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Writing Fundamentals
English in Daily Life
Agenda
The first assignment
The second assignment
The deadline
高级日常英语 作业 01( 第 1-4 单元 )
高级日常英语 作业 02( 朗读题 )
My Routine Trip
Instructions:
Following the example in Unit 4,
Activity 6, Task 2, write a brief
account (120-150 words) describing
your routine trip to a work place or
to a study place.
p.189Now I study at the university, which is in the town centre. My home is on the outskirts of the town, about one and a half miles from the university. There is a regular busservice between the two but I prefer to walk when the weather's fine. It is a pleasant walk, downhill all the way! It takes me about forty minutes and I spend the time enjoying the peace and quiet of the early morning and thinking about the day ahead. I pass a lovely old church on the way and have to cross the river. Sometimes, if I have time, I stop to chat to one or two people on the way. If it is raining, I have to take the bus. The bus journey itself is quick but it’s a long walk from my house to the bus stop and then from the bus stop to the university. So it is actually quicker to do the whole journey on foot! It is cheaper too. The bus costs 54 pence, which is quite expensive for such a short distance…
Some helpful words
Subway /underground 地铁 Taxi/bus/ bike/bicycle/motorbike hitchhiking 搭便车 Long-distance bus 长途客车 Regular bus 班车 Shuttle bus 往返巴士
Marking criteria
本课程作业为短文写作,满分为 100
分,分为语言( 50 分),内容( 40
分)、和结构或格式( 10 分)三部分,三部分分值相加即为作文的总分。
语言 50 分用词巧妙,词汇丰富,表达手法灵活多变,写
作技巧精湛,明显超出普通水平。语法结构严谨。 40 分 用词正确,能灵活运用多种表达手法,偶有选
词错误。语法结构一般。 30 分(及格) 用词能力稍差,表达手法单一,选词
有较明显错误。语法结构需较多改进。 20 分 用词较差,表达手法单一。文中时用汉语词汇
或拼音。选词有明显错误。语法结构急需改进。
Example 1
I usually leave my home to my working place at about 7:40 am. It is not a short distance between my home and working place. I need take overground and underground tube to my office. Batong Line is the overground one and air conditioned. It runs every 3 minutes at peak time and have an average journey time of 30 minutes with passengers packed like sardines. After getting off the Batong Line I changed to the Line 1 tube which is the underground tube. Some of the train in Line 1 are not air conditioned, it is so terrible in these hot days. I found a lady beside me fainted because of the heat after twenty minites journy. I companied her got off the carriage and asked the tube staff take care of her. For no time admit, I continued my journey. When I got to my office, I thought is it so expensive of the time to survive in this big city.
Example 1
I usually leave my home to my working place at about 7:40 am. It is not a short distance between my home and working place. I need take overground and underground tube to my office. Batong Line is the overground one and air conditioned. It runs every 3 minutes at peak time and have an average journey time of 30 minutes with passengers packed like sardines. After getting off the Batong Line I changed to the Line 1 tube which is the underground tube. Some of the train in Line 1 are not air conditioned, it is so terrible in these hot days. I found a lady beside me fainted because of the heat after twenty minites journy. I companied her got off the carriage and asked the tube staff take care of her. For no time admit, I continued my journey. When I got to my office, I thought is it so expensive of the time to survive in this big city.
Example 2
I walked joyfully along the path that was lit up by the golden rays of the morning sun. Beautiful flowers of many colors were blooming. How fragrant they smelled! Little birds were singing in the trees, as if greeting me “good morning! good morning!”...my heart was bursting with happiness. .
我愉快的走在小路上,金色的朝阳洒满大地,盛开的花朵五彩缤纷,香气袭人,小鸟在树上歌唱,好像在向我道早安,我幸福的心花怒放
Main Differences between English and Chinese
1.narration and description in Chinese seem to be a bit more ornate or “flowery” than in English
2. Chinese and English-speaking people seem to look differently on the use of set phrases and expressions. Good English writing encourages originality and discourages “clichés”
e.g. 千方百计,七嘴八舌,三令五申 as cold as a cucumber
3. English-speaking writers tend to be less militant in tone and language than most Chinese .The idea is to “let the facts speak for themselves”.
4 They have different meanings of words
Read 读书 cook 做饭 drive 开车 X Let’s go and eat our meals
X He sang songs at the concert
X I don’t smoke cigarettes or drink wine.
5 They have different word formations
Suffix: er: work--worker
write--writer
员 : 教员 , 学员 , 演员 ly : beautifully,greatly,
wonderfully
地 : 完美地 , 高兴地 , 匆忙地
6 They differ in grammar:
Number of nouns
e.g.One book, two books
一本书 , 两本书 们 : 人们 , 同志们 , 朋友们 X 猴子们 , 书们 X 三个人们
7 They differ in Tense and aspect:
Work, worked, will work ( 现在 ) 工作 ,( 过去 )工作 ,( 将来 ) 工作
progressive: 正在 They are having lunch。 perfect: 已经
7 They have different word orders
毛主席 Chairman Mao
劳动模范 Model worker
东北 Northeast
衣食住 Food, clothing, and housing
6) Use of verb
我有点累了 I am a bit tired
他的眼睛是蓝的 He has blue eyes.
8 Different ways of thinking and association of thought and different cultural background.
You have my sympathy. 我很同情你 (x 你有我的同情 )
他老婆跑了 .His wife abandoned him.
(X His wife ran away.)
Exercise: 够意思 ! 不过我的意思你还是收下 , 不要不好意思 . How kind you are!
But I insist that you should receive it.
Don’t feel embarrassed.
Wrap-up
本课程作业为短文写作,满分为 100
分,分为语言( 50 分),内容( 40
分)、和结构或格式( 10 分)三部分,注意汉英差异
内容 40 分 文章内容切题,内容充实,思维新颖见解独到,思想
水平卓越。篇幅适当,行文流畅,有较强的可读性和趣味性。
28 文章基本切题,但思想表达能力有限,立意不清。篇
幅较短。句子结构一般,有时意思模糊,理解较困难。可读性及趣味性较弱
24 文章大致切题。篇幅不够,句子结构较差
Example 1
I usually leave my home to my working place at about 7:40 am. It is not a short distance between my home and working place. I need take overground and underground tube to my office. Batong Line is the overground one and air conditioned. It runs every 3 minutes at peak time and have an average journey time of 30 minutes with passengers packed like sardines. After getting off the Batong Line I changed to the Line 1 tube which is the underground tube. Some of the train in Line 1 are not air conditioned, it is so terrible in these hot days. I found a lady beside me fainted because of the heat after twenty minites journy. I companied her got off the carriage and asked the tube staff take care of her. For no time admit, I continued my journey. When I got to my office, I thought is it so expensive of the time to survive in this big city.
结构 9/10 分 文章语篇结构清晰,能够自如使用连接词连接
上下文,语篇逻辑关系清晰 6 分 文章语篇结构基本清晰,能够使用一些连接词
连接上下文,语篇逻辑关系基本清晰;
Contents
Capitalisation Comma vs. period Connecting sentences
and, so, but, also Layout of English passages
Indentation Full-block
CAPITALISATION-1
A Report on the Trips
“How was your trip?” I asked.
He said, “My trip to Yunnan was interesting.”
“My trip to Mount Tai,” she said, “was rather tiring.”
I asked, “Really? That’s funny.”
CAPITALISATION-2 First words of sentences (sentence
fragments) Key words in titles
Nouns, verbs, adjectives, adverbs, long prepositions
Prepositions Proper names
People Places (stars, continents, countries, cities,
streets) Languages Holidays Religions Titles (Mr. , Ms. , President, Sir, etc.)
CONNECTING SENTENCES and, but, so, or also
as a result, thereforeWhen, before, after…
CONNECTING SENTENCES1. I realise now that the boys loved
me.
2. I was little.
3. I often felt lonely and left out.
4. They were always having fun together.
5. I was too small to play with them.
6. I suppose I was quite independent.
CONNECTING SENTENCES
I realise now that the boys loved me, but
when I was little I often felt lonely and left
out. They were always having fun
together, but I was too small to play with
them. As a result, I suppose I was quite
independent
Punctuation & Basic Sentence Structures
It too far from Beiwai, I think you can change your work to Tianjin.
It’s too far from Beiwai. I think you can …
It’s too far from Beiwai, but I think you can …
As it is too far from Beiwai, I think you can …
It’s too far from Beiwai, so I think you can …
It’s too far from Beiwai; I think you can …
It’s too far from Beiwai, and I think you can …
Punctuation & Basic Sentence Structures
My brother like seeing films.
The man and her daughter is here.
It is early in the morning. I got up before my parents and …
Agreement
COMMA vs. PERIOD
Maria 是北京外国语大学的新生,她今年 19 岁,来自英国。
Maria is a new student at BFSU. She is 19 and is from Britain.
LAYOUT OF PASSAGESIndented style Full block style
I work at a software company that is located near Fu Xing men, Xicheng
district. My home is in Hai-dian District, it’s about 12 kilometre from my
workplace. There are many ways to went from my home to my office. It takes
almost one hour by bus to get to my workplace from my home. Although it is
long journey, The transport is convenient. There are three direct bus service.
No 716, No 732 and No 723 with air-condition, the fee of No 716 is very
cheap, only 1 Yuan, but No 732 or No 723 are 2 to 3 Yuans. I can also choose
to take the subway to save time, but it more expensive and I need to take
bus to get to the subway station. I take subway only when I got up late. It
spends me about 45 minute and 6 Yuan. The most expensive way to go to
work is taxi. It’s really expensive, but not save me much time actually. It always
cost over 20 Yuan because of the traffic, so I seldom get to work by taxi. If the
weather is fine and I am full of energy, I prefer to go to work by bike. On my
way to the workplace, I pass many university, the National Library, the Purple
Bamboo Park and Diaoyu Tai. It is also a good form of physical exercises for
me, too.
Can you improve it?I work at a software company that is located near Fuxingmen, Xicheng District.
There are many ways to go from my home to my office. It takes almost one
732 and No 723 with air-conditioning. The fee of No 716 is very cheap, only 1
subway to save time, but it will be more expensive and I need to take a bus to
about 45 minutes and 6 Yuan. The most expensive way to go to work is by taxi.
It’s really expensive, but not saving me much time actually. It always costs over
20 Yuan because of the traffic, so I seldom get to work by taxi. If the weather isfine and I am full of energy, I prefer to go to work by bike. On my way to the
workplace, I pass many universities, the National Library, the Purple Bamboo
Park and Diaoyutai. It is also a good form of physical exercise for me, too.
My home is in Haidian District, about 12 kilometres from my workplace.
Yuan, but No 732 or No 723 are 2 to 3 Yuan. I can also choose to take the
get to the subway station. I take the subway only when I get up late. It takes me
hour by bus to get to my workplace from my home. Although it is a long journey
the transport is convenient. There are three direct bus services – No 716, No
Agenda
The first assignment
The second assignment
Read the following text, imitating the assignment recording. Please record your own reading and upload it to the platform.
I was lucky enough to find a very nice place to live in soon after I arrived. The rent's only 45 pounds a week, plus my share of the bills. It's a room in a flat in a high-rise block. There are three other tenants and though we each have our own rooms, we share the sitting room, kitchen and bathroom. The rooms are quite well furnished and there's everything I need in the kitchen--except a coffee machine. There's a television in the sitting room but no telephone. That should save me quite a bit of money. I'll have to get used to writing letters instead! I haven't yet spent much time with the other tenants but I don't foresee any problems.
The block is in rather a rough neighbourhood but our next-door neighbour seems a nice guy. He's rather quiet but very helpful. He's already told me where to find the best pubs and so on. There are a few shops nearby so I can do most of my shopping locally, but I'll have to go into town for most other things. It's only about twenty minutes' walk from the town centre – which is just as well since the buses don't seem to run very often!
出处:高级日常英语 Unit 5- Activity 7- Task 2
100 分 语音准确清晰,表现稳定;能准确自如地运用所有语音技巧,如语调、
节奏、连读、弱读等。 90 分 除少数音外,语音基本准确清晰,表现基本稳定;能比较自如地运用多
数语音技巧,如语调、节奏、连读、弱读等。 80 分 语音基本准确,表现大体稳定,有时不够清晰;能够运用一些朗读技巧,
如语调、节奏、连读、弱读等。 70 分 多数语音准确,表现不够稳定,吐字不够清晰;朗读生硬,缺乏语音技
巧,如语调、节奏、连读、弱读等。 60 分 语音多不准确,中式发音很重,吐字很不清晰;朗读生硬,缺乏语音技
巧,如语调、节奏、连读、弱读等,造成一定听读困难。
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