Tatiana Gutierrez’s Feedback 1.Does my thesis statement give the reader a clear idea about what my paper will be discussing? If not, what should I change about it? Really love your thesis! It's super clear of what's to come in the paper, and you make a very strong and definite claim. Your examples of positions were great, and I really loved how you added the 2 articles/authors from class to discuss your paper. The Mulvey was the best since it talked about women as just sexual images. Definitely emphasized the importance behind your thinking and the focus of this paper. 2.Do I have a solid conclusion? Does it give the reader something to think about? If you would change something about it, what would you change? Yes you do! You conclude what you've spoken about in your paper, and make your final observation based off the examples you've given, and the examples of people and events you've provided. It really does tie in everything you've discussed in your paper and ends it on a solid and well spoken note! You definitely have done a better job including ideas and views of your own, which all tie in well in the conclusion as well.