Up, Up and AwayImagine that you won a competition and the prize was a fight in a hot air balloon, something you had never done before. You write a diary the evening before you go on the fight and the evening after you have been on the flight describing your thoughts, feelings, and experiences.Please email a picture of your two diary entries or a word document to: year6.301@bdcs.org.uk(we do not need to see your plans 😊)

Planning – do this on separate paper so you have more room!Diary entry one (before):

Make notes about your thoughts and feelings the evening before the balloon fight:

Diary entry two (after):

Make notes about the experience and your thoughts and feelings:

When the balloon took off During the fight.

Make notes about your thoughts and feelings afterwards and how this compared with what you expected:

Try to include:

Sentence structure and punctuation: Adverbials: When we were all back at home Modal verbs: could, should Expanded noun phrases: huge, colourful

balloon with green stripes. Third person: mum said Subordinating connectives: because we were

high up… Past tense: I looked down Use of questions: could the balloon get

damaged? Range of punctuation: brackets, dashes,

colons etc.

Text structure and organisation Relationship between paragraphs or sections

e.g. links between the two different diary entries: definitely worth entering that competition… That was it… I was defying gravity.

Connection between opening/ending: terrified of heights / no longer afraid of heights.

Paragraphs are varied in length and structure.

Composition and effect

Viewpoint is controlled e.g. changes in diary writer’s reactions are carted throughout the entries: petrified… I feel slightly relieved. What if it crashed? No, no, it would not. what is I dropped my camera? No, it would be round my neck.

Vivid description: swooped, billowing, like a playset of tiny people

Reflecting showing viewpoint: it felt alien-like to walk back on earth’s atmosphere…

Some good examples – you are more than welcome to use these to help with your own writing. Try not to copy!