Expanding RACEA mini-lesson for improving constructed

responses

it’s not a 4!

Question: How does Diane Nash show bravery?Student Answer: Based on the text, Ms. Nash is and can be considered brave. “If the path was through the jailhouse, I would do that.” This quote explains how Diane Nash was brave by saying she would go to jail for equality.

The Reader Asks: How does going to jail exhibit bravery?

If the reader has to ask…

What else is it

missing?

Question: Use text evidence to explain a sacrifice Diane Nash made during the Civil Rights Movement.Answer: One of the sacrifices that Diane Nash did was going to jail. “…1962 I was arrested and sentenced to two years in prison for teaching non-violence to children in Jackson.” She went to jail while she was pregnant because teaching those kids nonviolence was very important to her.

The Reader Asks: How is going to jail a sacrifice?

Explanations= add “because” and link it back to sacrifice

it’s not a 4 until…

What else is it missing?

Synonym:

“cost”

equals an automatic low score.

Diane Nash did not spend two years (or her entire life) in jail. She spent ___________.

Diane Nash did not deliver her baby in jail.

Diane Nash did not go to war. She said that Jackson was “like a war zone.” How is this different?

Incorrect Information…

FIX IT

will impress your reader.

“I determined the speaker’s tone by the way he put his words together.”

Is this an 8th grade level response? “The speaker’s tone is reflective because it

mentions most of the heroes who stood up for injustice.” Is this an 8th grade level response?

Sentence structure and vocabulary…

The person scoring your exam loves variety.

Everyone else wrote: “Diane Nash went to jail while she was four months pregnant.”

You wrote: “Even though she was four months pregnant, Diane Nash willingly sacrificed her time, her safety, and possibly even her health by spending 30 days in jail.”

Which is more impressive? Which catches your eye the most?

Variety!

1. Choose one of your CRs to improve.

2. Skitch the change that you will make to boost your score.

From a 3 to a 4From barely a 4 to a solid 4

What changes can you make to your cr’s for improvement?