Lesson 7: Revising and Editing. Topics Global vs Local Revision Writing Reader-Based Prose Revising the Structure Local Revision. Global vs Local Revision. Global Revisions Revising for Purpose Revising the Thesis Revising the Structure Local Revision Revising for Language - PowerPoint PPT Presentation
Lesson 7: Revising and Editing
Lesson 7: Revising and EditingTopicsGlobal vs Local RevisionWriting Reader-Based ProseRevising the StructureLocal Revision
English Composition Two1Global vs Local RevisionGlobal RevisionsRevising for PurposeRevising the ThesisRevising the Structure
Local RevisionRevising for LanguageScrutinizing Paragraphs and SentencesEnglish Composition TwoRevising Globally before LocallyRevision is a process of re-seeing and re-conceiving.The initial, global revision should Open things up rather than shut them down.Ask what the draft is trying to do, how well it does it, and will it make sense to somebody else.English Composition TwoWriting Reader-based ProseReader-based papers will: Have a clear purpose.Establish why the question (and the answer) is significant.Say one main thing.English Composition TwoOrganizing the Paper Around a PurposeSolidify your purpose byClarifying your research question again.Asking yourself if your sources serve your purpose.Checking to make sure the quoted passages are surrounded with your own voice and analysis.English Composition TwoEstablishing SignificanceEnsure your topic is significant to readers by:Raising a question they want answered.Helping them see something familiar in a new way.Amplifying what they may already know and care about.Moving them emotionally.Taking a surprising point of view.English Composition TwoSaying One Main ThingThe revision process offers another chance to revisit your thesis.Does it accurately capture what you want to say?Is it specific enough?Is it interesting? English Composition TwoGetting Reader FeedbackTo guide readers feedback, you might use the following questions: What is the thesis?How is the paper organized? Was the organization logical? Were any parts not relevant to the thesis? What examples and types of evidence were most convincing? What two places could use more development? Did the introduction catch your attention? English Composition TwoWhat is the thesis? Asking readers to type out the thesis in their own words after reading the draft will help you see whether your main insight is made sufficiently clear.How is the essay organized? Asking them to describe in three or four sentences how you organized the essay will help you determine if the structure was clear.Was the organization logical? Was this the best way to present your information?Were any parts not relevant to the thesis? Did readers ever pause to wonder how a statement or paragraph was related to the thesis?What examples and types of evidence were most convincing? Did you engage readers emotions and appeal to their experiences in appropriate ways?What two places could use more development? If readers assume some places need more evidence, examples, explanation, they will be more likely to find them.Did the introduction catch your attention? You are probably writing about a topic that already interests you. Do you communicate that interest to them well?
8Revising the StructureDrafting often pushes us away from our working thesis and writing plan. Use these steps to clarify your thesis and structure as it currently exists. Take a break.Reread your draft.Rewrite your thesis and main points in a new space.English Composition TwoTake a break: Writing stirs up your emotions. Take a day to distance yourself from the draft, so you can read it more objectively.Reread your draft: Your draft will often stray from the working thesis as new ideas come to you. Reread your draft to discover the current direction of your thinking.Rewrite your thesis and main points in a new space: After you've read your draft, write down, in a new space, the overall point your draft is making. Then, write a brief explanation of each paragraph's main point and how it supports your thesis.
9Using Logical StructuresYour thesis may drive you to one of the following logical structures:Thesis to proofProblem to solutionQuestion to answerComparison to contrastCause and effect, or effect and causeKnown to unknown or unknown to knownSimple to complexEnglish Composition TwoLocal RevisionLocal Revisions includeRevising the VoiceScrutinizing ParagraphsScrutinizing SentencesEnglish Composition TwoRevising the VoiceReading your paper aloud to help identify the voice of the paper. Ask yourself:Is this the voice you want readers to hear? Does it sound like you? Is it appropriate for this paper?Can you identify areas where it sounds flat?Does the prose distract from what you are trying to say?English Composition TwoScrutinizing ParagraphsEach paragraph should present one idea and be organized around it. Break long paragraphs into shorter paragraphs.Look for minor or tangential ideas that belong somewhere else.
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Or watch in MyCompLab Resources > Writing > The Writing Process > Revising > > Revising for Paragraph Unity13Paragraph ChecklistFollow this checklist to sharpen each of your paragraphs. For each paragraph, Clarify the overall point or purpose.Advertise it in a topic sentence.Cut out what doesnt belong.Clarify the structure.English Composition TwoClarify the overall point or purpose: This may be a main point or a subordinate point or extended example that supports that main point. Do you understand how that point or purpose supports your thesis?Advertise it in a topic sentence: Is your overall point or purpose advertised in the first or second sentence of the paragraph?Cut out what doesn't belong: If your paragraph is too large, you might move subordinate points or additional examples into new paragraphs. Some details that are no longer relevant should be cut.Clarify the structure: Is each subordinating point and example ordered from most to least important? Do you include transitions to advertise that structure?
14Scrutinizing SentencesFollow this checklist to refine your sentences. For each sentence,Use active voice wherever possible.Replace weak verbs with strong verbs.Vary sentence length and combine sentences.Simplify sentences by reducing clutter.Replace stock phrases with fresher alternatives.English Composition Two