Problem solving: write the rough draftThe goal: write the communication. Attitudes that affect this process are: - misconception: “you can write or you don’t.” Target:
use problem solving & clear thinking. You can do it!- misconception: confusion is bad and undesired. Target:
welcome confusion, helps identify when audience confused.
- misconception: focus on getting every detail and sentence correct before proceed. Target: let the ideas flow. Overediting as you go kills the flow of ideas.
- misconception: spend most time writing. Target: spend most time prewriting & revising.
What attitudes do you have?Manage stress: I want to and I canMonitor: have you checked the attitudes sufficiently?
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Writing the rough draftThe goal: write
Criteria: do it all without revising as you do it
The system: you, the computer and your files with all the information you
Constraints: time; don’t postpone; physical location where you write
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Writing the rough draftExplore:The real problem is to overcome your
stress and misconceptional attitudes. Focus on the target behaviours:
- Use a problem solving approach- Welcome confusion; that’s OK- Don’t edit or check spelling as you
write. Just let it flow.- Use positive self talk
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Writing the rough draftOrganize the folders with the info.Focus on the personal sense of accomplishment
you’ll get from creating this communication.Have confidence you can do this: think of past
times when you succeeded; you have the self determination, freedom & resources to make it happen; creating this communication is worthwhile, get support and encouragement from your support system.
Post the outline.Post the milestones & celebrations.Use a location free from distractions
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Writing the rough draft
Start writing the sections that are easiest for you.
For visuals, graphs and tables type*******insert Table here*******Don’t agonize over the style of the
visualsThe Introduction is usually the most
difficult part. Do it last.
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Writing the rough draft
Look backCelebrate. You’ve done it. You’ve
written the whole thing. Set it aside.Reflect on what you learned about
writing the rough draft.
What will you do the same the next time? What, different?
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RevisingGoal is to compare the draft with the audience’s questions and polish the
communication.Attitude is important:Misconception: only need single draft. Target, use as many drafts as
needed. I used 11 drafts for my latest book.Misconception: revising means polishing the grammar and punctuation
with the focus on the sentence level. Only 1.3% of the time would unsuccessful writers consider altering the whole message. Target: focus on macrostructure: organization, reasoning, paragraph and section level. Willing to rethink and rework the whole thing. Indeed, 20% of the time major changes made.
Misconception: spend 10% of total time revising. Target, spend most of time revising.
Misconception: unwilling to discard what you have written, ``I invested a lot of time writing this section. OK it really doesn`t apply but I want to include it somewhere!`` Target: discard if not pertinent.
Manage stress. I want to and I can.Monitor
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The goal: polish the rough draftCriteria: the five criteria: audience,
content, organization, style and formThe system: you, the computer & spell
check files on the computer. Constraints: time; don’t postpone;
physical location where you write
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Revising: explore
Set the report aside for several days.Systematically check the five criteria.
Start by imagining yourself as the audience.
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Revising: exploreExplore the problem: create a reminder checklist based
on the criteria.Here is anExample for resume
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RevisingBe systematic & work in the context of the
criteria.Recheck the overall outline, conclusions
and evidence.Be prepared to spend time polishing the
style of the visualsGunning Fogg index might help guide the
style check. Check Tools/word count.Have good resources close by for word
usage, punctuation, thesaurus
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Revising: audienceRead the whole communication playing the role of the
audience. In this role, answer the following:• What questions does this communication answer? • Were these the questions that were suggested in the
audience analysis?• Was there sufficient evidence to support the
conclusion?• Was the evidence mainly logic? Emotion? Ethos? • What words and terminology do I understand?• Were all new terms defined?• When I finished reading the communication did I feel
embarrassed? confused? insecure? ashamed? • While still playing the role of the audience, would you
characterize the writer as too knowledgeable? too technical? too mathematical? too folksy? too formal? talking down to me?
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Revising: audienceThe organization is incorrectly sender-based if:• i) a time-sequence of the person's actions, or
thoughts about a topic is used. "First, I considered..." "First, we surveyed the literature.." or
• ii) the major issues or topics with no focus. The prose might read "I considering the market, the four major issues are ....." The writer goes on to describe each. The audience asks "So What?" and there is no answer. The sender has focussed on a communication to inform rather than to address the audience's questions.
iii) check the summary. What was the main message?
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Revising, audiencean audience-based communication.i) gives a clear statement about what
the sender wants the audience to know, to feel or to do.
ii)has a focus on the conclusion or message.
iii)has explanations of difficult concepts.
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Revising audience
How to do it• Write down the Audience's questions. Add
your answer to those questions. Return to Prewriting activity and sweep through it again. Remember, you may be throwing away 20 pages and 50 hours of effort, but you are getting your message across. Start again.
• When you have completed the rework, write down for yourself what you learned about the writing process and the importance of the Audience analysis.
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Revising ContentWhat to look for• Not an "empty communication“ that lacks
evidence to substantiate the claims. Lack of content is sometimes difficult to spot.
• Sufficient evidence to accept or reject the sender's message. If you feel rather uneasy or that you must accept the person's message because they say so, then objective evidence is missing.
• Sometimes the evidence is substantiated by citing the work of others. The citations should be correct and complete.
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Revising content
How to do itIdentify one idea or conclusion
presented. Take that aside & elaborate on why you believe that idea. What are the issues? What made you write or believe that?
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Revising contentHow to do it• Check the citations. • Referencing must be used for charts,
tables, figures taken from others; for theories developed by others (even if you express them in your own words).
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Revising organizationEasy to spot errors; difficult to correct without returning to
prewrite.
Lack of a transition at the beginning of a major section
4. Choice of Assumptions4.1 Bulk Transport in the Fluid PhaseTo be rigorous, we must account for all transport
phenomena which contribute ...
Check for summary. If a summary is missing, is the whole communication focussed enough? A summary
should naturally flow. It should not be a tack-on.
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Revising styleFor words, accuracy, simplicity, interesting, coherence and emphasis• Accuracy
• Accuracy• Avoid Use• Locate situate• Increased high• obtained collect, drawn, taken, extracted, removed, read, computed,
estimated, derived or measured.• figure out calculate, compare derive• curve line or graph• values data, results, figures, numerals, numbers,
measurements, observations• “quite” true meaning is precisely, entirely or exactly• “quite” fairly, rather, approximately, reasonably• due to because of, attributed to, as a result of• undoubtedly probably• Percent percentage• proven proved• data calculated values,
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Revising styleAccuracyBe quantitative
Change in temperature Change to: An increase in temperature by 25oC
A number of motors were made recently Change to: On Tuesday, Nov. 6, six motors were made.
Play the piano Change to: For relaxation I play the piano about 1 h every day; have given seven concerts a year and play for about a dozen sing songs. I have learned how to perform under pressure
Units
60 ±1% hexane in water. Change to: 60 ±1% w/w hexane in water.
PoliteOther workers (16, 19) missed this point. Change condemnatory tone to: Smith(16) and Harvey (19) solved this problem when the heat capacity term was
neglected.
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Revising styleCoherenceProvide words to describe derivation1. dp = λv
dT T(Vv- Vl)
2 dp = λv dT T(Vv)
Improve this by inserting between Equations 1
and 2, If the temperature is not near the critical temperature, the molar volume of the liquid, Vl, can be neglected then
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Revising styleCoherence
Ambiguous words include as, while and forAs the current was increased the deposit turned black. Fault:
does this mean when or while or during? When the current was 15 amps., the deposit turned black.
Use the word as for comparisonsWhile should be used for at the same time as or during the same
time as. While should not be used to mean because, when or although.
Misplaced modifiersHe works on the first floor of Rogers and company in London
England among female dummies with nothing on.
Usually use the past tense.
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Revising styleCoherenceLocation of often, or onlyOnly instructions to the plant workers may include jargon terms.Instructions to only the plant workers may include jargon terms.Instructions to the plant workers only may include jargon terms.Instructions to the plant workers may only include jargon terms.Instructions to the plant workers may include only jargon terms.
Antecedents: Michelle gave Bridget the results, and she found they were
incorrect.
Dangling participleBy varying the voltage, the amperage jumped.
The subject of the sentence must do the “inging”
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Revising styleCoherenceAvoid Usedifferent than different fromequals to equalshelp but helpirregardless regardlessdata is data are
Do not confuse withalternate alternativeaffect (verb) effect (noun)between among
Use compare with for differences and compare to for similarities
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Revising styleSimple leave out trivial and obvious details
Place a beaker under the valve, open the valve and withdraw a sample replace with sample
universal and common method replace with common methodvery unique replace with uniquewhiter in colour replace with whiterabsolutely true replace with true Eliminate such words as case, factor, type, situation, instance, nature, condition, degree and
character and “in” and “with” phrases such as In the case of, In the instance of, In respect
to, With respect to, In regard to, With regard to, In connection with, In the matter of, In order to.
In many situations it has seemed as though the size of these tasks has become greater than that which previous technique could handle. replace with Often these new tasks could not be done with previous methods.
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Revising styleSimpleRecast sentences beginning with “It... It is
apparent that... recast as Apparently. It is clear that....
It is believed that the boundary layer theory... Confusion because we do not know who believes this theory
I believe that the boundary layer theory improve with The result indicates that the boundary layer theory.... improve with The result indicates that the boundary layer theory .....
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Revising style
InterestSentence length. Use a variety of length. If possible, replace passive verbs with
active. Be careful in your use of I, you and we.
Replace withAt an earlier date... previouslyThe question as to whether ... whetherIn spite of the fact that... Although
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Revising styleFor numerals1. Start sentences with words not numerals2. one-digit numbers are written unless
before abbreviation for units; eight people; 8 m
3. For a series of numbers, use all numerals: 30 pumps and 3 baseplates.
4. Report only significant figures5. Always us a zero before all decimal
places. Use 0.3 and not .36. Use numerals for all data.
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Revising styleNumeralsAmbiguity for data when handling very
large or very small numbers. pressure x 104, mm correctly represents
1 x 10-4 mm With the metric system and prefixes this
problem is solved.
ton, hundred weight, billion, trillion and gallon
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Revising styleNumeralsIn US and UK the decimal is a dot (.); in Europe, by a comma (,).
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Revising styleIntegral Tables for multivariable discrete data1. Exploit trends in the data. Do not arrange by test
run number.2. No information overload in a single table.
Consider using several tables3. Prefer tables to graphs when the percentage
error is not easy to see on graph.4. Group similar items together to prove the point.5. The principal comparison is the columns instead
of rows (because columns are easier to scan)6. Eliminate ditto marks by groups similar items.7. Include table caption above the table
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Revising styleFigures1. Use a title that says the message; number each figure2. Place figures close to the text that refers to that figure
but never before the textGraphs, to show trends1. Dependent plotted on the y-axis (ordinate) and
independent variable on the x-axis (abscissa)2. Label axes with name of variable, symbol and units.3. Include date and name of source.4. Clearly identify data points5. No lines between only two data points or beyond range
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Revising styleGraphs6. Don’t use dimensionless groups unless all variables in the
group have been changed unless you specify which variables were constant
7. Do not include the same variable on both axes 8. If use dimensionless group. Then use on both ordinate and
abscissa, not just one9. For dimensionless groups then the order of preference is
a. those derived from fundamental equations (Reynolds, Froude, Weber, Euler, Peclet, Strouhal, Cauchy.b. dimensionless groups from experimental data: friction factor, drag coefficient, catalyst effectiveness, Nusselt, Powerc) physical property combinations, Prandtl, Schnidtd) trivial dimensionless ratios. density difference to liquid density, particle to tube diameterse) combinations of dimensionless, Stanton
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Revising style10. Don’t repress rouge points.
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Revising style11. Select the correct type of graph paper, log-log, semi-
log, log probability. public cannot interpret. See trends first on linear paper. Random data often look OK on log-log
12. The origin should appear on almost all graphs (except on log paper where zero is non-existent),
13. Use convenient scales; not 13 29, 53.14. The data should refer to the same phenomena.15. Used SI prefixes, not powers of ten approach to label
units.16. Distinguish between calculated, theoretical and
measured points.17. Usually never have more than three lines/graph.
Label each.18. Do not show the same data in an integral Table and a
graph.
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Revising style19. Line density should be darkest for the
data, lighter for the axes.20. Label lines systematically and identify
data in the same sequence as the lines on the graph.
21. Use well accepted symbols for the data: ● ▲◆ ❍■❏
22. Avoid multicolours.23. If the figure cannot fit vertically on the
page, then place it so it can be read from the right.
24. Refer to graphs as Figures
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Revising styleBar charts1. Choose scale so as to show differences
without exaggeration.2. Don’t suppress zero, use percentage
or a right-left scale. 3. For symbols, show relative size by
duplication& not by bigger size.
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Revising styleBar charts; examples of incorrect suppressed zero, %
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Revising stylePie diagrams1. Do not slant them or use a removed wedge. 2. Choose colours carefully; yellow overestimates the
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Revising stylePhotos1. Remove distracting backgrounds.2. Include a scale or rule to show relative
size.3.For tools and disassembled complex
equipment select a view most comfortable for a right handed person.
GesturesOK for culture?
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Revising formatGrammar OK?SpellcheckPunctuation OK.single comma, insert understood wordcomma comma ,, or ( ) or - - insert phrasecomma and ,and or ; two complete Sn colon : list of stuff from upstream Snsingle dash – list of stuff from downstream Sn
Mechanics OK
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Revising Look back
Did the revised communication match the audience?
Content?Organization?Style?Format?
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DeliveryEngageWritten:Control panic as deadlines appear; I’ve
planned ahead, done a PPA and I can do this
Verbal:One of more stressful experiences I want to and I can
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DeliveryDefine the stated problemGoal: deliver completed, polished, credible
report or speechSystem: you, the audience, your report or
speech Criteria: on time, right place, right person(s)Constraints: unexpected events (mike doesn’t
work, your health, power failure), expense in duplication, location defined, facilities defined (projectors, handouts, break facilities), other presenters
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DeliveryExploreWrittenThe real problem is ethos (visual
credibility) and on-time. VerbalThe real problem is “sharing
experiencing” and practise, practise practise.
Need to details of the location & venue for speech
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DeliveryPlanPotential Problem Analysis: what could go
wrong, impact, your contingency plans.Verbal:Should I read my speech?How many visuals should I prepare? Max 1/min; usually 1/ 3minStressed about my accent and bad habits I
have, such as saying “Ahuuuu”Forget about them. First gain confidence is saying anything,
in getting the visuals to flow smoothly and in talking on your feet.
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DeliveryVerbalHow can I practice?Aloud in front of a mirror using visuals and timer
Audience includes experts or important individuals?Attitude “sharing” your experience;not an expert telling them.Or imagine all the audience sitting in bathing suits
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DeliveryVerbalWhen I try for eye contact I get distracted. What can
I do?Look at a line 1 m above audience’s heads
Should I say “thank you” when I’m finished?No
Handling Q&ARepeat the question
Greatest weakness of all the speeches you have heard?
Message wasn’t clear
‘That was a terrible speech!’10% love you, 10% hate you; check the 80% feedback
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Delivery
Do it
You have used a problem solving approach. You are ready.
Deliver
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DeliveryLook backWhat did I learn from the experience?What would I do differently?What would I repeat?
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Resume writing
Activity 9.Critique Mary Jane’s resume
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Outcomes:1.Dozen key ideas about communication2.Goal: five criteria for an effective product3.Problem solving process of writing4.Four stages in writing:
Prewriting, writing, revising, delivery
5.Audience analysis6.Resume writing
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