont think this reigns over al lthe othersI know it

reigns over all the others.

Rubric Score 4

The writer has an interestingbeginning, HmmThats a hardone I think theres one thatreigns over all.They have a strong sense ofparagraphing, with paragraphbreaks coming at appropriatetimes.The events are reasonably wellsequenced with a focus on

relevant facts and details.The writer makes an attempt at arestatement conclusion strategywhen he rephrases the beginningline, reigns over all.Sentences are varied in lengthand structure. The dialogue andsound effects add interest andreveal the writers personality.The writers voice is expressivewith phrases like, It is only a 15minute drive to Scandia, so we

didnt get bored, or Weheaded into the wild world ofgolfballs.Although conventions are notperfect, they show an effort touse more than just the usual withthe use of ellipsis periods,exclamation marks andparenthesis.

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6 Trait Writing Rubric